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Glitter Stain
September 1st, 2008, 05:59 AM
Sadly, this poem is no longer available. =[

N-XIGE
September 1st, 2008, 06:28 AM
*Applaud*

This one deserves one that comes as expected as thunder is after a lightning.

This poem goes first degree...I just can't do without a comment, it even happens to have what I love best...Rhymes, not rapping rhymes but poetry rhymes...

Hope you don't mind my rating this poem...


9/10...


Thumbs up!

Btwn: I'm yet to ever give anyone a 10.

Glitter Stain
September 1st, 2008, 06:39 AM
*Applaud*

This one deserves one that comes as expected as thunder is after a lightning.

This poem goes first degree...I just can't do without a comment, it even happens to have what I love best...Rhymes, not rapping rhymes but poetry rhymes...

Hope you don't mind my rating this poem...


9/10...


Thumbs up!

Btwn: I'm yet to ever give anyone a 10.
Hm... well, I'm not going to complain about a 9/10. Thanks for taking the time to read my poem. Is there anything I need to be sure to improve on?

N-XIGE
September 1st, 2008, 06:46 AM
For now I'll just say concept...but there's not really much to that...it's all good, and your rhymes sure are...

The only place I didn't like was

The thorny plant is as deadly as can be

Just one touch would tear anything apart



The concept here was good, but...tear anything apart could have been replaced with tear any skin/flesh...



and you jumped from

The blood one would shed is easy to see


Though some still hold the rose close to their heart
There isn't really much connection between those two...but anyway...it's all good.^^



:shocked: