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Rainbow Skittlez
March 14th, 2009, 4:23 PM
Before we begin, I realize I'm not poet, but try not to laugh, ok?

Ok...

When the day comes that I die, I don't want anyone to cry
I don't want anyone to be sad just because I die
I want my death to be simple and in bed
I want it to be peaceful, with the pills by my head
I want my funeral to be quick and small
with no tears or depression, none at all
Finally, I want to be remembered by my friends and family
I want them to remember the good times they shared with me
I basically want my friends and family to cope
That's my perfect death, my final hope

Yeah, pretty bad... oh well.

Micro
March 14th, 2009, 6:55 PM
It's pretty good, I like it. I think you have the potential to be a great poet ;>

kissing. raindrops
March 15th, 2009, 12:31 AM
It's pretty nice. Potential's there, keep going at it hunny.

OokamiShipper
March 15th, 2009, 11:41 AM
I like poems like this, I think it's great!
Keep up the good work! I hope to read more!

Ruphire
March 15th, 2009, 11:44 AM
Wow this is really good! You do have the potential to be a good poet. =D

BHwolfgang
March 15th, 2009, 11:47 AM
Hmm.... pills?

I like it and there's potential. I'm not laughing, and that would be a death that I would also prefer, a peaceful one. =)

deliriouspurple
March 16th, 2009, 12:43 AM
Well it's pretty good and I liked it also..good work on that!:)

AGuyWhoStuff
March 16th, 2009, 5:02 PM
Its got a mix of emotion and word sense. For a lot of people making poems, its either/or. Nice poem