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Mr. Curling Iron
August 12th, 2008, 03:24 AM
When Two people have their Misunderstandings:
It creates a barrier,
It tears their friendship apart;
With a force that rips the heart:
It pours out an essence of emotion,
One which we would be better without.
Yeah, `tis a bad notion;
So I'd like to say sorry for my actions;;


:)
xDDD

Yeah I made it in a rush xD

Gymnotide
August 12th, 2008, 03:43 AM
Meaningful poem is meaningful.
I felt that the rhymes were a bit forced, however.

If you work a bit more on syllable count, it will end up flowing better.