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IceDragon2439
August 21st, 2008, 07:36 PM
I'm having a problem at the moment for my story Searching For Something Unown: Johto's Secret. SInce I'm rewriting it, I figured I'd take some of the criticism from the first version. They said I moved too fast, so how should I slow it up.

I mean, I went from New Bark Town to Cherrygrove to Mr. Pokemon's house and back in three chapters.

So I was wondering how should I draw it out without making it boring?

Buoysel
August 22nd, 2008, 05:38 PM
I'm sorry to say that I don't have time to read your story right now, but I read part of it. I though that the story was great. The description was great. It was a little winded, but it wasn't to bad. The only time it's too much is when you have a listed description.

I had no problem imaging what was going on. I say just keep doing what you have been doing.

P.S. I will read your story when I have more time on my hands. But I certainly can't wait until that happens.