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.::Suicune::.
December 8th, 2004, 02:51 PM
All I need
is a moment in time
With no one around
a time that is mine

A time for anger
a time for sadness
A moment of peace
or a moment of madness

I wanna be alone
dont worry, I'll be fine
But all I need
is a moment in time

One moment
Thats all mine.

Kyosuke
December 8th, 2004, 03:03 PM
Your poem is good, it could be slightly longer to get more of the feeling of solitude, but you may have been going for the "short and sweet approach".

But either way the point got across for just some solitude, and I enjoyed reading it ^^.

Intuition
December 9th, 2004, 05:59 AM
It's a good poem indeed :D well done ^^

Kelsey
December 9th, 2004, 01:50 PM
Awwwwws, that poem was beautiful! ^_^ I think it was put together nicely. I might only recommend that you lengthen the last stanza a bit, just to make it in a true poem format. ^_^

~Kelsey

Stripes
December 12th, 2004, 04:33 PM
Excellentee poem, like they said though lengthen the last bit. Of course you write what you feel and nothing more.

Elite Four Lance
December 19th, 2004, 09:21 AM
Your poem was nice. You were really good.