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BurstX
January 31st, 2008, 05:09 PM
ok this is my first comic ever...so here we go you better love these and if you dont too bad ^_^

POKEMON BATTELERS



Character Bios: http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/codybio-1.png http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/ashleybio.png http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/mikaylabio.png
COMICS:
The Journey Begins pt1 (http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/mycomic1.png)
The Journey Begins pt 2 (http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/comic-2.png)
The Journey Begins pt 3 (http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/mycomic2-1.png)
Now We're Getting Somewhere...Sort-of (http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/comic4.png)
Pokemon Battelers (http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/pokemonbattelers3p5-1.png)
Introductions (http://i256.photobucket.com/albums/hh190/burstninjax/comic6.png)
Island Eight (http://i256.photobucket.com/albums/hh190/burstninjax/comic7.png)
New Recruit (http://i256.photobucket.com/albums/hh190/burstninjax/comic8.png)


CUSTOM MAPS
batteler base http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/pokemonbattelerbase.png
Eight Island http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/mikaylaisland.png
Contest Hall http://i256.photobucket.com/albums/hh190/burstninjax/contestarea-1.gif

credits:
the spriters resource
sweetsmoochum from pokecharms
pokesho

LATEST COMIC:
http://i256.photobucket.com/albums/hh190/burstninjax/comic8.png

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
January 31st, 2008, 05:14 PM
hm...
as I said through PM before,

work on these:

1. Chariters
2. Plot
3. Effects
4. Layout

k?

I'm sure this will be atleast interesting. ^^

BurstX
February 1st, 2008, 01:10 PM
ok well here it is omic two... and three

The Journey Begins pt 2 (http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/comic-2.png)
The Journey Begins pt 3 (http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/mycomic2-1.png)
and starting with comic four i will make six panles...okay have fun reading

[NovaPirate]
February 1st, 2008, 03:33 PM
Work on grammar. Periods, capitalizations, spelling.
Stop using periods. It really gets annoying after the third speech bubble in one panel with '...'

Don't mix styles. Styles are like Vinegar, Oil, and Water. Fr/Lg stays with Fr/Lg, RSE stays with RSE, and MD stays with MD. They don't like to be mixed up. That includes maps, sprites, etc.

And 'Battelers' is actually 'Battlers'.

BurstX
February 1st, 2008, 03:42 PM
...i like the use of md sprites...and idont really plan on scratching all the sprites of pokemon i need...also i spelt it wriong for a reason that you will find out later in the comic...um as for the use of fr/lg sprites...other than places i wont be mixing ows again...so i think that solves all the problems

[NovaPirate]
February 1st, 2008, 03:58 PM
You purposely put periods right there, didn't you.
Anyways, you still haven't said anything about the periods or grammar. Are you going to address those?

BurstX
February 1st, 2008, 04:03 PM
...yes my grammer will get better...but the periods symbolize a pause...not just a ...um i guess i could use a comma, so ill probably start that...i hope that helped

BIG UPDATE CHARACTER BIOS ARE UP

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
February 2nd, 2008, 02:59 PM
hm...

Your chariters bios are just sprites,

but since you sent to the new full ones through PM,
I have to say the bio text needs to be bigger. I could barely read it.

Keep up with the comic, Burst.

BurstX
February 4th, 2008, 06:06 PM
...you have to click them...then it goes to the bio...but i will make the text bigger...also comic 4 will be out by the end of the weekend

EDIT:...um sorry for not getting the comic up...its not like people care...T.T well if you peopl;e want you can make a character for the comic...also you have to click the sprites to go to the bios...

...ok im making a new post because i feel like it yell at me later
heres
comic 4 now we're getting somewhere...sort of (http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/comic4.png)

EDIT: HERES COMIC FIVE Pokemon Battelers (http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/pokemonbattelers3p5-1.png)
also edited bios are up

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
February 10th, 2008, 12:01 PM
hm... intresting.

I'm curious what these battlers are.
keep up the nice work, Burst.

[NovaPirate]
February 10th, 2008, 01:11 PM
Did you seriously say 'That's the cool way to spell it.'
Could you at least have come up with a reasonable excuse? Maybe make it a joke/pun that reoccur (like the bad guy/rival/random person/Pokemon comes and asks the same question).

And you need to explain why he took him to the Batteler HQ. 'Like, I just decided to take you to our Secret HQ for kicks. Because we have nothing better to do.'
Also, if you're going to spell Battlers wrong, I suggest yo spell it wrong all the time.

Work on your capitalizations some more as well.
Good luck!

BurstX
February 18th, 2008, 08:14 AM
ok guys heres an update on the battelers

http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/bluebatteler.png blue batteler specializing in water types, he has a wailmer mantine, and mudkip

http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/redbatteler.png red batteler, specializing in fire types, he has magmar and torchick

http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/blackbatteler.png black batteler, specializing in ghost and dark types, he has banette shuppet and duskull

http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/yellowbatteler.png yellow batteler, specializing in electirc types, she has pikachu and magnazone

http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/pinkbatteler.png the pink batteler, specializing in normal types, she has delcatty porygon and aipom

the pokemon battelers headquarters
http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/pokemonbattelerbase.png

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
February 19th, 2008, 09:45 AM
to tell you the truth, the battlers are almost similar to the power rangers. XD

but they're neat, can't wait for the next comic.

