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Rave Master
October 6th, 2004, 02:27 PM
here is a peom i made up, not recommeded for young kids:

here it is:

There is a bobcat in a mountain
A bird in a tree

I drink a mountain dew
then i take a pee

Gunna go upstairs
Get myself some chow

Guna have some s*x
right about now

When u go upstairs
then u will see
a beautiful girl
doing it with me!

let me know what u think

elite13kid
October 6th, 2004, 02:33 PM
how intersting, very creative, although u r young!! =)

Finglonger
October 6th, 2004, 03:36 PM
x_x I can't tell you what I really think because there are young children about. But in short this is trash, sorry it just is. Its total dribble, a bastardization of a beautiful art form. A trained monkey could pump out something more meaningful given a typewriter and 20 minutes...