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Dizzy
November 1st, 2003, 12:10 PM
The Story Starts out at Pokemon Acadamy for the upper class men of pokemon schools ran by madame foxtrot.

It was a Friday , Crystal was leaving through the Gold House Doors ... When she heard a screech , it was a pikachu , not just any ordinary pikachu a black pikachu , so she called out her Vulpix ,This Pikachu was so agile and learned various moves , It attack Vulpix with a Mud Slap , then a Water Sport to lessen Fire attacks , So She called her Vulpix Back and Sent out ......................................... onix , pikachu used a Low kick .... then onix Dug underground , Pikachu jumped in the near by lake and used Thunder , The lakes Water , Electrified , was turned into a twister heading straight for the hole onix dug . Pikachu still in the lake , jumped out and Ran into the forest..............

The girl was safe now , she then ran to the puddle where onix was she called it back but it wouldnt go in its pokeball , it was dead ,

Then she saw Shadows around her getting closer and closer , then a Marowak , a scyther and a Golbat came to her , She sent out her .................................................Squirtle , It fought Marowak off but Syther Came and Sliced it to Fine Pieces , it was dead ( Squirtle ) now , Marowak came and Knocked the Girl Out , Scyther Sliced her , and Golbat Drank the Blood , Her last real movement was Throwing her vulpix ball in the lake


The black pikachu found the pokeball at the bottom of the lake and swam to shore and ran in the forest ...............

56 years later .........

To be continued

So what do you guys think of it so far??
This is my 1st real one , please dont bash me

Kyosuke
November 1st, 2003, 04:45 PM
Seeing how it is your first one, it seemed interesting to read and is WAY diffrent from the usual guidelines of a fan-fic, the good point in it is, that it isn't the same as regular fan-fics, and hope you continue with it, but try to make it a bit more longer next time, and maybe capitals and periods.

Dizzy
November 2nd, 2003, 05:32 PM
Actually, I copied it from the Old PC..... This was my first Fan-fic from the OLD PC......