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Lash
October 7th, 2007, 08:17 PM
Pain and Love; Two emotions that go hand in hand.
One a dark cloud; One leading to pain in the end.
Keep the pain inside; No one will ever know- The secret.
The secret of love you have held; Leads to pain inside.
Never releasing these secrets; Leads to haunting pain.
A quiet eerie pain; From never admitting love.
The love forever held inside; The pain never coming out.
Becomes Haunting; For a lifetime of holding in.
A quiet pain...


First poem ever written.

Romance Hero
October 7th, 2007, 08:41 PM
ah, i don't know what to say... its kind of jumbled and i fail to see the explanation of the piece...

i think you're music is amazing though. Pandora and One last kiss are my favorite.

Pain and Love; Two emotions that go hand in hand.
One a dark cloud; One leading to pain in the end.
Keep the pain inside; No one will ever know- The secret.
The secret of love you have held; Leads to pain inside.
Never releasing these secrets; Leads to haunting pain.
A quiet eerie pain; From never admitting love.
The love forever held inside; The pain never coming out.
Becomes Haunting; For a lifetime of holding in.
A quiet pain...


First poem ever written.


Here, i don't mean to attack your poem in any way but here is my poem for the theme "Quiet Pain"

The pain screaming to let it out,
bombarding me with death-causing shouts.
I tried to keep myself away from you,
only to find myself, closing in, who,
cant seem to stop and start at the same time,
when silence commences it will be the bottom line.
snap to my senses and bear the only thought,
that it hurts everytime to think that i was bought.
But now i realize to cure me of the pain
because there is no love if i'm to be restrained,
so i let it all out and pain is no more
i wait for you on "Peaceful Shore"