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mew42003
December 30th, 2004, 12:42 PM
Anacortes I'm wrighting love poem for you.(AND NO ONE ELSE!)It might not sound good...Alright hope you like it,here goes,Ahem: My love for Anacortes


My love for you burns with the light of a Thousand suns.Ana,you are my version of Santa,Because you keep giving and giving me love.My sweet Ana who lives in Canada.My love is ony preserved for you.My love for Anacortes.



So how'ya like it?You can Rate it.


~mew42003

DarknessMonkey
December 30th, 2004, 01:31 PM
Sounds Nice But Heres Mine For Aleksandra...

Roses Are Red
Violets Are Blue
Honey Is Sweet & So Are You

That's Just The First One...

mew42003
December 30th, 2004, 01:34 PM
Ash This thread is for Anacortes poems.Start a poetry thread about MD if u want.

DarknessMonkey
December 30th, 2004, 01:35 PM
Yeah I Was Just Showing You My First Poem...
Hey Mew Write More Poems For Ana...

mew42003
December 30th, 2004, 01:40 PM
Okietagga! Ahem,I call dis one:Ana


Ana,Ana I always think about that name.Ana,Ana things are not the same.Ana,Ana your the one for me.Ana,Ana I won't let you flee from me.

I don't do poetry as good as her but I luv her!Hope u liked it!

DarknessMonkey
December 30th, 2004, 01:54 PM
Pretty Good XD...
I Would Recommend Writing It Like I Do So It Is Easier To Read...

mew42003
December 30th, 2004, 01:56 PM
Okies!I'll start dat!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

DarknessMonkey
December 30th, 2004, 01:57 PM
Good!
I Think Your Poems Are Good!
I Hope Ana Likes Yours!
And I Hope Aleksandra Likes Mine To Her!

mew42003
December 30th, 2004, 02:26 PM
Here comes a new one!Ahem, Title:Like Sora and Kairi


You are my Kairi
And I am Your Sora
I will protect you from all Heartless
I would turn into a Heartless for your suvival and happyness
You are my Kairi
And I am your Sora
What can I say were like Sora & Kairi


So how'dya like it?

DarknessMonkey
December 30th, 2004, 02:26 PM
That Got Wierd...XD...
But Sure She'll Like It!

mew42003
December 30th, 2004, 02:32 PM
Tell MD to both of E'm.I want everyone's opinion.XD!!!!!!!!!

DarknessMonkey
December 30th, 2004, 02:35 PM
I'll Try...
Hey Can I Give You Suggestions?
I Have An Edit For That "Like Sora & Kairi"

You are my Kairi
And I am Your Sora
I will protect you from all Heartless
I would turn into a Heartless for your survival and happyness
You are my Kairi
And I am your Sora
What Can I Say, Were Like Sora & Kairi


My Editing Will Be In Bold

mew42003
December 30th, 2004, 03:06 PM
Nice addition!I'll edit it now!

DarknessMonkey
December 30th, 2004, 03:09 PM
Whoa!
Glad I Helped!
I Guess It Does Sound A Little Better...

Anacortes
December 30th, 2004, 09:37 PM
My love for you burns with the light of a Thousand suns.
Ana,you are my version of Santa.
Because you keep giving and giving me love.
My sweet Ana who lives in Canada.
My love is ony preserved for you.
My love for Anacortes...

this is how I would write my poems..sounds like a good idea..?

mew42003
December 31st, 2004, 08:26 AM
Ana I luv you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

DarknessMonkey
December 31st, 2004, 08:47 AM
Wow!
This Wouldn't Be The Place To Yell "I Love Aleksandra!" So...
But Anyways Nice Poems Again & Listen To Ana!

mew42003
December 31st, 2004, 08:50 AM
I luv Sisi(Thats Anacortes's name)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

DarknessMonkey
December 31st, 2004, 08:56 AM
Yeah I Know!
I Heard In My Club For Aleksandra...
Ahhh Aleksandra...
I Love That Girl...

mew42003
December 31st, 2004, 09:08 AM
Anacortes used to have a crush on you...

