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Romance Hero
December 23rd, 2007, 05:31 PM
I was listening to some Soul and R&B songs on the radio, and just wanted to make my own. I can't think of a specific beat to go along with, so it'll be similar to reading a poem.


I see it's all clear the window shines through
I believe what I dream comes right from you
There's a reason I close my eyes whenever you pass me by,
And no reason why I can't quite speak, I wanna run and hide.
And the ice, oh so cold, the winter cools me out,
But the fire, from your arms, just melts me to my heart


So... This is a love song...
Where I clear out all my feelings
This is my love song,
It's my only work of art
Collaborate me, tie a knot, baby this is all I got.
Oh, love song... Just listen.

Wonders come and go, like seasons, there's only four.
Five if you count all the future I foresee.
If you call it quits that only makes it three,
I can live with the two of us, just you and I,
But if I'm all alone, I'm sure it only makes me wanna die.

So... This is a love song,
I'm callin' out to you
Girl, my affection so strong,
What am I gonna do?
I see the world forming day, Only a few words you gotta say.
Love song... Love song.

Short, and not much to it... Well, it's my first try at a song, and imagine Mario singing it, haha.

bna_li
December 25th, 2007, 06:36 PM
It could definitely flow better, but nice job.

Romance Hero
December 25th, 2007, 06:38 PM
You know what, I'm looking back on it and I'm realizing how "ew" it is >.> I must have been half-minded when I did this.

bna_li
December 26th, 2007, 05:38 AM
Hm. I'll tell you how you could make it more fluent. For each line, you should try and have the same number of syllables. Hm. Example.

You should let me love you (6)
Let me be the one to (6)

Get it? Try writing another one, and I'll write a song.

MrRandomIDon'tCare
December 29th, 2007, 05:57 AM
Can I use these lyrics to make a song for my YouTube videos please? I'll say they're your lyrics. Please??

Romance Hero
December 29th, 2007, 08:27 AM
Um... hmm... that's a toughie. Sure, I don't mind if you use the lyrics, I think it'll be interesting how others will see it into perspective of sound. :)

MrRandomIDon'tCare
December 29th, 2007, 01:12 PM
Ok! Thanks! I'll PM you the YouTube link when I've recorded it.