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Kishijoten
September 21st, 2009, 07:40 PM
Like a error that had
came to earth. Like a dark heart
that had survived within a thousand needles of death.
I cry upon like a open river that
flows down my deep blue tears upon a thousand years of sorrow
Like wings that are shattered
and cannot be flown, It's
a thousand years of jealously.
Like a heart that cannot say
"no" but, only other's refuse
my words. It's calling upon thousand years of hatred.......

Zorua
September 21st, 2009, 07:46 PM
...Not bad, repitition gives the poem a nice flow, and it also has good imagery inserted into this, but I'm failing as to seeing the actual...connotation, for lack of a better word, behind this poem.