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Jake
August 24th, 2007, 09:43 PM
--Other--
1- The first couple episodes are a bore.
2- Jackie Walker from the Manaphy movie will not be appearing.
3- I will try my best to get out at least one episode out every 7 days.
4- No one can join the comic.
--Episodes--
Season 1- The New Trainee!
Episode 001 (http://i10.tinypic.com/4mmk594.png)
Episode 002 (http://i11.tinypic.com/4kktb86.png)
Episode 003 (http://i10.tinypic.com/4yzo0le.png)
Episode 004 (http://i9.tinypic.com/4p2lx1u.png)
Episode 005 (http://i10.tinypic.com/5z54oie.png)
Episode 006 (http://i16.tinypic.com/4q7rodx.png)
Episode 007 (http://i11.tinypic.com/53ok0uc.png)
Episode 008 (http://i14.tinypic.com/6c8ip3k.png)
Episode 009 (http://i14.tinypic.com/4pesk20.png)
Episode 010 (http://i12.tinypic.com/6fqo1tf.png)
Episode 011 (http://i12.tinypic.com/4mluko5.png)
Episode 012 (http://i15.tinypic.com/6af4dnn.png)
Episode 013 (http://i19.tinypic.com/6bu8k0o.png)
Episode 014 (http://i16.tinypic.com/4t8vbdu.png)
Episode 015 (http://i13.tinypic.com/4yg8i2v.png)
Episode 016 (http://i4.tinypic.com/4mt6c8i.png)
Episode 017 (http://i7.tinypic.com/4taoc41.png)
Episode 018 (http://i12.tinypic.com/5xfu4pc.png)
Episode 019 (http://i11.tinypic.com/4vhkapj.png)
Season 2- Sprucing Up the Power
Episode 020 (http://i18.tinypic.com/6f4utk2.png)
Episode 021 (http://i6.tinypic.com/5yimpf8.png)
Episode 022 (http://i6.tinypic.com/66y994k.png)

--Characters--

--Credit--
Fangking Omega for Goldernrod City and the Johto Jet Boat.
Gridiron for the houses in Goldenrod City.
Ragey for the palletes I used on the characters.
My friend 'JackAttack' from FC for loving Rangers so much, and never letting me down when it comes to spirit.
Dragonpike, LightShock, and Rebirth47, for helping me with ideas for the comic.
Dragonpike again, for major idea contributing. He's basically my #1 man when I need ideas.
4Kids and Yu-Gi-Oh GX for completely letting me rip off them by making a school on a island with 3 sets of students.
Coronis for his 1st, 2nd, and some of the 3rd generation Pokémon sprites.
Kyledove for the side and back sprites for the first 25 Pokémon.
[Angel of Twilight:: for using his Speech bubble tails and nice criticism.
Matt Silver for giving some great criticism.
And Nintendo and Game Freak for creating Pokémon. (Everyone says it.)
--Updates--
8-25- 1:42 A.M. EA- Made thread.
8-25- 1:57 A.M. EA- Added character bios.
8-25- 2:29 A.M. EA- Editted the text bubbles for future use. Thanks Matt Silver.
8-25- 1:50 A.M. EA- Added --Other-- section.
8-25- 3:32 A.M. EA- Added Episode 4-6.
8-25- 6:58 P.M. EA- Added Episode 7-9.
8-26- 1:09 A.M. EA- Added Episode 10-13.
9-1- 5:05 P.M. EA- Added Episode 14-19 and sadly had to remove the bio section.
9-9- 7:19 P.M. EA- Added Episode 20-21.
9-10- 11:02 P.M. EA- Added Episode 22.

Matt Silver
August 24th, 2007, 10:14 PM
Not bad at all, but not 10/10 (Which is expected, because nobody's perfect).

The first thing that hits me is the Speech Bubbles. The red text next to the red circles looks cluttered and pushed together too much, so get rid of the circles on the edge of the speech bubbles.

On Comic 1, I got a little confused. What Pokemon was that delivering the letter to the red-headed guy, and why did it just magically appear there?

The text used on speech bubbles is oddly blurry and a little big IMO, what kind of text do you use (Times Roman, Ariel etc?). Also, why is the text all red?

Spriting. Don't mix styles (RS and FRLG), I think you may have done it with your main character, but I'm not sure. Also, why don't any of your characters walk (It's recommended that they walk, instead of just stand in every scene)?

Pokemon. The overworld sprites are a little ugly IMO, and just look weird (Sorry, can't elaborate too much).

Mapping. Seems alright, but the shaded buildings look weird (Why not add like lines like the Goldenrod ones, instead of just the shading.

