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Kaizer-AmiYumi
January 23rd, 2005, 09:33 AM
I wrote this as a dedication to AbbyxSawah's leave:

Gone but Not Forgotten



Everything is not okay

Things will never be the same

why did you hafta go?

you leave me here in pain

I sulk I cry

I can't Go on without you

I wish you were here

I wish you could've stayed

You maybe gone but you're not forgotten.

MegaDitto
January 23rd, 2005, 09:35 AM
That is so sad.Wonderful job.I miss them.

Roxas
January 23rd, 2005, 09:36 AM
Cool, Kimi. I kinda miss them. I like the poem. really nice.

Kaizer-AmiYumi
January 23rd, 2005, 09:54 AM
i miss them too =(

but thanks for the good comments ^^

Kyosuke
January 23rd, 2005, 11:30 AM
Yes it was unfortunate that it had to come to having both of them leaving PC, they just wanted to be left alone but some people just wouldn't allow that...

Its a really good poem dedicated to them, it sort of leaves a strange feeling after reading it.

MegaDitto
January 23rd, 2005, 02:28 PM
Yeah I agree with you LT.It's really sad.

KLS
January 23rd, 2005, 05:58 PM
i hated the both of them.
i was almost driven to the point where i wanted to quit pc but i think about this in another perspective.
before kairi and a1337a came, pc was different, perhaps they left because they wanted to change pc once more.
pc is changing even as we speak, but change is not a bad thing.
so let us give a moment of silence for those who have been sacrificed to change pc.

Dignity
January 26th, 2005, 04:41 PM
well, i have to say that is true, but hating them isnt nice, they were good people ^^
now on to the poem, there was one mistake
in the last
You may be gone but you're not forgotten.
the text in bold is the correction ^^ XD
~origin

Kelsey
January 27th, 2005, 03:26 PM
I wrote this as a dedication to AbbyxSawah's leave:

Gone but Not Forgotten



Everything is not okay

Things will never be the same

why did you hafta go?

you leave me here in pain

I sulk I cry

I can't Go on without you

I wish you were here

I wish you could've stayed

You maybe gone but you're not forgotten.



It's sweet to dedicate a poem to those two, they truly were sweet and wonderful and shall be missed.

Well, I've found a few spelling errors:
hafta = have to
maybe = may be (the way you used these words, you showed that you meant 'may be' as in 'might be' or 'are')

Well, this poem is sweet, considering its dedication and all. ^______^ I think the flow could use some work. Maybe try adding more words to some of the lines, for example.

Well, I shall not critique this poem as hard as I do others, seeing as it's a nicely dedicated poem for two great PC memebers. ^_~

~Kelsey

Mystic Flame
February 2nd, 2005, 12:26 AM
................. *snicksers at above reply* dont correct her spelling XP.
Beautiful Poem Kimi. I loved it. Im sure sawah will when i show it to her too.