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August 14th, 2009, 06:02 PM
[ I Hate You ]
[Lyrics]

How Dare You
Make Me Go Through
All The Stuff You Do

Help Me Understand
I Gave You My Hand
But You Let Me Sink Through The Sand

I Loved You
And I Still Do
But You Told Me Something Oh So New
And Now I Hate You

You Stole My Heart Away & Gave It Life
You Said You Wanted To Give Me A Try
You Didn't Know Things Would End Up This Way
But Baby, I Gotta Say
I Hate You, I L.O.V.E. Hate You

From The Beginning Everything Seemed Right
Was Me For You & You For Me
But Now I See It Was Only Me

You Broke My Heart So Many Times
Kept On Hearing The Exact Same lines
I Never Gave Up, I'll Never Give Up
But Damn, What's The Point If I Never Had Your Love

You Stole My Heart Away & Gave It Life
You Figured You'd Go & Give Me A Try
You Thought I Was Perfect, Said I Was Perfect
But Maybe We're Just Not Meant To Be

You Made It Seem So Real
The Memories I Feel
Were Just Fake
Like The Heart You Gave To Me

You Broke My Heart To Pieces
That I Cannot Put Back Together
But Still They Lie With You
I L.O.V.E. Hate You

You Didn't Want To Bring
The End To Our Happy Ending
You Wanted Us To Be Forever
But The Truth Is Baby, Now It's Over

And I Hate You
Oh I Hate You
From The Bottom Of My Broken Heart
...I Love You.

beauty. proletariat
August 17th, 2009, 07:11 AM
LYRICS
[ I Hate You ]
[Lyrics]

How Dare You
Make Me Go Through
All The Stuff You Do

Help Me Understand
I Gave You My Hand
But You Let Me Sink Through The Sand

I Loved You
And I Still Do
But You Told Me Something Oh So New
And Now I Hate You

You Stole My Heart Away & Gave It Life
You Said You Wanted To Give Me A Try
You Didn't Know Things Would End Up This Way
But Baby, I Gotta Say
I Hate You, I L.O.V.E. Hate You

From The Beginning Everything Seemed Right
Was Me For You & You For Me
But Now I See It Was Only Me

You Broke My Heart So Many Times
Kept On Hearing The Exact Same lines
I Never Gave Up, I'll Never Give Up
But Damn, What's The Point If I Never Had Your Love

You Stole My Heart Away & Gave It Life
You Figured You'd Go & Give Me A Try
You Thought I Was Perfect, Said I Was Perfect
But Maybe We're Just Not Meant To Be

You Made It Seem So Real
The Memories I Feel
Were Just Fake
Like The Heart You Gave To Me

You Broke My Heart To Pieces
That I Cannot Put Back Together
But Still They Lie With You
I L.O.V.E. Hate You

You Didn't Want To Bring
The End To Our Happy Ending
You Wanted Us To Be Forever
But The Truth Is Baby, Now It's Over

And I Hate You
Oh I Hate You
From The Bottom Of My Broken Heart
... I Love You.


Honestly, I followed the rythmn at the start and slowly I started losing it.

I love the twist at the end, but it was expected. Even though it is a song/lyrics, I will review it as a poem.

Firstly, I think you should write without Excessive Capitalism For The First Letter Of Every Word. It Gives You No Sence Of The Rythmn. The first letter is used to tell you how to say it, and punctuation is supposed to guide you in how you say something.


Juxtaposing Love and Hate is fairly common and its a concept that works.

I'm not sure where to look at this from. I only see your excessive capitalism as criticism, because you are very good at expressing your raw emotions, and in Lyrics / freeform poetry this is a very sharp knife.

>.< I'm sorry I said I would add to my review but I dont know what to add

Jad
August 17th, 2009, 07:46 AM
awesome song dude good job =D

Jesus of Suburbia
August 21st, 2009, 07:14 PM
Awesome. This is made up of pure awesomeness. My favorite line is
I L.O.V.E Hate you
I also lost the rythm in some places sush as
But damn, whats the point if i never had your love??
Otherwise, great. Is it a poem or a song??