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jimsta
June 1st, 2008, 09:16 PM
Hey , When I'm bored I make Pokemon Comics:

Chapter one:
The Beginning (http://i263.photobucket.com/albums/ii138/JIMSTA28/1.png)
Go Wild (http://i263.photobucket.com/albums/ii138/JIMSTA28/2.png)
New Friend (http://i263.photobucket.com/albums/ii138/JIMSTA28/3.png)
Hard Fights (http://i263.photobucket.com/albums/ii138/JIMSTA28/4.png)
Badge and TCards (http://i263.photobucket.com/albums/ii138/JIMSTA28/5.png)

Chapter two:
Mt.Moon and Triple fight (http://i263.photobucket.com/albums/ii138/JIMSTA28/6.png)
Water Gym (http://i263.photobucket.com/albums/ii138/JIMSTA28/7.png)
Wins all round (http://i263.photobucket.com/albums/ii138/JIMSTA28/8.png)
Dun Dun Dunnnnn (http://i263.photobucket.com/albums/ii138/JIMSTA28/9.png)



More to come........

Charactor Bios: Coming soon


I dont know when I make them i do it with spare time and boredness they are my first so sprites are a bit wacked out but still please comment!


Credits:
SpeechBubble, Catch Pokemon, Meanwhile,Contest Hall/Host and Crit - Pokémon KD (Kanto Dimension) can be found in the Pixel Projects forum - updates whenever!
http://i13.tinypic.com/868hxts.png (http://www.pkmncommunity.com/showthread.php?t=101353)
Attacks - Wong_Agung from SPPF (http://img336.imageshack.us/img336/2031/attack4us.png)

Aero-LyNx
June 2nd, 2008, 02:43 AM
Well, nice comic you got there.^_^
Well, I have a few questions.

1.> Why Mitch's friend didn't ask how he get a legendary pokemon?
2.> Where are the guy's eyes? Are they the red ones?
3.> And why is mitch is a little bit weird(the sprite)?

Anyway keep up the good work!

Matt Silver
June 2nd, 2008, 06:01 AM
Boy those speech bubbles, the Meanwhile used in Comic 1, the Pokemon Captured sprites, the contest hall and host, KO word, shadow portal idea, Critical Hit expression all look awfully familiar.

coughuncreditedstealingofacertainPokemonKDcomiccough

Plus everything else that is sure to be pointed out by other reviewers.

GreenStorm
June 2nd, 2008, 01:18 PM
I was going to same the same thing but Matt beat me to it. Anyways, I see a lot of mistakes. I'm going to be brutally honest here:

-Don't make fonts smaller just to fit in the speech bubbles, it makes it look bad.
-Fix your mapping. It doesn't look good.
-There's no enthusiasm. I only read the first three because I thought something would happen. But it's been boring so far.
-Fix your punctuation.

If you read what I read and try, then you'll have a decent comic. I know that you make them when you're bored and that this is your first comic, just so you know.

ComoToon
June 2nd, 2008, 01:47 PM
Fix your text bubbles there incredibly annoying when your reading the comic how about making them transparent.

Cobalt36
June 2nd, 2008, 02:17 PM
Yeah, if no one pointed it out, i was also gonna mention the credit thing. Those attacks, some are to be credited to JoshR_691. if you don't that is stealing which is illegal. He took a long time on that sheet and asks to be credited.
Also, those tiles are very uneven in some places, and the water edges need brown "bump" markers.
This went really fast. You don't even describe the traveling to another place, just "Oh, got a badge! Next is in *name* City! Let's go...Here we are!" Slow down, give a story to tell.
Good luck with improvment. And you will be reported if you don't give credit where it is due.

jimsta
June 2nd, 2008, 11:36 PM
Well, nice comic you got there.^_^
Well, I have a few questions.

1.> Why Mitch's friend didn't ask how he get a legendary pokemon?
2.> Where are the guy's eyes? Are they the red ones?
3.> And why is mitch is a little bit weird(the sprite)?

Anyway keep up the good work!
1.> Will be reavealed later Prof. GreenLeaf will ask them to go get the 3 legendary birds , but you and jen dont know what there are and mitch wasnt there and Prof doesnt know about M......................
2.>Yes, Red ones are his eyes
3.> I found him on google images


Boy those speech bubbles, the Meanwhile used in Comic 1, the Pokemon Captured sprites, the contest hall and host, KO word, shadow portal idea, Critical Hit expression all look awfully familiar.

coughuncreditedstealingofacertainPokemonKDcomiccough

Plus everything else that is sure to be pointed out by other reviewers.
Look Up ^^^^^^


I was going to same the same thing but Matt beat me to it. Anyways, I see a lot of mistakes. I'm going to be brutally honest here:

-Don't make fonts smaller just to fit in the speech bubbles, it makes it look bad.
-Fix your mapping. It doesn't look good.
-There's no enthusiasm. I only read the first three because I thought something would happen. But it's been boring so far.
-Fix your punctuation.

If you read what I read and try, then you'll have a decent comic. I know that you make them when you're bored and that this is your first comic, just so you know.

-K, never noticed it
-I will try to make it better
-K, last few were in a rush

Fix your text bubbles there incredibly annoying when your reading the comic how about making them transparent.
???? woudnt that kill it ????

Yeah, if no one pointed it out, i was also gonna mention the credit thing. Those attacks, some are to be credited to JoshR_691. if you don't that is stealing which is illegal. He took a long time on that sheet and asks to be credited.
Also, those tiles are very uneven in some places, and the water edges need brown "bump" markers.
This went really fast. You don't even describe the traveling to another place, just "Oh, got a badge! Next is in *name* City! Let's go...Here we are!" Slow down, give a story to tell.
Good luck with improvment. And you will be reported if you don't give credit where it is due.
once again Look Up ^^^^^^
no, attacks credited to who i got from
k, got it
k, but some isnt the edges
i will try and slow down



UPDATE:

All credit done please tell me if i miss much

Aero-LyNx
June 3rd, 2008, 01:25 AM
Well, I think you just grab and place things. It's not good to just place it, I think you must edit the sprite(how to make the sprites better)blablabla like that.

Well, maybe you must remake them, like Ryan Cheong do in his new forum. He realized he made mistakes. And he also wants to be a better Sprite Comic maker. So he decided to remake his comic.

Matt Silver
June 3rd, 2008, 06:38 AM
While I "appreciate" the credit, I think actually asking permission beforehand would be better next time instead of taking something that wasn't technically for the taking - my comic is not a sprite resource for people to get my stuff off.

GreenStorm
June 3rd, 2008, 12:44 PM
Matt makes sense. The least you could do now is ask if you could keep using them.

Aero-LyNx
June 3rd, 2008, 06:04 PM
Yeah, greenstorm is right. That is Matt's trademark.

jimsta
June 3rd, 2008, 11:36 PM
Im Sorry Matt, May I keep using them? if I cant i understand i will delete first post and just make comic for self or make new stuff.