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Eos Aduro
June 29th, 2008, 08:41 AM
Ok, so Im pretty sure this goes here and not in Other Trivia, but its the Chain Poem. Its pretty simple, everyone adds two lines to the poem until we get to whenever we think it need wrapping up and then finish it.

Rules
1-Nothing over PG13
2-Try not to mention love if it has to be attributed to a guy/girl, since both will be participiating and it would be hard for them to write about being in love with a guy/girl if they are not gay.
3-No more than 2 lines, but three if you REALLY need to

Ok, so the first poem is free verse, no rhyming unless properly suited, and the theme is up to you! And the title we decide on at The End! Also, copy/paste the whole thing while adding on, dont just post the lines.

Finished Poems

A Forgotten Soul

There never was a night darker than this
No ember lit stars shine through this desolate smog
As it creeps around your slender lips,
I look down to my feet and wonder
Why I should live, or
When I shall die
And as the horizon fades to black
I see the sadness in your eyes
To what end must suffering creep through you
Clawing for footholds on your shattering heart
And with the darkness all around me
I wonder what brought us here
Forgotten am I to your thoughtless gaze
Buried beneath this facade of mistakes
The mistakes of which can be never forgiven
Uncovered behind every lie
Wingless angel, fly not away
My soul needs your touch mend my wounds
Capture me and take me home
Save me from this eternal darkness
Before the mist, that slithers so soon
Forces me to crumble under cooking pressure
For you are my light, your touch brings me back
You are now my only link to humanity
As the night spans gray, as night reaches on
Endlessly on
Endlessly on I walk alone
Through this desolate starless smog

Mr. Curling Iron
June 29th, 2008, 11:25 PM
Okayy =D

My turn :)


There never was a night darker than this
No ember lit stars shine through this desolate smog
As it creeps around your slender lips,
I look down to my feet and wonder

:D CLIFFHANGER >D I wonder who is going to fix the cliff hanger.

And Moderaters... please keep this in this thread... It might also belong in Other Trivia but I'm sure the poem will be ruined there ><

Eos Aduro
June 30th, 2008, 10:00 AM
There never was a night darker than this
No ember lit stars shine through this desolate smog
As it creeps around your slender lips,
I look down to my feet and wonder
Why I should live, or
When I shall die

More cliffhangery!

LawlRly
June 30th, 2008, 10:14 AM
There never was a night darker than this
No ember lit stars shine through this desolate smog
As it creeps around your slender lips,
I look down to my feet and wonder
Why I should live, or
When I shall die
And as the horizon fades to black
I see the sadness in your eyes

(How depressing.)

Eos Aduro
June 30th, 2008, 10:20 AM
There never was a night darker than this
No ember lit stars shine through this desolate smog
As it creeps around your slender lips,
I look down to my feet and wonder
Why I should live, or
When I shall die
And as the horizon fades to black
I see the sadness in your eyes
To what end must suffering creep through you
Clawing for footholds on your shattering heart

Izy
June 30th, 2008, 04:46 PM
There never was a night darker than this
No ember lit stars shine through this desolate smog
As it creeps around your slender lips,
I look down to my feet and wonder
Why I should live, or
When I shall die
And as the horizon fades to black
I see the sadness in your eyes
To what end must suffering creep through you
Clawing for footholds on your shattering heart
And with the darkness all around me
I wonder what brought us here

(its pathetic, i know >.>)

Eos Aduro
June 30th, 2008, 04:53 PM
(Its fine Iz, you're doing great!)

There never was a night darker than this
No ember lit stars shine through this desolate smog
As it creeps around your slender lips,
I look down to my feet and wonder
Why I should live, or
When I shall die
And as the horizon fades to black
I see the sadness in your eyes
To what end must suffering creep through you
Clawing for footholds on your shattering heart
And with the darkness all around me
I wonder what brought us here
Forgotten am I to your thoughtless gaze
Buried beneath this facade of mistakes

