PDA

View Full Version : Freindshp battles


TimeDialga33
October 6th, 2009, 03:42 PM
One Morining , Morace woke up in a happpy mood.He was excited. His mom shouted"Morace i got somthing to tell you!"Morace walked down stairs slowly in bright clothes. he asked"what do you want to say?" " Well, your freind joesph came looking for you,he said he was wanting to play with you. but,he is now at relic town, could you please go see him?" "okay Mom.Morace replied in a happy way.

Astinus
October 6th, 2009, 07:40 PM
This has a lot of issues with it. Grammar, spelling, lack of description, lack of narration, too short.

Take your time writing your chapters. Find a proof-reader to go over your stories before you post them. Learn more about the rules of written English. Read other fics to see how they work.

Right now, this is closed for not meeting the standards of the section.