DarknessMonkey
December 31st, 2004, 10:04 AM
Nah No Way...
Hmmm...
Cool...

mew42003
December 31st, 2004, 11:34 AM
It says in the Re-Ruturn of the Crush Thread...

Riyuko
December 31st, 2004, 11:43 AM
Try to stay on topic here, okies? ^^;

Anyways, those poems are soooo cute! ^_______^ Although, you need to work on your grammar and punctuation.

I did some editing for your recent poem. I'm hoping it will help you. ^^;

You are my Kairi,
And I am your Sora.
I will protect you from all Heartless.
I would turn into a Heartless for your survival and happiness.
For you are my Kairi,
And I am your Sora.
What can I say, we're like Sora & Kairi.

I just added some little pieces of punctuation in there, and corrected some words. ^_^

~Karli

mew42003
December 31st, 2004, 12:42 PM
Thankz Riyuko!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Kyosuke
December 31st, 2004, 01:11 PM
Its nice, but punction needs some work, and so does the grammer part of it too. Also its better off being in short seperate lines.

And please don't post messages like your last one mew42003, its considered spam...

mew42003
December 31st, 2004, 05:59 PM
Thankz for the support!I'm still working on more!XD

Anacortes
January 1st, 2005, 11:34 AM
If you continue on like this..you could find the cure to my curse! XD

mew42003
January 1st, 2005, 03:19 PM
Thats my Goal...Ana I love you.

Kelsey
January 1st, 2005, 05:19 PM
Awwwwwwwwwwww, it's cute! ^_^ Since it was a love poem, coming from your heart (though most poems do) I shall not really critique this one as hard as I might other poems. I will however, suggest that you form your poem into stanzas, such as in this poem: http://pokecommunity.com/showthread.php?t=25869
Otherwise, it's very cute, mew. ^_~

~Kelsey

mew42003
January 1st, 2005, 05:33 PM
Thank you Kelsey.I'm trying to think of more...

Anacortes
January 16th, 2005, 10:03 PM
you..asked for someone to post in your thread? ok I did..what next..?

mew42003
January 17th, 2005, 08:35 AM
My life
My life is so misererible
Ana and Randall hurt me so
Theres different girls
But None can replace Ana
Ana and Randall hurt me so
My life is so miserereble
My Life

And thats how I truely feel!!!!!!!!

Anacortes
January 18th, 2005, 02:26 PM
its ok..kinda sounds like the chorus of a song..add more to it!

mew42003
January 19th, 2005, 07:26 AM
I really feel that way though...*Sniffles*

[Technya]
January 19th, 2005, 08:47 AM
Aaaaaaawwww I thought that last one was really sweet. Good job.

mew42003
January 19th, 2005, 08:59 AM
Thankies Evil Twin!I'll think of more!^_^

Dignity
January 19th, 2005, 05:42 PM
wow ana and mew broke up?

Anacortes
January 19th, 2005, 10:10 PM
You didnt know..? The fights are still going on! XD :D mew42003 you might find it helpful to use your fave love songs to inspire you..

Dignity
January 21st, 2005, 03:06 PM
My life
My life is so miserable
Ana and Randall hurt me so
There's different girls
But None can replace Ana
Ana and Randall hurt me so
My life is so miserable
My Life

And thats how I truely feel!!!!!!!!


The edits I made are in bold, spelling and punctuation ^^ i dont really like the poem even though it is sweet it is just... well I'm not sure... keep practicing.

mew42003
February 5th, 2005, 11:17 AM
Thank you.^_______^I'll just make regular Poems now.


~James

Anacortes
February 5th, 2005, 07:59 PM
umm...if you're only making regular poems why dont you get your official thread and get rid of this one? I mean its pointless now..