BurstX
February 19th, 2008, 09:48 AM
...lol they are actually based off the power rangers...yeah i was bored

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
February 19th, 2008, 09:53 AM
...lol they are actually based off the power rangers...yeah i was bored

Check out Abby's FC.

I asked if you wanted me to fix your OWs for the battlers.

BurstX
February 19th, 2008, 09:58 AM
thanks achy that would be cool if you had some ideas for them

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
February 19th, 2008, 10:03 AM
when I'm done, can I use them too for my comic?

Mike2494
February 19th, 2008, 10:27 AM
I dont know why, but I really like it...I love it how you put the Pokemon into the base, they are from Mystery Dungeon, right?

BurstX
February 19th, 2008, 03:53 PM
yup all tyhe pokemon ows are pmd and the trainers are all r/s/e the places are fr/lg and r/s/e in some cases

Charchic
February 19th, 2008, 04:20 PM
I think the comic is really good and quite funny. But there is one problem. You told us there is a reason for the mistake in the word Battelers. And the reason just looks like you thought, "Upps. I made a mistake, better make up a cheesy way to cover this up now!!!!" And it doesn't really please the reader, it's a bit dull. And I don't really like the Battelers. But there is one great thing. The backgrounds. Did you make that base yourself! Cos it looks really good.

BurstX
February 19th, 2008, 06:03 PM
I think the comic is really good and quite funny. But there is one problem. You told us there is a reason for the mistake in the word Battelers. And the reason just looks like you thought, "Upps. I made a mistake, better make up a cheesy way to cover this up now!!!!" And it doesn't really please the reader, it's a bit dull. And I don't really like the Battelers. But there is one great thing. The backgrounds. Did you make that base yourself! Cos it looks really good.

...okay i cant tell you the importance of the spelling of battelers, but i did make the base, and also i will be posting anycustom maps i make fyi...oh and you may not like the battelers now but just wait...*evil laugh*

Charchic
February 19th, 2008, 06:33 PM
Oooh! Now I cannot wait to see the next eppy lmao!

BurstX
February 21st, 2008, 09:41 AM
the new comic is up

http://i29.tinypic.com/2dhtv6h.png

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
February 22nd, 2008, 06:14 AM
it's more of a filler eppy,
and I don't think you gave cody any real interaction with the battlers that should of happend instead of
"Hi Cody!"
*One healing-poke'mon sesson later*
"Bye Cody!"

I was kinda dissappointed.
But I can't wait for the next episode. :D

BurstX
February 22nd, 2008, 06:34 AM
well hes really not supposed to get a big interaction with them, hes only supposed to vaguley know them...i know it all sounds weird but it will eventually make sence...or atleast i hope...

ok now since cody is goin to eight island heres the map
http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/mikaylaisland.png

the tent is a contest hall

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
February 22nd, 2008, 07:18 AM
you may want to work on the rock formation's floor patten it kinda shaky.
and the tent seems too small for a contest hall, yyou may want to find and apporiate building.
other than that, it looks like an awesome island :D

BurstX
February 22nd, 2008, 07:19 AM
well its a small contest hall, youll see and im still workin on it, ill fix it eventually

[NovaPirate]
February 22nd, 2008, 09:01 AM
You might want to tile with the one pixel breaks between them. That's what I do. Then it's always lined up. The only problem is that it then takes ages to put it back together.

I suggest using either the grand contest hall or a regular one. Maybe a battle tent. I'm also not to happy about the Dialga and Palkia sitting there. No mixing styles.

Once again with the Battelers, he could've sat down and talked with them, maybe gotten a present Pokemon or handy item or Batteler Fone or something. Yes, I spelt Fone wrong to match Batteler >.<

You don't just have a stranger brought in, give him food and then send him off. You talk for a while. Eat together. You Battelers have no manners *tsks*

jamie.ds
February 22nd, 2008, 10:21 AM
very interesting.. but can you work on the sprites a liitle please.

BurstX
February 22nd, 2008, 06:12 PM
You might want to tile with the one pixel breaks between them. That's what I do. Then it's always lined up. The only problem is that it then takes ages to put it back together.

I suggest using either the grand contest hall or a regular one. Maybe a battle tent. I'm also not to happy about the Dialga and Palkia sitting there. No mixing styles.

Once again with the Battelers, he could've sat down and talked with them, maybe gotten a present Pokemon or handy item or Batteler Fone or something. Yes, I spelt Fone wrong to match Batteler >.<

You don't just have a stranger brought in, give him food and then send him off. You talk for a while. Eat together. You Battelers have no manners *tsks*

ok im not adressing the batteler problem...but the map is important, heres why

1. the dialga and palkia on the building is a replica of the time space tower from movie 10
2. the shack like thing stays, youll see
3. dont bother me with batelers, they will be in chapter 7 reguarding chapter 6

i hope that solves our problems...oh one more thing

DONT BOTHER ME WITH STYLE MIXES, ILL DO WAT I WANT...maybe eventually ill go all fr/lg but not yet

EDIT: i tried fixing the map...hopefully you ike it better

http://i27.tinypic.com/2e3sygh.png

[NovaPirate]
February 22nd, 2008, 07:41 PM
Have a fixed size for the squares, some are different. The easiest would be 16x16, obviously, but 4x4, 8x8, 2x2, etc. would work as well.