Izy
June 30th, 2008, 04:58 PM
There never was a night darker than this
No ember lit stars shine through this desolate smog
As it creeps around your slender lips,
I look down to my feet and wonder
Why I should live, or
When I shall die
And as the horizon fades to black
I see the sadness in your eyes
To what end must suffering creep through you
Clawing for footholds on your shattering heart
And with the darkness all around me
I wonder what brought us here
Forgotten am I to your thoughtless gaze
Buried beneath this facade of mistakes
The mistakes of which can be never forgiven
Uncovered behind every lie


this actually is very depressing sounding @.@

Eos Aduro
July 1st, 2008, 11:12 AM
There never was a night darker than this
No ember lit stars shine through this desolate smog
As it creeps around your slender lips,
I look down to my feet and wonder
Why I should live, or
When I shall die
And as the horizon fades to black
I see the sadness in your eyes
To what end must suffering creep through you
Clawing for footholds on your shattering heart
And with the darkness all around me
I wonder what brought us here
Forgotten am I to your thoughtless gaze
Buried beneath this facade of mistakes
The mistakes of which can be never forgiven
Uncovered behind every lie
Wingless angel, fly not away
My soul needs your touch mend my wounds

Izy
July 1st, 2008, 06:12 PM
There never was a night darker than this
No ember lit stars shine through this desolate smog
As it creeps around your slender lips,
I look down to my feet and wonder
Why I should live, or
When I shall die
And as the horizon fades to black
I see the sadness in your eyes
To what end must suffering creep through you
Clawing for footholds on your shattering heart
And with the darkness all around me
I wonder what brought us here
Forgotten am I to your thoughtless gaze
Buried beneath this facade of mistakes
The mistakes of which can be never forgiven
Uncovered behind every lie
Wingless angel, fly not away
My soul needs your touch mend my wounds
Capture me and take me home
Save me from this eternal darkness

LipstickTraces
July 2nd, 2008, 12:22 PM
There never was a night darker than this
No ember lit stars shine through this desolate smog
As it creeps around your slender lips,
I look down to my feet and wonder
Why I should live, or
When I shall die
And as the horizon fades to black
I see the sadness in your eyes
To what end must suffering creep through you
Clawing for footholds on your shattering heart
And with the darkness all around me
I wonder what brought us here
Forgotten am I to your thoughtless gaze
Buried beneath this facade of mistakes
The mistakes of which can be never forgiven
Uncovered behind every lie
Wingless angel, fly not away
My soul needs your touch mend my wounds
Capture me and take me home
Save me from this eternal darkness
Before the mist, that slithers so soon
Forces me to crumble under cooking pressure

A pretty open phrase I believe ;)

Akarei Yorume
July 2nd, 2008, 07:17 PM
There never was a night darker than this
No ember lit stars shine through this desolate smog
As it creeps around your slender lips,
I look down to my feet and wonder
Why I should live, or
When I shall die
And as the horizon fades to black
I see the sadness in your eyes
To what end must suffering creep through you
Clawing for footholds on your shattering heart
And with the darkness all around me
I wonder what brought us here
Forgotten am I to your thoughtless gaze
Buried beneath this facade of mistakes
The mistakes of which can be never forgiven
Uncovered behind every lie
Wingless angel, fly not away
My soul needs your touch mend my wounds
Capture me and take me home
Save me from this eternal darkness
Before the mist, that slithers so soon
Forces me to crumble under cooking pressure
For you are my light, your touch brings me back
You are now my only link to humanity

I'm sure I just screwed it up. ._.

Izy
July 3rd, 2008, 07:57 AM
There never was a night darker than this
No ember lit stars shine through this desolate smog
As it creeps around your slender lips,
I look down to my feet and wonder
Why I should live, or
When I shall die
And as the horizon fades to black
I see the sadness in your eyes
To what end must suffering creep through you
Clawing for footholds on your shattering heart
And with the darkness all around me
I wonder what brought us here
Forgotten am I to your thoughtless gaze
Buried beneath this facade of mistakes
The mistakes of which can be never forgiven
Uncovered behind every lie
Wingless angel, fly not away
My soul needs your touch mend my wounds
Capture me and take me home
Save me from this eternal darkness
Before the mist, that slithers so soon
Forces me to crumble under cooking pressure
For you are my light, your touch brings me back
You are now my only link to humanity
As the night spans gray, as night reaches on
Endlessly on

you didn't screw up, barely any of the stanzas match with each other, so even if you did no one could notice :D
But to me what i did kinda seems like a final stanza. Doesn't it? nah nevermind. Doesn't anymore

