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Ciera
August 29th, 2004, 09:37 AM
(Some more poetry... My bf broke up with me for some girl I hate, and Im mad and sad... So I wrote this. I do hope a chunk of poo from a plane lands on him...)

Feelings Run Dry?

Don't turn your back,
I love you too...
Doesn't any of that,
Matter to you?

Over a year,
Just thrown away...
Did you know,
I wish you'd stay?

Why her, why now?
It's not fair...
But obviously,
You don't care...

I want you,
In my arms now...
Did I screw up?
Please tell me how...

We grew apart,
You made me mad...
But most of all,
You made me sad...

~Sara

(My Plushie... I still love you so much... *sniff*)

Jolty-kun
August 29th, 2004, 09:39 AM
That is so cool^^, i lve it^^, what bout the plushie?

Ciera
August 29th, 2004, 09:50 AM
'Plushie' was his nickname...

At least you like my cruddy spur-of-the-moment poetry...

Blaine
September 5th, 2004, 10:42 PM
Angsty... People nowadays write a lot of angsty poetry. Never understood it much myself. All-in-all... It's a general rhyming poem. A nice clip-clop flow. It's good that you keep the rhythm going and constant, but the verses are rather choppy. The poem could be extended a bit. Overall, it's all right... Could use a bit of work, but relatively nice. I'm sorry for the constructive criticism. I tend to have a habit of leaving my comments.