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KostK2Boss
April 11th, 2009, 12:28 PM
Hey there! I know Sprite Comics are few and far between and some of them have quite lacking plots, but I'm sure that you will LOVE this one. The sprite comic series are entitled "Who Wants 2BA Master" ( WWM for short ) and is written and composed by KostK2Boss ( that's me! ).

WWM STORY
Ash, Misty and Brock meet a mysterious trainer, who turns out to be a federal agent, called Lord Pokemon XIII, who is also rumored to be the official pokemon master. Ash soon becomes part of countering the Pokeworld's biggest conspiracy: Team Rocket, Aqua, Magma, Galactic and all other villains seem to be involved. Who is the evil mastermind behind this uber conspiracy? What will be the role of this powerful trainer Ash just met? Will Ash save the day?

Part Bulbasaur(1): "Masterious..." - Lord Pokemon's debut
http://img5.imageshack.us/img5/1526/sheet11cf.png

Part Ivysaur(2): "Brock's Joymare" - Count Darkrai's debut
http://img127.imageshack.us/img127/6582/sheet22cf.png

Part Venusaur(3): "Darkrai's Master Plan No.964"
http://img529.imageshack.us/img529/3797/sheet33cf.png

Part Charmander(4): "After all, They are Twerps..."
http://img12.imageshack.us/img12/9735/sheet44cf.png


Stay tuned, everyone, updates are due!

Fox♠
April 12th, 2009, 04:17 AM
You mixed FR/LG with MD, it looks ridiculous that your Pikachu is bigger than the trainers, the backgrounds are also too big excluding the pokemon center. I don't quite get why you called it hilarious either, as it's all just reused jokes. Either make it all in MD style, or make it all in FR/LG.

Gary, the Magic Fairy
April 12th, 2009, 11:31 AM
Don't call your own comic hilarious. It's pretentious.

Your plot is odd and somewhat difficult to follow, and the jokes weren't really all that funny.

I have to admit, I laughed out loud at panels 7 & 8 of part 4. But then 9 sorta killed it for me. The guy yelling that was too obvious. Just her saying "we hope to see you again," would have been enough.

I dislike the "Pokemon Numbering". Why not just call them part 1, part 2, etc? It isn't very amusing, and it's easier for people who comment to reference them if you have just plain numbers. ("I really like part 5, but part 7 wasn't very good" and things to that effect)

Why is the guy named Lord Pokemon? That's an awful, awkward, unoriginal name, in my opinion.

The visual aspect could use some work as well. Using FRLG & MD sprites can sometimes be okay, if you do it right. You aren't. I've seen it done with people zooming in the trainers to 2x(+), and leaving the MD sprites normal size, which sometimes looks.. okay. But having a Pikachu that's taller than the trainers is never a good thing. And mixing backgrounds is almost never a good idea. MD backgrounds are too big for FRLG trainers to look good on them.

Your speech bubbles need some work as well. I've never been a fan of square speech bubbles, and rounded ones fail when made on paint, so I would suggest using the rounded rectangle tool, with a thinner outline. 1px usually looks better than 2 or 3px outlined speech bubbles. As for the text, I don't like the bold Comic Sans. I do, however, like it when it isn't bold. If you need all your text to be bold, which I doubt you do, then I recommend using another font.

I'm also not a fan of the "To be continued" at the bottom. We already know that. If you need to show us that it ISN'T going to be continued, you could just write "The End" at the end. :\

KostK2Boss
April 12th, 2009, 01:46 PM
Dear Kenji and FoxHound,
I wasn't serious when I said "it is hilarious". I'm not arrogant and I admit this is not the best thing I can do. I composed it quite quickly, never paying attention to the faults you mentioned. It's a mistake, I fouly thought it would go unnoticed. Anyway, I made this for fun and I hope that in time, I will get better.
As for "Pokemon" being used as a human name, it was meant to sound silly, otherwise he would be just another common fan-made character. I don't like the "to be continued" label either, but I didn't know what to fill the empty space with.
Anyway, thank you both for being honest, I'll keep that in mind. :)

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
April 14th, 2009, 05:15 AM
I have to admit, the newbish charm made me chuckle a bit at the jokes.

I have to agree that some jokes have been overused, this is the third time I've seen the whole "'We hope to see you again!' 'You want me to get hurt again???'" Joke.

But, you live and you learn.
Sooner or later, comics you make could become pure gold.

The Speech bubble take up too much space however, you might want to to shink the text down a bit.
That's why I've always preferred Text in a box at the bottom.

BUT NOOO IT'S FROWNED UPON BECAUSE YOU DON'T SEE MARVEL MAKING TEXT AT THE BOTTOM BLA BLA BLAH.

Meh.