Plot. Like it, it seems fairly original, but it is kinda rushed (As in, in one comic, he leaves, arrives the next one, and is doing something completely different by No 3) - maybe it's just me, who likes to explain things out a little.

With all it's little things that bug me, this comic is alright in the end. Keep at it, though, because you don't have to listen to me. :)

Jake
August 24th, 2007, 10:19 PM
The main character is an edit of a Paul/Shinji sprite I made.
http://i9.tinypic.com/54145ra.png
The Pokemon was a Zubat and it flew down, the next frame was supposed to show it in the air flying away, but the text bubble blocked it.
I'm using Pokemon RS text.
The Venasaur was made from Kyledove, and I editted the Houndoom.
The walking I couldn't really do much on, they appeared in each room in #3 cause I didn't have much time to finish.
Thanks for the crit though, don't feel like I shouldn't listen. Cause it will help. :D

Matt Silver
August 24th, 2007, 10:22 PM
The main character is an edit of a Paul/Shinji sprite I made.
The Pokemon was a Zubat and it flew down, the next frame was supposed to show it in the air flying away, but the text bubble blocked it.
I'm using Pokemon RS text.
The Venasaur was made from Kyledove, and I editted the Houndoom.
The walking I couldn't really do much on, they appeared in each room in #3 cause I didn't have much time to finish.
Thanks for the crit though, don't feel like I shouldn't listen. Cause it will help. :D

1. OK.

2. I thought it looked like Zubat,

3. Again, I thought the text looked familar.

4. Kyledove? I thought it was the other guy, who's name I do not remember...

5. Just try to do it in the future

6. I said that you shouldn't listen/read because a lot of people don't like people poking holes in every little thing. All good.

Keep at it.

[NovaPirate]
August 25th, 2007, 05:41 AM
Coronis, Matt?

Yeah, Kyledove continued the Coronis Project. Somewhat.

Well, it definitely seems a bit rushed, and the RS font is a little too big for the bubble, I think. You block a lot of important things with you speech bubble, so you need to work on that. But it's a pretty slick comic.

It be gnarly.

Jake
August 25th, 2007, 11:33 PM
I added 3 new episodes, and 3 more bios. Check it out on the first post.

Matt Silver
August 25th, 2007, 11:43 PM
I added 3 new episodes, and 3 more bios. Check it out on the first post.

Read em all. Pretty good work (The character's walked!). My only nitpick is that the bubbles for the "Beep" sound are too big.

All good. Later!

Jake
August 26th, 2007, 02:58 PM
Added episode 7-9 to the list and editted some bio info.

Insomnium
August 26th, 2007, 03:56 PM
Hey, great comic so far! It was a little bit confusing , but overall, pretty sweet. Can't wait to read more!

Dior
August 26th, 2007, 06:17 PM
Oh, mediocre comic imo 8|. I'll judge more appropriately once you create some more.__________________________:ver cool:

Lickilicky
August 26th, 2007, 06:36 PM
i rly liek the idea of rangers! plz make more!

Bijou
August 26th, 2007, 06:46 PM
I agree with Lickilicky. It's an awesome comic, but like Matt said, it has it's fault's. Everything does.

Jake
August 26th, 2007, 09:11 PM
@Dior: Alright, I hope you'll like what you see.
@Lickilicky and Bijou: Thanks for the comments.
I added 3 more episodes, 10-13. Check it out on the first post.

Rolcol
August 26th, 2007, 09:59 PM
Hiya Jake! I guess I'll be sticking around to see your comics here ;). Good work :D

Jake
August 26th, 2007, 10:03 PM
Hiya Jake! I guess I'll be sticking around to see your comics here ;). Good work :D

Hey Roly. :D
I hope you like the comic as much as TWIY. :D Stick around. I mean it.

Matt Silver
August 26th, 2007, 10:21 PM
I don't want to offend, but Jake, have you made multiple accounts?

Doesn't anyone think it's wierd that 2 people join today, and post in his comic as the first post ever? If it was one person, I would believe it, but if it's two? Come on. I'm referring to Lickilicky and Bijou. If you are doing this Jake, I won't report you or anything... (If you want more viewers, you can post on SPPF or something...)

On Topic: You're comic is going good, and you are flying through them fast (My guess is that you a lot earlier, then posted?). Storyline is solid, so keep it up.

Later!

Jake
August 26th, 2007, 11:03 PM
About them, they're my friends from another forum. Dior = Mark
. Lickilicky = Rick. Bijou = Roger. Rolcol = Rolando.
Ontopic: Thanks, actually I just make 3 a day then post them.

