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Kishijoten
August 29th, 2008, 08:55 AM
Yellows are smiles
and Tears are blue
you always seem to
hang out with her.

I thought it would end
quicker than soon but
I guess my prediction
didn't come true.

There were rumors about you
two, hanging out from midnight to
dawn, guess you two wouldn't end so soon.

All my plans I try so hard just overflows
right into the quicksand.

I cry in sorrow but you couldn't see
the hidden tears inside me.

Soon one day you bought her a
forgotten gift in a early late day.


In December you guys broke up with
a electrifying messege that broke your
hearts.

by~ NinetalesSakura


Well do you think it was good?

♥~*Abby*~♥
August 29th, 2008, 09:03 AM
Well... I'm not so good at rating poetry. It's pretty good! ^_^

N-XIGE
August 29th, 2008, 11:00 AM
Well; I wont criticise...

But honestly; based on the beginning...7.5/10 (concept is good)

Dny
August 29th, 2008, 11:07 AM
I am not too good in poetry But that was pretty good

Jeremy
August 29th, 2008, 11:17 AM
Well sweetie, I like it. ^^; It's pretty good and quite sad, sweetie.

N-XIGE
August 29th, 2008, 12:39 PM
You know; poets are really good at rapping...especially when they are mad.