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April 2nd, 2009, 11:48 PM
Tell me what u guys think about this poem! I wrote it...so pls be honest!

Walking Through Shadows
Each day of my life
I feel like I'm walking through shadows.
The way the world is
Darkness is all that I can see
It festers in the air

Hate and corruption
Are fuel for these shadows
Death feels welcome

I fear the world is ending
And everything I know with it
Who will save us?
The future looks Grim.

idk about this one...really let me know if its any good!

April 3rd, 2009, 12:07 AM
Poems go in the Poetry section. I'll move it over there for you.

April 3rd, 2009, 2:29 AM
Oh thanks!!!!! I really mean it!

April 3rd, 2009, 3:22 AM
Oo...I like this one :3 Great poem you got there~ *no suggestion*

April 3rd, 2009, 3:24 AM
What/who is Grim? the reaper?
anyways...great poem!

April 3rd, 2009, 3:47 AM
even i dont know that....i capitilized it for effect...it can mean death yes....just depends on how u interpret it!

April 6th, 2009, 5:24 PM
I like it, I think it can be written even better, but the whole idea and the words you use are quite good. Congrats!

April 7th, 2009, 4:10 PM
thank u guys so much for the feedback and the reputation!!! i really appriciate it!

April 8th, 2009, 3:37 PM
its ok imo.
Theres a hundred poems about the crap in the world, you have to make yours stand out. Instead of saying whats happening (like walking through the shadows) describe it to the reader, really develop and bring all the emotion out.

April 16th, 2009, 8:16 PM
Well not bad but it's good, the words are quite nice.

very nice poem.