Bkue
August 27th, 2007, 04:29 PM
Hey Jake, good comic. I just don't understand the last part, might be explaint the next comic. One thing I don't like is the huge bubble, half the time you can't tell whos talking.

Dior
August 29th, 2007, 11:33 PM
It's getting better, slowly but surely. Keep it up jake, just make it more exciting.

Jake
September 1st, 2007, 01:07 PM
Sorry for the late updates, been busy with school preparations. I added Episode 14-19, and had to remove the characters due to space.
EDIT: And I had to remake Episode 17 and 18 3 times. The original script was for Gold and Silver to save them. The second was for Enkai to learn his true strength and Shellos evolve.

[NovaPirate]
September 1st, 2007, 09:03 PM
Yay! But how did they get out. You should have elaborated it a bit more. Well, as I said before, I love your mapping, nice job. Good job on the new overworlds, you're own of the few spriters that makes all the sprites for himself.

Jake
September 1st, 2007, 09:57 PM
Shellos used Mud Bomb then Water Pulse to send it flying like a grenade. It hit the door and knocked it down, there was a dust effect but it kind of blended in to the floor.
Thanks, all I can do is OW's and mapping now. :/ I used to scratch battle sprites, but I lost my talent after 4 months. :/
I should get some more episode out soon, but school starts Tuesday. I'll try my best to get 1 Episode out at least every 7 days.

Dragonpike
September 2nd, 2007, 10:52 AM
Nice Work Jake,This is better than your FC work ;)

"roll over!"

Jake
September 9th, 2007, 03:19 PM
Sorry for the drought of comics, school has me totally drained.
Episode 20 and 21 are now out though.
Be prepared for a spoiler later - I may tell you guys something about a certain set of things that have allot to do with the world of Pokémon.

[NovaPirate]
September 9th, 2007, 04:50 PM
Arrgh. New comics. Sour this time.

Good, but a tad dry in the plot section. Will we be hearing from any of the other rangers sometime soon when Team Aqua/Magma come to maul some more people?

Golden Sun
September 9th, 2007, 05:10 PM
I really like this comic. I hope you post some more. 10/10, really great sprite designs and I guess the personality fit the character ^-^;;;

Jake
September 9th, 2007, 07:28 PM
I really like this comic. I hope you post some more. 10/10, really great sprite designs and I guess the personality fit the character ^-^;;;

Lol, thanks. :D
Here it is- major spoilers.
http://i19.tinypic.com/5ymed0j.png
1- ShimmerBall - A ball the improves a Pokémon's strength and changes its physical appearance. Made from the Adamant and Lustrous orbs.
Works best on- Everything.
2- SealBall - A ball that skips the use of having to put a PokéBall in casing.
Works best on- None.
3- FossilatedBall - A ball that Professor's use to catch Pokémon that are re-awakened from fossils.
Works best on- Post Fossilated Pokémon.
4- TempoBall - The official PokéBall of the Pokémon Rangers. It temporarily catches a Pokémon, then releases them after 4 uses.
Works best on- Everything.
5- PokéBall - Rocket, Magma, Aqua- The balls that evil teams use to catch Pokémon. All they are are painted PokéBalls.
Works best on- None.
8- ScentBall - A ball that is greatly scented to attract a Pokémon to enter it.
Works best on- Heavy eaters.
9- ShadeBall - Used by people in the Orre region to catch Shadow Pokémon, and purify them.
Works best on- Shadow Pokémon.
10- RevoBall - A wonderfully decorated PokéBall. Only 100 were made, and can be sold for high prices. Many attempts at re-creation were made.
Works best on- Everything.

Dragonpike
September 10th, 2007, 05:26 PM
Hmm,Nice work Jake ;)

The Revoball looks the most intresting to me.

Lawl,The scent ball must be like a Master ball for a snorlax! XD

Jake
September 10th, 2007, 07:01 PM
lol, You get half credit. You helped me with the ideas.
Anyway, added Episode 22. It introduces a major plot twist.
*What a twist!*

[NovaPirate]
September 11th, 2007, 06:54 AM
Pretzel.

I <3 your speech bubbles.

And who is the glowing red dot. Why is he a glowing red dot. And what's with the glowing red dot, if he isn't that. Is it a speaker of some sort?

Jake
September 11th, 2007, 12:09 PM
It's the ShimmerBall that was put in the storage.
MAJOR SPOILER - Reply to AoT
It's Psyduck, all the Pokemon caught in the ball have to go through an extreme change mentally and psyichally. The Psyduck got a to much and his learned how to speak English from the few words he heard. I won't reveal the rest.

Dragonpike
September 11th, 2007, 03:32 PM
Lawl,Teh Duck Iz Plotting!

Thx for the cred Jake!