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Lord Mike
January 13th, 2008, 03:19 PM
The 'Pathetic' Chronicles

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A Story Concerning the Sad Cheating New England Patriots

CHAPTER 1: The Start of It All!!!
The New England Patriots are a great football team, but they cheated. The New England Patriots 'ran the table' during the regular season, but they cheated. And more importantly, THEY CHEATED!!!

The Patriots were caught during the regular season copying the Jets awesome defensive plays. Little did they know, it would be THEIR DOWNFALL!!! *dun dun dun*

So, Bill The Baby Belichick lost half a million $, and the Patriots team lost half a million $. Little did the 'Manginious' coach of the New York Jets know, NFL commissioner Roger Goodell said something behind the scenes that would change the way the NFL is played today. 'These cheating Patriots are the best thing that ever happened to the NFL' said he 'In fact, our ratings are through the roof. So from this day forward, we will become the worst refs ever and allow the Patriots to go 16-0! Yeee-hah!

So their spiteful plan was soon put into action...

Lily
January 13th, 2008, 09:14 PM
Too short. A summary does not constitute as a chapter. Put more time into it.

pokepix
January 16th, 2008, 05:44 AM
I am not writer so cannot really comment

Jaimes
January 30th, 2008, 03:13 AM
Yeah - I thought Pathetic was a fitting name.

Try rereading it and you'll see how its badly done (e.g Yeee-hah!, and being to lazy to write dollars) just brings it down. As well as that, it looks insanely dull unless you are a American football fan.

Careful With That Axe, Pichu!
January 31st, 2008, 08:21 PM
This story does not meet our standards in OW.

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