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Pogiforce-14
January 4th, 2005, 04:19 PM
"Alone"


When you need help and no one is there to give it,
You are as I am. Left in the dark.
A cold wind piercing your heart.


I seek help and deliverance but I cannot find it.
Where once I saw faces there's nothing but shadow.
The darkness engulfs as I'm left behind.


I need guidance and hope but it's beyond my grasp.
No smiling faces but retreating backs. I feel alone.
So alone...

Anacortes
January 4th, 2005, 10:31 PM
Would it be a good idea if you put your poems all in one thread next time..? seems more organized that way....

Kyosuke
January 4th, 2005, 10:49 PM
I think that poem really relates to alot of people, including myself on how we feel about some situations we're put in, and just overall life. Its great the way it is, but it would leave a better feel on the reader if it was slightly longer.

Threads being put in a single thread seems to be a problem now, I didn't want it to come to this, but I better make a "rule" thread...

Lady of the Shadows
January 5th, 2005, 02:20 AM
Yes i realy relate to that poem.
I do feel that way a lot. I also like how it flows and goes along.

Kelsey
January 5th, 2005, 09:33 AM
Awwws, that poem was so sad! But it was a great poem to read nonetheless. ^_____^ No spelling errors. Good flow. No problems that I can see!

I feel this poem helps to represent how many poeple feel. It makes me think of the word betrayal. For your poem explains how people feel when they've been betrayed. They feel as though happiness shall never again be part of them. They can trust no one. They look for hope yet it is no where to be found...awwwws, this poem was so good! Great work, Pogi. ^_~

~Kelsey