View Full Version : Fallen Behind(Re-post)

January 31st, 2008, 8:34 PM
Well, I didnt get any input on this poem whatsoever when it debuted here on PC in August of '07 so I'm gonna repost it. I'm thinking about writing more often. So any Constructive Criticism is welcomed.

In my mind,
In the flow of time, I find,
A friend in need.
I can see their pain indeed.
I rush to aid.
But they said,
Never again.
Then again I find.
I am forsaken.
I have fallen behind.
Behind a line, Out of bounds.
Out of reach.
They no longer allow me to teach.
I'm left on a beach.
I cannot reach.
I dont mean to preach,
But how can they?
Who has taught them that way?
But, It's too late.
My pleas fall silently on deaf ears.
Throughout the years,
Steadily grow their fears,
Until they can't stand it anymore.
Then they wonder why.
And yet, why not? They have forsaken me.
When all I meant to be,
Was the one who would set them free,
From sorrow in it's cruel tyranny.
Maybe now they'll know what it's like to be left Fallen behind.
Maybe now when they see loyalty they'll appreciate it.
Listen once again to my plea.
Then see, my loyalty.
No longer will I have to flee.
I will be free.
To try to be,
The one to set you free,
From sorrow in it's cruel tyranny.