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darkblastoise89
November 9th, 2004, 07:29 PM
i put the rose bloom in her hair,
that summer morning in the breeze
i'll never forget her loving stare
those eyes that made my thoughts freeze

second by second i loved her more,
she saw into my very core
at first, infatuation, but now i see
it was true when she said she loved me

speechless i was left,
stunned by the taste of her sweet breath
i could not bring myself to utter
the same words that made my pulse flutter

forever i wish she could have stayed
but i could not bring myself to say
the commonly misused three-word phrase
that had me mesmerized and dazed...

when i say it now, every word is true...
come back to me, for i love you...


-matt

Jeremy
November 10th, 2004, 03:12 PM
dat poem iz teh s uck!!11 XD J/K

Aww...that's so sweet sweetie, and I can relate...someday... ^0^ 9.9/10

darkblastoise89
November 10th, 2004, 04:39 PM
thanks jeremy....glad u rated it...no one comes down here, so this'll probably be my last poem or song i post...thanx though

Kelsey
November 10th, 2004, 04:40 PM
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww, it's soooooo sweet!!!!!! ^0^ This poem ish one of my favorites that you have done, Matt. *snuggles* I should try and write some new poems, but I haven't had much inspiration lately. Anyways, since I clearly know what it's about, I give you a perfect 10/10 I enjoyed reading it and the flow was done well. You had awsome word choice and it just aounds awsome!!! ^_^

~Kelsey

darkblastoise89
November 10th, 2004, 04:43 PM
thanks...but it still might be the last...i appreciate you comin here to see it, thanx

Kelsey
November 10th, 2004, 04:48 PM
Why?!? Your poems are always so awsome, you have a true gift, don't stop just because I am one of the only people who comes here daily. XD
*snuggles*

~Kelsey

darkblastoise89
November 10th, 2004, 05:03 PM
you're just trying to cheer me up = P

well i guess it's good enough for me if even one person leaves a comment, without them i have no motive to write anything at all...thanx u guys...knowing people actually read this is what keeps me wrting.

Kelsey
November 10th, 2004, 05:19 PM
*sits on Matt's head* Well, what's a fiance for? XD Come on, every word is true, I have alwaus admired your writing. whenever I see you post a new poem, it inspires me to write another poem of my own. I love you, Matt, even if you stop posting poems, I'll still come to read your older ones. ^_^
*snuggles*

~Kelsey

darkblastoise89
November 10th, 2004, 06:01 PM
[glompz] thanks kelsey if u put it that way, i'll write just to keep you writing ^ ^

Kelsey
November 10th, 2004, 06:14 PM
LOL, thanks Matt. ^0^ Well, good job on teh poem again, Matt!! ^_^

~Kelsey

Jeremy
November 10th, 2004, 07:23 PM
Now isn't that sweet. ^0^ *Group hug.*

flame_chi
November 10th, 2004, 09:21 PM
wow! love the poems! keep them goin

PikaPal
November 10th, 2004, 09:23 PM
i put the rose bloom in her hair,
that summer morning in the breeze
i'll never forget her loving stare
those eyes that made my thoughts freeze

second by second i loved her more,
she saw into my very core
at first, infatuation, but now i see
it was true when she said she loved me

speechless i was left,
stunned by the taste of her sweet breath
i could not bring myself to utter
the same words that made my pulse flutter

forever i wish she could have stayed
but i could not bring myself to say
the commonly misused three-word phrase
that had me mesmerized and dazed...

when i say it now, every word is true...
come back to me, for i love you...


-matt

wow, what a poem! Its awesome! I wish people didn't missuse those words. Your poem is so true! ;)

Kylie-chan
November 11th, 2004, 01:35 AM
that's so cool, and the lines are even -_- I can never achieve that
*is inspired to write happy songs and throws her suicidal song in the bin.*

^ Don't worry, I'm not suicidal, for heaven's sake I'm happier than as happy as can be. I'm just writing about the thoughts that went through my mind when I was suffering from depression... I was thinking vaguely "You can always end it... but why do that?"

Koga_LUVer
November 11th, 2004, 01:40 AM
Hey,that's a great poem man.I really like it.
10/10!
You lucky dog,I normally keep myself from rating poems because I can't even begin to think of what to give them.

Kylie-chan
November 11th, 2004, 01:48 AM
thanks jeremy....glad u rated it...no one comes down here, so this'll probably be my last poem or song i post...thanx though

wrong, I come down here

darkblastoise89
November 11th, 2004, 04:58 AM
thanks all of you....[tries to supress happiness] [goes to post on DP's threads] really though, thanx.




-matt

Monzae
November 11th, 2004, 03:32 PM
It's a really good Poem matt...keep writing poetry :)

Kylie-chan
November 12th, 2004, 12:27 AM
thanks for the rep and the reviews, matt.

lizardman
November 21st, 2004, 03:45 PM
10-10!thats a good peom that would make some couples feel awwww...