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Ikitsumi
June 18th, 2008, 08:04 AM
Heyas! ^_^ OK, this time I've found a bunch of poetry I wish to stick here, all of it's at my deviantART page like all my stuff, so please read and comment! Pwease? :"D

Poem (c) Ikitsumi



I have something I want to say about Love.

Love is the one thing that drives me forward.
Only once in this life could I ever hate Love; when Love decides to leave me.
Veridicous to my own Love, I'd never leave Love
Everlasting to me and living in my heart.

Yesterday's troubles are finally at an end.
Only Love could help me control myself.
Until the day I die, I will be with Love.

Guess the one time that my heart will be empty?
Anytime that I'm without Love, my heart will be empty.
Really, I just miss Love is what I mean.
You'll be able to tell when you see me without Love.

melod.ii ous demyx~♪
June 18th, 2008, 09:55 AM
<333

Cute poem Ikitsumi~
I think it describes love very well. ^^

I like your style. Eh, sorry I'm not being a very good critiquer right now. I really did like it~
and I do hope you post more! :3

Tk-mia
June 18th, 2008, 10:59 AM
i like how you put the word love in bold

sweet!^^

Kagome
June 18th, 2008, 11:02 AM
that is such a great poem i loved it hope you post more

sonic smash down
June 18th, 2008, 06:29 PM
that is a cute poem and its true. really nice hope to see more

Binary
June 21st, 2008, 01:37 AM
It's a great poem Ikitsumi..
It's about my favourite subject It describes love in a good sense..
Keep writing!

Mr. Curling Iron
June 22nd, 2008, 04:06 AM
Poem (c) Ikitsumi

I have something I want to say about Love.

Love is the one thing that drives me forward.
Only once in this life could I ever hate Love; when Love decides to leave me.
Veridicous to my own Love, I'd never leave Love
Everlasting to me and living in my heart.

Yesterday's troubles are finally at an end.
Only Love could help me control myself.
Until the day I die, I will be with Love.

Guess the one time that my heart will be empty?
Anytime that I'm without Love, my heart will be empty.
Really, I just miss Love is what I mean.
You'll be able to tell when you see me without Love.

I love this style.
One of the best personification I have ever seen :) Although I Dont read Poetry alot.. Its still excellent :)

A little Analysis to those people who just breifly read this.


This is a very good form of personification. (like I said before xD)
Love can be replaced with anyone's name, which aids to its originality.
In the last stanzas, 'Empty' is repeated, which shows us how much he/she loves 'Love,' and how much he/she misses 'Love'

The poem begins and ends with 'Love'

Well.. Thats it from my two-minute analysis. iiLove this Poem Iki =)