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Kishijoten
August 29th, 2008, 11:47 AM
As the sun had arisen to
a new day, birds had chirped
far away.

It was the season of love and
fall As a joke was called ''See you
next fall''.

Sunsets from yesterday brewed into
the fwee new day. Sweet calming
friends lures you to a amazing scent.

When the afternoon reappears the
birds chirp through the thick air fog
Sure they may stop but the secret of a
flying life is to never decline.

Soon night had brewed into the sweet fwee
new day Why? even the moonlight could never
decline.

N-XIGE
August 29th, 2008, 11:59 AM
The only problems I have with your poems are the rhyming aspects...and the " , "...

But, that's just because I see it prerequisite...

Anyway; I will always love your concepts...

Thumbs up!:)

22sa
August 29th, 2008, 08:51 PM
It's a sweet poem : D

Pleasant read~