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Binary
February 1st, 2008, 08:12 AM
Umm...ok this is my first poem ever...so here ya go!
I wrote this when I was bored lol.

From your every glimpse,
to every smile
It makes me faint,
and fly a mile.

When you come,
in my sight,
It makes my heart
shine and light.

You make my heart burst,
You take away my hunger,
and my thirst.
All I want to do is,
Love you first.

Your beauty is not something,
that is available to buy.
And something without which,
I would die.

When I see your eye,
gleam and shine.
It makes me wish,
that you were mine.

Hope you like it

~C3LEBI

Guns n' Roses
February 23rd, 2008, 12:09 PM
can you make another one that actualy is good

Virtual Chatot
February 23rd, 2008, 06:20 PM
Great job for a first attempt, hope you'll make some more. Now if you'll excuse me, I have to get off the floor.

Romance Hero
March 21st, 2008, 04:18 PM
can you make another one that actualy is good

Great job for a first attempt, hope you'll make some more. Now if you'll excuse me, I have to get off the floor.

Constructive criticism please. :(

I think it was Plato who said this: Suddenly, at the spark of romance, everyone is a poet...
Ah, my favorite subject. It's kind of easy to describe how you feel about love in the beginning, isn't it? I tend to run out of words to say, but that doesn't mean I don't stop loving. I'm sure you feel the same way, and I admire anyone who writes love poems. You're on your way awesome work.