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Blackvolution
August 30th, 2009, 05:23 PM
Hi everyone!

I love to make music and I also love to write lyrics! So, because I want to make everything perfectly, there are only 2 lyrics I wrote I'm satisfied with. So, here you have them, please rate them!

Please remember, I'm from Austria and I can't speak english very well, so please don't be too angry with embarassing grammar-mistakes or something like that ^^.

And I stole the melodies from Billy Talent's newest songs. The first song can be sung along with "Bloody Nails + Broken Hearts" and the second with "Pocketful Of Dreams". I'm glad about any kind of feedback ^^.

Nobody’s Perfect

The glass is broken, the door is closed
Is this the kind you get sorrows solved
How can you think something bad like that
Don’t you remember the time we had
So many times you’ve just thrown away
Because I’ve thrown every lie away
I’ve told you every mind I kept
Inside of me, you can’t stand the fact

No, you’re not this perfect person that you thought
And it seems like you forgot reality
Reality

Nobody’s perfect, it’s a lie
Nobody, neither you nor I
Can say mistakes are never done
No, neither you nor anyone

I was just trying to show my views
You turned your back and behaved so cruel
I’ve criticized many sides of you
But you can’t say that you’ve not done too

No, you’re not this perfect person that you thought
And it seems like you forgot reality
Reality, reality

Nobody’s perfect, it’s a lie
Nobody, neither you nor I
Can say mistakes are never done
No, neither you nor anyone
Nobody’s perfect, it’s a lie
Perfection, neither you nor I
Can say mistakes are never made
I’ve never said

I’ve never said, I’ve never said
I’m never gonna take the blame
I’ll never say, I’ll never say
It’s better to throw away the blame

You don’t account for the things you say
Who is when nobody’s left to blame
You’re far away from reality

Nobody’s perfect, it’s a lie
Perfection, neither you nor I
Can say mistakes are never done
No, neither you nor anyone
Nobody’s perfect, it’s a lie
Perfection, neither you nor I
Can say mistakes are never made
I’ve never said

I’ve never said, I’ve never said

Let Me Break Away

Everyday you’ve played the hypocrite
You said you love me even though you never did
You’ve never told me why you didn’t care if I’d break, I’d break
You went away to another one
I’m all alone and starring at the mess you’ve done
But now you’re sorry, knocking at my door, it’s too late, too late

I don’t love you, this is what you said
I can’t stand you, this is what you meant
You didn’t care about the
Way you let me break away

You used to need a pencil made of pain
To get this sentence written in my pate
You threw away the chance to get me back
You’re scared now to try cause you may break your neck

Is this is a game you try to play with me
Am I supposed to play if I don’t want to win
Love is nothing you can get whenever you want, you want

Now I love you, this is what you say
Now I need you, this is what you mean
You didn’t care about the
Way you let me break away

You used to need a pencil made of pain
To get this sentence written in my pate
You threw away the chance to get me back
You’re scared now to try cause you may break your neck

You used to need a pencil made of pain
To get this sentence written in my pate
You threw away the chance to get me back
You’re scared now to try cause you may break your neck

You used to need a pencil made of pain
To get this sentence written in my pate
You threw away the chance to get me back
You’re scared now to try cause you may break your neck

You used to need a pencil made of pain
To get this sentence written in my pate
You threw away the chance to get me back
You’re scared now to try cause you may break your neck

You used to need a pencil made of pain
To get this sentence written in my pate
You threw away the chance to get me back
You’re scared now to try cause you may break your neck