Counterfeit
April 14th, 2009, 05:36 AM
Haha, love the scripting with Brock and Darkrai in part two. xD

Fox♠
April 14th, 2009, 06:06 AM
BUT NOOO IT'S FROWNED UPON BECAUSE YOU DON'T SEE MARVEL MAKING TEXT AT THE BOTTOM BLA BLA BLAH.

Meh.
No it;s frowned upon because it;s ugly, cumbersome, harder to read and generally a cop out from doing things properly.

to the thread starter, it is best to avoid text under panels at all costs, yellow boxes of narration in the top left/right corner is fine however.

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
April 14th, 2009, 08:24 AM
No it;s frowned upon because it;s ugly, cumbersome, harder to read and generally a cop out from doing things properly.

to the thread starter, it is best to avoid text under panels at all costs, yellow boxes of narration in the top left/right corner is fine however.
what you said was the trailing Bla Bla Blah.

I felt like quoting Serebii.net rules today.

Making professional speech bubbles is harder than TUP styles, so I advise you just improve your text bubbles, KostK2Boss.

I've done both styles with comics, so I would know.
Oddly enough, My comics is TUP styles always end up lasting longer and gaining popularity than when I use text bubbles.

Maybe Because I'm able to crank more out faster?

KostK2Boss
April 15th, 2009, 12:46 AM
I gave the first 4 parts a minor edit. (changed the huge pikachu, curved the thought bubble and some extras):

Part 1 ,edited
http://img15.imageshack.us/img15/3628/sheet11wwm.png
Part 2, edited
http://img15.imageshack.us/img15/6993/sheet22wwm.png
Part 3, edited
http://img11.imageshack.us/img11/6334/sheet33wwm.png
Part 4, edited
http://img10.imageshack.us/img10/5459/sheet44wwm.png
And just for continuing the story...
Part 5: "Giovanni's Offer" - Conspiracy revealed
http://img8.imageshack.us/img8/4921/sheet55wwm.png
The uber conspiracy, though, turns out to be just a common world-taking plan...

I hope the first edit looks slightly better. I really don't know what to do with the speech bubbles: non-bold script is way too smooth and eye-straining to read on a computer screen. And making the bubble oval would cover even more space than it covers now...:\

Fox♠
April 15th, 2009, 07:53 AM
Maybe Because I'm able to crank more out faster?

Quality over quantity. It's as simple as that, I'd rather spend 3 hours making one really nice comic than spend 1 hour making 3 less than average comics.

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
April 15th, 2009, 10:06 AM
Quality over quantity. It's as simple as that, I'd rather spend 3 hours making one really nice comic than spend 1 hour making 3 less than average comics.

Hey, hey, hey-

My comics came out fine. It usually took an hour or more to make one.
So don't imply that the comics I made suck.

Unless, you weren't, but If you really wanted me to give you issues I've created, just so you can form a real opinion about what I've made.

Fox♠
April 15th, 2009, 01:35 PM
Hey, hey, hey-

My comics came out fine. It usually took an hour or more to make one.
So don't imply that the comics I made suck.

Unless, you weren't, but If you really wanted me to give you issues I've created, just so you can form a real opinion about what I've made.

No no no, I didn't mean it like that, I was saying it's worth spending the extra time on presentation. Didn't mean any offense.

Weatherman, Kiyoshi
April 15th, 2009, 02:11 PM
No no no, I didn't mean it like that, I was saying it's worth spending the extra time on presentation. Didn't mean any offense.

Alright, just making sure. It felt like it was implied.

Anyways, I have to heart-fully agree with you,
Better-effected comics and the more time spent on them, the better.

TUP style is easy to make, It's good newbie practice and allows panels to have full view, instead of a pesty "What's going on?!" text bubble taking up a spot. (Usually with newbie comics, nearly half the panel itself).

That's what my experiences have taught me, but, what's it has also taught me, is if you use text bubbles correctly,
You can still have your breath taking panels and a good text bubble.

Anyone oppose to the above statement?

ShinjisLover
April 15th, 2009, 02:12 PM
Well, everything everyone's said basically covers what I wanted to say. Old jokes, bad sprite mix-ups, blah, blah.

However, I do have one compliment I can throw out: the banter between Brock and Darkrai in the second comic was actually so childish that it was funny. "I'm "ill" and you'll "heal" me." =P

iPochama
April 15th, 2009, 02:24 PM
You'll improve if you make more thats for sure!
So uh, yeah! continue...

...OR ELSE UR GARLFREINDS WELL DIE!

Ac1d
April 15th, 2009, 04:21 PM
I think it's kinda pathetic.. it seems as if you're trying to sound sad..
Your jokes are bad and outdated, the sprites are unproportional along with what everybody else said..

I really feel improvement to reach a quality comic, is far off.
Sorry But that's the honest truth..