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Midori Chi
December 30th, 2004, 05:29 PM
Okay...once AGAIN...I'd like to share another song by me...

I know this happened one but, I just can't let you go.
We still have things in common and I bet, that, you know.
It's still hard to be-lieve that we're only friends.
I have some words to tell you that will never,ever,end....

I will fall on my knees....to be with you.
I will fall on my knees....just to do what you do.
I will fall on my knees....cause we're on-ly friends....
I will fall on my knees!

I have this in my memory, like it's still,going, on.
I really try,everyday to make it, be gone.
I just can't take it. I'll have to live, like a nor-mal one.
Yeah, we're friends, through all the ends. And we do have fun...

I will fall on my knees....to be with you.
I will fall on my knees....just to do what you do.
I will fall on my knees....cause we're on-ly friends....
I will fall on my knees!

I will fall on my knees!!

Fishy
December 31st, 2004, 02:43 PM
Hmmm.. Its a pretty good poem. It shows how the person feels in a way *gives rep*.

Midori Chi
December 31st, 2004, 02:47 PM
Yeah...I based this on the feelings for this one person...Anyway...thanx for the compliment!

Riyuko
December 31st, 2004, 04:01 PM
Like usual, this is a very good song, Trappy. =3 Although the next step you could take is making it a little longer. ^______^ Great job once again!

~Karli

Kyosuke
December 31st, 2004, 08:08 PM
I agree with Riyuko, the song content is very nice and you're good at writing these things, but its not very long and thats the only thing now that can be improved right now.

Midori Chi
January 1st, 2005, 03:36 PM
Hm...how to make it longer.....I'll be thinking about that! Thanx 4 da help!

Sumomo & Kotoko
January 1st, 2005, 03:44 PM
Yeah...I based this on the feelings for this one person...Anyway...thanx for the compliment!
Who is this 'one person'?? :\

EDIT:Oh yeah,the song is great!! But like every one else is saying,it could be longer.But thats the only thing wrong with it. :D :D

*Best Friends with Trap-Door57* :D

Midori Chi
January 1st, 2005, 03:50 PM
...I'm not tellin' !! Even if you ARE my best friend!!

Sumomo & Kotoko
January 1st, 2005, 03:52 PM
...I'm not tellin' !! Even if you ARE my best friend!!
What!! Come on,plz(Beast Boy as a cat) tell me. :( :(

Best Friends with Trap-Door57

Midori Chi
January 1st, 2005, 04:00 PM
....Nuh-uh!!! ...Maybe I'll tell ya in the future....

Sumomo & Kotoko
January 1st, 2005, 04:02 PM
....Nuh-uh!!! ...Maybe I'll tell ya in the future....
What good would that do.If your going to tell me in the future,why not now?? :\ :\ :\ I swear I wont laugh,or tell any one.

Best Friends with Trap-Door57

Kelsey
January 1st, 2005, 05:16 PM
Well, seeing as I don't know what the rythm is for your song, I had to guess. XD But, from what I've seen the song doesn't seem half-bad. I might recommend making a few more stanzas, just to lengthen the song a bit more. Unless, of course, if you repeat the chorus a few times. ^_~ It was an overall nice song, trap-door. Great job! =D

~Kelsey

Midori Chi
January 2nd, 2005, 10:34 AM
Er..actually...I DOES repeat the chorus twice at the end....I'll fix that!

I know this happened one but, I just can't let you go.
We still have things in common and I bet, that, you know.
It's still hard to be-lieve that we're only friends.
I have some words to tell you that will never,ever,end....

I will fall on my knees....to be with you.
I will fall on my knees....just to do what you do.
I will fall on my knees....cause we're on-ly friends....
I will fall on my knees!

I have this in my memory, like it's still,going, on.
I really try,everyday to make it, be gone.
I just can't take it. I'll have to live, like a nor-mal one.
Yeah, we're friends, through all the ends. And we do have fun...

I will fall on my knees....to be with you.
I will fall on my knees....just to do what you do.
I will fall on my knees....cause we're on-ly friends....
I will fall on my knees!

I will fall on my knees....to be with you.
I will fall on my knees....just to do what you do.
I will fall on my knees....cause we're on-ly friends....
I will fall on my knees!

I will fall on my knees!!

Midori Chi
January 2nd, 2005, 11:08 AM
actually...to my measuring...it's only about an inch longer...

Kari Kagome & Mewtwo
January 2nd, 2005, 11:27 AM
[14:24:29] <RicePigeon> also, lol @ chaos's hitler sig

fallen_angel
March 5th, 2005, 10:01 AM
i like it it's pretty good. Does that person's name happen to start with a j?

Midori Chi
March 12th, 2005, 10:00 AM
...Ha ha tohru! I know who you're talking about! ...Nope! It's someone else..and I think you know who...

*best friends with tohru*