PDA

View Full Version : is there such thing as a good day to die?


Spearow
October 5th, 2009, 03:43 PM
I had a dream, golden and sweet
Girls and boys on white horses rode out to meet
me, and I held out my arm
She tied a white ribbon around it
clean like a vaccination
or a tourniquet,
though there was no blood yet.

And if you went down with your name on your chest
and a cloth-marked elbow:
would there be release?
Would you rest in one piece?
Would you mean any more to this earth that turns,
puts its children in urns.

does it remember them after they're gone?
I'd say,
but I would be wrong.

Sonikku
October 5th, 2009, 04:16 PM
Beautiful with much talent
you posses yes,
amazing skills it is true

Kishijoten
October 5th, 2009, 08:12 PM
This is such a imaginative poem perfect, well done.

jintrigger
October 5th, 2009, 08:17 PM
This is an ok poem...I've seen better. Still good though

Spearow
October 7th, 2009, 03:08 PM
Beautiful with much talent
you posses yes,
amazing skills it is true

I see what you did there. I think. Wait. Reverse haiku?
Thanks for your comment, in any case

This is such a imaginative poem perfect, well done.

awwww, well thank you.

This is an ok poem...I've seen better. Still good though

This is an ok review...I've seen better. Still good though

jk jk man. Thanks for commenting. :)

Pikachukid
October 21st, 2009, 03:59 PM
You've got a really good way with words. The flow of the poem is really great too.
This one goes up there next to Molepeople27's Butterfly Lips.

The Prince of Sweet Sorrow
October 23rd, 2009, 04:07 AM
It's awesome, you have talent. Keep up making poems if you'd please.