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Kishijoten
August 31st, 2009, 07:34 PM
The forgotton past that had flowed like a rushing river from day to day. I use to remember that i was held by your strong arms as we strolled down the peaceful river. But, as time had ticked we were no longer together and yet i had left when i was only six.

22sa
September 4th, 2009, 06:24 PM
I see the happy theme but when you said "we're no longer together" it seemed to turn into a sad ending theme instead o.o

aurevesque
September 5th, 2009, 04:07 PM
the first part of the poem was great! but then i read teh ending "but we were no longer to gether, i left when i was six' i ddn't get taht part, what did age have to do with leaving?
well, like i said liked it!

Midori Chi
September 7th, 2009, 10:49 AM
Great choice of words. X3 It sort of reminds me of a song called Siren. : D

Angela
September 7th, 2009, 01:42 PM
The forgotten past that had flowed like a rushing river from day to day.
I use to remember that i was held by your strong arms as we strolled down the peaceful river.
But, as time had ticked we were no longer together and yet i had left when i was only six.

I wonder who the poem is about.. It's obvious that it's about someone you lost when you were 6.. I sense happiness and sadness, and is that a hint of nostalgia?

Samme!
September 7th, 2009, 05:26 PM
I really like this Momo! The way you wove happy and sad together was really great!

It really displayed your emotions well. (im guessing)