Finglonger
September 23rd, 2004, 08:36 PM
yeah well I posted this one a while back, but that was when nobody was posting in this area and it kind of got ignored. well anyhow I really set into this piece recently. I did a lot of editing and a lot of rewording, so tell me what you think, and what you think I can improve on. This is dedicated to a very good friend of mine, someday I hope it's good enough to give it to her.
Seduction in B minor
The curtains draw; amidst an ornate velvet sheet
A welcomed shade from daylights heat
Tenor sings in slumber blanket sheets, so night's
moonbeams dance in seductive lights.
Basses sing low, memorium in her dark repose
sounds embrace, mingling as the music grows.
Crescendo!Crescendo! the Maestro cries,
altos sigh, love spread in sultry skies.
Strings tussle 'neath the moonlit night,
with winds of which they used to fight.
She cries...night's climax is her clasp
retold in melody, opulence, begins to gasp
And as the curtain slowly closes with a hush
she turns to him, her face begins to blush.
Seduction in B minor
The curtains draw; amidst an ornate velvet sheet
A welcomed shade from daylights heat
Tenor sings in slumber blanket sheets, so night's
moonbeams dance in seductive lights.
Basses sing low, memorium in her dark repose
sounds embrace, mingling as the music grows.
Crescendo!Crescendo! the Maestro cries,
altos sigh, love spread in sultry skies.
Strings tussle 'neath the moonlit night,
with winds of which they used to fight.
She cries...night's climax is her clasp
retold in melody, opulence, begins to gasp
And as the curtain slowly closes with a hush
she turns to him, her face begins to blush.