Eos Aduro
July 3rd, 2008, 08:23 AM
There never was a night darker than this
No ember lit stars shine through this desolate smog
As it creeps around your slender lips,
I look down to my feet and wonder
Why I should live, or
When I shall die
And as the horizon fades to black
I see the sadness in your eyes
To what end must suffering creep through you
Clawing for footholds on your shattering heart
And with the darkness all around me
I wonder what brought us here
Forgotten am I to your thoughtless gaze
Buried beneath this facade of mistakes
The mistakes of which can be never forgiven
Uncovered behind every lie
Wingless angel, fly not away
My soul needs your touch mend my wounds
Capture me and take me home
Save me from this eternal darkness
Before the mist, that slithers so soon
Forces me to crumble under cooking pressure
For you are my light, your touch brings me back
You are now my only link to humanity
As the night spans gray, as night reaches on
Endlessly on
Endlessly on I walk alone
Through this desolate starless smog

Now I think its done, ok lets think of a name. Um... The Emo Poem? Ok no

A Forgotten Soul in The Endless Night?

Izy
July 3rd, 2008, 08:29 AM
nah, too long.
How about A Forgotten Soul, or The Endless Night?
xD i think i'm funny

Eos Aduro
July 3rd, 2008, 08:33 AM
Im gonna go with A Forgotten Soul. Ok, any ideas for a theme for the next poem?

Izy
July 3rd, 2008, 08:38 AM
hmm..... wait for it... wait for it.... a ballad! i think that's a poem.... or is it a song?

Eos Aduro
July 3rd, 2008, 08:43 AM
Its both, and sure! How about a ballad about buterflys and unicorns... or something way cooler than that. Try to make ever few lines rhyme... and maybe we should repeat a chorus but thats optional.

Izy
July 3rd, 2008, 08:49 AM
you know what's way cooler than butterflies and unicorns? ninjas >:]

LipstickTraces
July 3rd, 2008, 02:34 PM
I'd like to suggest a chain poem that is about a specific topic that is hard to write about, so then there is a challenge that forces us to dig deep and be expressive in word choice, rythym and nature to save from writing a random chain of words which sound clever together.

If you don't want to do that then thats fine. But I'll do it if nobody else does lol

And in addition to that, the finished poem is brilliant. Nobody would suspect it was done by different writers :)

Stratomaster
July 3rd, 2008, 02:41 PM
i agree wit him it would turn out better that way...

Izy
July 3rd, 2008, 03:07 PM
mhmm.... that sentence was very large and had many words that were unknown to my 12-year-old mind @.@
i think it meant that we should choose a topic that challenges us >.<

Eos Aduro
July 3rd, 2008, 08:09 PM
Ok, well croc has a good point, we'll do that. I say we do free verse and the topic is: The Problems of Conformity

LipstickTraces
July 6th, 2008, 06:59 AM
Ooo! I like :) The first line... who is gonna christen this new attempt? ... me? I'll try... lol

Who'd like to see what it's like to be me?
First remove those tinted screens, nothing is as it seems.

Eos Aduro
July 6th, 2008, 05:24 PM
Who'd like to see what it's like to be me?
First remove those tinted screens, nothing is as it seems.
I walk alone, individual
The mindless drones must stalk along me

(Me like too)

Mr. Curling Iron
July 7th, 2008, 04:36 AM
Who'd like to see what it's like to be me?
First remove those tinted screens, nothing is as it seems.
I walk alone, individual
The mindless drones must stalk along me

A glare in the night sky,
Not just any glare,
The gleam of the lustrous moon reflected off the plastic-glass.

Izy
July 17th, 2008, 06:03 AM
*totally saves*
Who'd like to see what it's like to be me?
First remove those tinted screens, nothing is as it seems.
I walk alone, individual
The mindless drones must stalk along me
Who'd like to see what it's like to be me?
First remove those tinted screens, nothing is as it seems.
I walk alone, individual
The mindless drones must stalk along me
A glare in the night sky,
Not just any glare,
The gleam of the lustrous moon reflected off the plastic-glass.

To what extent must this go on
Will it end soon?