The umbrellas seem out of place, and on some of the houses on dirt you can see where there used to be grass.

What did you even change?

Charchic
February 22nd, 2008, 08:06 PM
I know it is very hard to see what you even changed and this episode is really dissapointing. But your comic is still good, I'll keep reading though.

BurstX
February 23rd, 2008, 05:04 AM
ok peopple im gonna redo chapter 6 and get 7 up by tomorrow

Charchic
February 23rd, 2008, 05:26 AM
Great, that's what a great auther does! Listens to the problems then fixes them, for that I will rate this comic 8/10 for now.

BurstX
February 28th, 2008, 01:44 PM
I AM SO SORRY!!!! I WILL UPDATE EVERYTHING SOON SCHOOL HAS BEEN MURDER...SO I MIGHT NOT EVEN BE ON FOR A WHILE

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
March 2nd, 2008, 10:34 AM
well, just try your best to update like I do, burst.

heres a tip: Try to make as many comics during the weekend.

BurstX
March 2nd, 2008, 11:48 AM
well heres the new comic

Introductions (http://i256.photobucket.com/albums/hh190/burstninjax/comic6.png)

again sorrry for the very long wait

Mike2494
March 2nd, 2008, 11:49 AM
Well, I like it, maybe you could improve the speech bubbles, though.. I am looking forward to a next comic!

Reaper 6
March 14th, 2008, 09:24 AM
this is great i love this comic

BurstX
March 15th, 2008, 03:27 PM
omg its chapter seven

Island Eight (http://i256.photobucket.com/albums/hh190/burstninjax/comic7.png)
sorry for the big delay, ive been bubsy, but a new chapter every saturday from now on

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
March 15th, 2008, 04:48 PM
OMG OMG OMG OMG!!!

It was probably one of the best so far, Burst.
I give this one a 9/10
(b'-')b

[NovaPirate]
March 15th, 2008, 05:13 PM
A bit of a filler comic, not much to comment on. Nice use of custom graphics though.

BurstX
March 16th, 2008, 04:26 AM
thanks for the postitve comments guys, its really a help, but now i need your help, i need you guys to submit ideas for the sevii island leaders there are 5. so help me out submit a leader, maybe ill use it.

♥~*Abby*~♥
March 22nd, 2008, 08:33 AM
Sorry, I don't have any suggestions. But man, these comics are good! ^_^

BurstX
March 22nd, 2008, 09:33 AM
hey guys as you know comic eight is coming out today, but heres a special treat, thanks to pokesho i created an official contest arena and here it is http://i256.photobucket.com/albums/hh190/burstninjax/contestarea-1.gif and the comic will come later

Reaper 6
March 22nd, 2008, 09:52 AM
THIS IS SO COOOOOOL UR GREAT I CANT WAIT TO SEE THE COMIC

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
March 22nd, 2008, 12:00 PM
Bursty... I will even eat a freakin' shoe made of rotten pie if you let me use that for my comic
*drools*

BurstX
March 22nd, 2008, 12:20 PM
...sure...like i always say give me credit...and give pokesho credit too

also heres another bio i did

http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/duke.png duke hes a fisherman that lives on one island, hes been a big brother figure for cody but latly hes been a real jerk...i wounder why?

well its here pokemon battelers issue eight New Recruit (http://i256.photobucket.com/albums/hh190/burstninjax/comic8.png)

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
March 22nd, 2008, 01:48 PM
Yay! New character!

Hm... I wonder if they could go beat a gym or something...?

anyway, nice comic to tie things up, nothing really extremely special.

But I wonder what ever happend to Ashley...? *Cough*

BurstX
March 22nd, 2008, 01:50 PM
...yeah youll see ashley soon enough

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
April 13th, 2008, 12:18 PM
I hearby revive this thread to see what happens to ashley.

BTW, how are the maps styled FR?LG coming out so far?

BurstX
April 13th, 2008, 12:28 PM
...well thanks to acha not letting this die heres the update,

EVERYTHING IS GONNA BE IN FR/LG
heres a link to my progress on th fr/lg version of eight island (http://s256.photobucket.com/albums/hh190/burstninjax/?action=view&current=eightisland2-1.png)

also here is the cast in fr/lg http://i256.photobucket.com/albums/hh190/burstninjax/battelercharacters-1.png battelers arent done yet

heres a world map(wip) http://i256.photobucket.com/albums/hh190/burstninjax/seviiislandsmap.png

and finally heres a new character bug catcher nick(youll meet him soon) http://i256.photobucket.com/albums/hh190/burstninjax/nick.png

Loki
April 13th, 2008, 01:26 PM
Closed upon thread creators request.

[apparently. If not, then PM me.]