View Full Version : Forever and Always

November 11th, 2004, 5:23 PM
Is it just me or do all my poems seem dark no matter how hard I try to make a happy poem?Oh well anyways I just did this so yeah,it is most likely cruddy.

Forever and Always

A single tear dark with hate rolled down my cheek,
Resentment felt full blowen in me,
I didn't know how to take this one,ahrd blow,
More painful than any other pain before,
You wished to leave me,to never return,
You tore my heart in two and threw it away,
You treated me like yesterday's news,
Yet still I felt for you,
I wished to stay by your side,
Even when you were willing to toss me aside,
I stood by you,
I didn't know why,
What could it be that drove me to stay with you?
What could possibly make me love you through this hate?
Together so long,forever to be with one another,
You told me that once,you said you'd never leave me,
It's that that drives me to stay,
To be with you forever,
Even when you wish to leave me behind,
I'll stay by your side,
Always to be by your side,
Never again to leave,never to say goodbye,
I'll be with you,forever and always.

November 20th, 2004, 12:43 PM
(*claps loudly*)great poem koga!!!i liked it need a bit more rhyming.8/10!

November 20th, 2004, 9:43 PM
Good. Like lizardman said though, a bit more rhyming. ^^, 7/10!!http://jupiter.walagata.com/w/digiham/HamsterRequests/8265595.gif

November 21st, 2004, 12:46 AM
I'm not too good with making my poems rhyme.

November 21st, 2004, 10:47 AM
To tha dictionary! **, j/k it's ok.Your poems are still great even though they don't have much rhyming! ^^,http://jupiter.walagata.com/w/digiham/HamsterRequests/8265595.gif

November 21st, 2004, 3:53 PM
Thanks,SupiSweetAttack.I actually do check the dictionary alot when I need a rhyming word.

November 23rd, 2004, 6:32 PM
OMGoodness, I think I read this one at your site! ^0^ I likez it there and I likez it here. XD Well, I am not feeling uber picky today, so I think your poem's fine, Koga. ^^


November 23rd, 2004, 8:14 PM
Thanx much Kelsey.I always appriciate yor ratings.