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Akarei Yorume
August 30th, 2008, 11:14 AM
Read the title, people, that's all you need to know about this. I spent a while on it, so... yeah, it's not that good, but tis the best I can do...

When I have been shunned
Broken and left to drown
When I feel alone
And it seems my life is bound

He wraps his arms around me
And holds me close to him
I no longer feel afraid
And my life does not seem grim

Just a touch from him
And my dismay
Is washed away...

He runs his fingers through my hair
His passion is the key
I cease to be tense
And my sorrow leaves me

My pain fades away
My anger is laid to rest
By his soothing voice
And with his loving caress

Just a touch from him
And my dismay
Is washed away...

With all conflict forgotten
Discarded; pushed aside
He looks at me and smiles
And I feel that I could fly

His eyes sparkle like gems
Held up to the light
I sigh with content
And know that I'm all right

Just a touch from him
And my dismay
Is washed away...

I look up at him
He tells me he is mine
I tell him I am his
And I see his eyes shine

We both close our eyes
And as our lips meet
Everything falls into place
And I feel complete

With this wave of sheer bliss
All I can say is this:
A lot of me depends
On his simple kiss

N-XIGE
August 30th, 2008, 01:02 PM
9/10

I don't know why, but this poem does not make me feel anything.

Akarei Yorume
August 30th, 2008, 01:06 PM
9/10

I don't know why, but this poem does not make me feel anything.

^^ Really? I don't think I'm that good. <_<

...uh, ok.

N-XIGE
August 30th, 2008, 04:03 PM
Nevermind; I'm okay now "^^".

Dixie Kong
August 31st, 2008, 09:01 PM
We both close our eyes
And as our lips meet
Everything falls into place
And I feel complete

That stanza made the whole poem.

I'm not saying the rest was bad, it's just that this stanza made a delivery. Nice job.

Akarei Yorume
August 31st, 2008, 11:30 PM
That stanza made the whole poem.

I'm not saying the rest was bad, it's just that this stanza made a delivery. Nice job.

^^ Thanks! (I would say it in Japanese (XD don't ask) but I don't know how to spell it out in Romaji... o.o)