*has absolutely no idea what the poem is about*

Tr@ce
July 17th, 2008, 01:59 PM
Who'd like to see what it's like to be me?
First remove those tinted screens, nothing is as it seems.
I walk alone, individual
The mindless drones must stalk along me
A glare in the night sky,
Not just any glare,
The gleam of the lustrous moon reflected off the plastic-glass.
To what extent must this go on
Will it end soon?
I dream of the night when you went away
Taken by force, swept into the darkness

Manaphy1128
July 17th, 2008, 04:07 PM
Who'd like to see what it's like to be me?
First remove those tinted screens, nothing is as it seems.
I walk alone, individual
The mindless drones must stalk along me
A glare in the night sky,
Not just any glare,
The gleam of the lustrous moon reflected off the plastic-glass.
To what extent must this go on
Will it end soon?
I dream of the night when you went away
Taken by force, swept into the darkness
You were blinded from everything,
They never let you see the bad.

Eos Aduro
July 17th, 2008, 08:08 PM
Um, we seem to be off the theme, which is conformity.

Who'd like to see what it's like to be me?
First remove those tinted screens, nothing is as it seems.
I walk alone, individual
The mindless drones must stalk along me
A glare in the night sky,
Not just any glare,
The gleam of the lustrous moon reflected off the plastic-glass.
To what extent must this go on
Will it end soon?
I dream of the night when you went away
Taken by force, swept into the darkness
You were blinded from everything
They never let you see the bad
Because when everyone is the same
You can never see beyond the window

Tr@ce
July 18th, 2008, 10:21 AM
Who'd like to see what it's like to be me?
First remove those tinted screens, nothing is as it seems.
I walk alone, individual
The mindless drones must stalk along me
A glare in the night sky,
Not just any glare,
The gleam of the lustrous moon reflected off the plastic-glass.
To what extent must this go on
Will it end soon?
I dream of the night when you went away
Taken by force, swept into the darkness
You were blinded from everything
They never let you see the bad
Because when everyone is the same
You can never see beyond the window
Copies of another
with no emotion

LipstickTraces
August 6th, 2008, 03:43 AM
Who'd like to see what it's like to be me?
First remove those tinted screens, nothing is as it seems.
I walk alone, individual
The mindless drones must stalk along me
A glare in the night sky,
Not just any glare,
The gleam of the lustrous moon reflected off the plastic-glass.
To what extent must this go on
Will it end soon?
I dream of the night when you went away
Taken by force, swept into the darkness
You were blinded from everything
They never let you see the bad
Because when everyone is the same
You can never see beyond the window
Copies of another
with no emotion

Yet another drink shared with yet another clone
One by one, foundations fall to reveal the crust as I unveil
Am I apart of this trust, or does the devils advocate have my vote?

Yes its long sorry, but I was writing more to balance out the above two lines.

Bishopk
August 6th, 2008, 10:24 AM
Who'd like to see what it's like to be me?
First remove those tinted screens, nothing is as it seems.
I walk alone, individual
The mindless drones must stalk along me
A glare in the night sky,
Not just any glare,
The gleam of the lustrous moon reflected off the plastic-glass.
To what extent must this go on
Will it end soon?
I dream of the night when you went away
Taken by force, swept into the darkness
You were blinded from everything
They never let you see the bad
Because when everyone is the same
You can never see beyond the window
Copies of another
with no emotion
Yet another drink shared with yet another clone
One by one, foundations fall to reveal the crust as I unveil
Am I apart of this trust, or does the devils advocate have my vote?

Will we again walk together
Or will they part us for forever?

Eos Aduro
August 6th, 2008, 07:20 PM
Who'd like to see what it's like to be me?
First remove those tinted screens, nothing is as it seems.
I walk alone, individual
The mindless drones must stalk along me
A glare in the night sky,
Not just any glare,
The gleam of the lustrous moon reflected off the plastic-glass.
To what extent must this go on
Will it end soon?
I dream of the night when you went away
Taken by force, swept into the darkness
You were blinded from everything
They never let you see the bad
Because when everyone is the same
You can never see beyond the window
Copies of another
with no emotion
Yet another drink shared with yet another clone
One by one, foundations fall to reveal the crust as I unveil
Am I apart of this trust, or does the devils advocate have my vote?
Will we again walk together
Or will they part us for forever?
We are alligned, but never
Do we fall alongside each other