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melod.ii ous demyx~♪
October 9th, 2007, 02:42 PM
Heh. I hope you can all see this okay, If not then ... I'm really sorry >.<
Err, I love this section and enjoy reading what you guys write, because some of the work here is absolutely fabulous. So I decided to post something~ and I hope to get some feedback. Enjoy~


It Doesn’t Never End

Life’s like a roller coaster ride.

You’re thrown into it much too soon.
There are many scary moments
filled with plenty of twists and turns.
The ride is sometimes bumpy, and
things seem to flash before your eyes.
Sometimes blurring altogether.

There is smooth track along the way,
where things just seem to fall in place.
Enjoy the view from the very
pinnacle of all that exists,
before plummeting downward, and
it feels as if you’ve lost it all.

There will be strangers at your back
and you will sometimes watch as they
toss their cookies all over you.
Yesterday’s lunch can be cleaned up,
forgiven but not forgotten.
Hope’s left in a different chair.

Then there’s those individuals,
victims in the seat next to you
as you hang onto each other
Together through the entire ride.
You remember that there are those
in the same boat as you, because

You are never really alone.

Along the way, wishes, dreams.
Anticipation grows, wanting
to reach the finish line, and you
look back; remembering, thinking
as the ride slows, trying to see
Dents you have left along the way.

You suddenly realize all you
feared wasn’t so big after all.
Every loop had been overcome.
A strong urge flows through you to do
it again, and laugh this time, loud.
For the ride ends much too quickly.

Life’s like a roller coaster ride.


Thanks for your time~

Romance Hero
October 15th, 2007, 08:13 PM
life definitely is like a roller coaster ride, ive heard it said much before. i see in your poem some perspectives that someone would normally not see when on a roller coaster, but then of course for others, life zooms by, and ends in a flash. we also have our ups and downs like a roller coaster, this is an awesome insight.

Richard Lynch
October 16th, 2007, 03:01 AM
I liked this... it actually reminds me of an old quote from the X-Files, made by the Cigarette-Smoking Man:

"Life is like a box of chocolates. A cheap, thoughtless, perfunctory gift that nobody ever asks for. Nonreturnable because all you get back is another box of chocolates. So you're stuck with this indefinable whipped mint crap that you mindlessly wolf down when there's nothing else left to eat. Sure, once in a while there's a Peanut Butter Cup or an English Toffee. But they're gone too fast and the taste is... fleeting. So you end up with nothing but broken bits filled with hardened jelly and teeth-shattering nuts. And if you're desperate enough to eat those, all you've got left is an empty box... filled with useless brown paper wrappers."

Perhaps it's a pessimistic version of your poem, but I had to stick it in here. ;)

Good job on the poem!

melod.ii ous demyx~♪
October 16th, 2007, 11:03 AM
Thanks you two, so much~

@Liaison Hero: -squee- You're such an awesome author! I love your romance poems, xD Sorry I haven't commented. And, You're so right, and life is veiwed so differently by everybody! So it really can't be defined, anyways, your comment is well appreciated. So Thanks.

@Richard Steel: ._o I've surprisingly never seen the X-files... heh ^^"
But thanks so much for posting that! It was really interesting. o_. Although, a sad way to think of chocolate! Hehe, anyways, Thanks for the comment. Any insight from you is greatly appreciated~

Romance Hero
November 5th, 2007, 09:47 PM
I know this is late... but your title is a double negative... ^^