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Manaphy1128
November 10th, 2007, 11:04 PM
I've made impressions, many of them bad. So, I think starting new will be better. I am such a natural disaster...

Anyway, this one is a favorite of mine.

Reflection

They do it with mirrors
They do it with glass.
They do it to see if they look nice.
Just don't stand there for too long,
Concieted girl.

I look in the ocean,
And the nearby pond.
I gaze and think whatever happend,
Why is this water dirty.

I look towards my window,
Washed out with rain.
When I look in it,
The liquid falling makes me look
As if I'm crying.

They do it with mirrors
They do it with glass.
They don't really how to reflect.

Well, I guess it's just a random poem, a prompt, the title "Reflection", in a contest I didn't win.
(Which I really hope you can tell exactly why)

Romance Hero
November 10th, 2007, 11:26 PM
I've made impressions, many of them bad. So, I think starting new will be better. I am such a natural disaster...


I look towards my window,
Washed out with rain.
When I look in it,
The liquid falling makes me look
As if I'm crying.



I love this part, I can really see it, when you look at your own reflection and when the rain slides down the window... it looks like you're crying. That was wonderful.

I can't say why you didn't win... It could have been picky critics... but, who can put a rating on poetry if it comes from your mind?

Good read, I hear you have quite an amazing talent for creativity.

shinobieddy
November 12th, 2007, 08:25 AM
I love this part, I can really see it, when you look at your own reflection and when the rain slides down the window... it looks like you're crying. That was wonderful.

I can't say why you didn't win... It could have been picky critics... but, who can put a rating on poetry if it comes from your mind?

Good read, I hear you have quite an amazing talent for creativity.

I agree! Yep, I agree.... nice!