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Kylie-chan
February 4th, 2005, 01:20 AM
Listen to them laugh at you and feel them tear at your skin
Theyll rip you to pieces like sharks because you dont fit in
Cling on to me and well fly to a haven so very far away
Well escape to tomorrow and flee from the agony of yesterday

Its time to stand up for purity and truth among them all
Time to wipe away the tears and for you to stop fearing a fall
Take a risk and jump with your arms out wide, maybe youll fly
Soar above the others; its your turn to laugh and their turn to cry

Theyll shriek in horror as their plastic caring masquerade
Crumbles and turns to dust and their lies begin to fade
Dont worry about now, youve endured enough
Youve weakened yourself trying to be tough

Simply cling onto all thats real; soon your revenge will come
Subtracted from them, fortune will add itself to your sum
Just hold onto me; youre protected in my arms, tight in my embrace
Until the end of you and the end of me, this will be the (last) safe place

Youll prove your worth on this place we call Earth, you can endure
Their trivial cruelty; dont let them make you feel any more insecure
Just hang onto me; youre safe in my arms, youre my only in the human race
Well fight until the final end of you the final end of me for the last safe place

Demonic Angel
February 4th, 2005, 01:25 AM
No one's gonna laugh at it, Kylie-chan. ^^
And it's NOT crappiness. *speaks in the tone of a kindy teacher* Okay Kylie, repeat after me -- You are not a crappy poet. XD
Ish thinks that poem is beautiful, much better than anything I could ever write. ^^

Kylie-chan
February 4th, 2005, 01:34 AM
Wow thankish, but I have seen your poetry, it pwnz all. XD [Including mine.]

Demonic Angel
February 4th, 2005, 01:38 AM
Nah, ish sucks. XD I'm too scared to even post it. o.o;;;
But let's not get off topic. XD
Ish you gonna post some more? *pokes* =P

Kylie-chan
February 4th, 2005, 01:57 AM
Mayhaps... << >> I'll see how PC reacts to my crappy poetry first. XD

Demonic Angel
February 4th, 2005, 03:07 AM
*stabs the world "crappy" and replaces with the world "fantastic"*
Okiez...*waits for PC to come and react* o.O
Anyway, I really hope you post more. ^^

Kylie-chan
February 4th, 2005, 03:24 AM
Okay. I might. But I have to go.

I'll keep writing it anyway. XD

Kelsey
February 4th, 2005, 07:35 AM
Listen to them laugh at you and feel them tear at your skin
Theyll rip you to pieces like sharks because you dont fit in
Cling on to me and well fly to a haven so very far away
Well escape to tomorrow and flee from the agony of yesterday

Its time to stand up for purity and truth among them all
Time to wipe away the tears and for you to stop fearing a fall
Take a risk and jump with your arms out wide, maybe youll fly
Soar above the others; its your turn to laugh and their turn to cry

Theyll shriek in horror as their plastic caring masquerade
Crumbles and turns to dust and their lies begin to fade
Dont worry about now, youve endured enough
Youve weakened yourself trying to be tough

Simply cling onto all thats real; soon your revenge will come
Subtracted from them, fortune will add itself to your sum
Just hold onto me; youre protected in my arms, tight in my embrace
Until the end of you and the end of me, this will be the (last) safe place

Youll prove your worth on this place we call Earth, you can endure
Their trivial cruelty; dont let them make you feel any more insecure
Just hang onto me; youre safe in my arms, youre my only in the human race
Well fight until the final end of you the final end of me for the last safe place

Now, why would anyone laugh, Kylie? <3 This poem is wonderful! I absolutely adore it. ^^

Now, first, I might recommend that you try splitting your poem up into stanzas, which is how a poem is formally set up. This helps so that the poem gives off a nicer vibe and is easier to read as well. ^___^

Ususally, stanzas are broken up into groups of four lines that tend to fit with each other. In the quote above, I've split up your poem as an example. ^^ Now, you don't have to do this, but it sure does make the flow of your poem much better. ^o^

I thought this poem was beautiful. ^_____^ It made me think of someone who had been tormented, humiliated, and teased throughout their life. They always tried to fight back yet held it in the whole time. They were dying, but no one could tell by just looking at them. They were dying from the inside out - as one may put it.

Then, the voice of a dear friend calls to them, encouraging them to take a stand and defend themselves. Spread your wings and soar over the highest mountain, and gaze into the deepest sea. It was truly a wonderful feeling this poem gave off. ^__^

Awsome job Kylie, and never be afraid of your writing, no one will laugh, you have a true gift as a writer, never forget that. ^_~ *hugs*

~Kelsey

Lady Pearl
February 4th, 2005, 02:07 PM
Username, Dark_Pikachu, has entered the Poetry building! Yay, I'm so glad you have came to post your poem! It seems you have spent time perfecting your poem, good job! ^^ It's rhyming, it's even, and most importantly, it shows your emotions! No one will laugh, they'll do the opposite. ;_; Not cry, unless it's heartbreaking, they'll be happy for you! ^^ I wish to see your poetry later on, as your skill overwhelms mine. XP

Kylie-chan
February 4th, 2005, 03:05 PM
Thank you so much guys. ^_^ It cheers me up immensely to hear all this nice stuff said about it. XD

KLS
February 4th, 2005, 04:33 PM
great job, i truly enjoyed reading this poem. your syntax is clear and your message is easily read.

EvIL_CAjUN_CHIkIN
February 4th, 2005, 04:43 PM
Who would laugh at that?!

That's an awesome poem , how long did it take you to have such an epiphany???

*loves it*

Kylie-chan
February 7th, 2005, 07:45 PM
Thankish all very muchly kindly ^-^ I really am not talented, but meh...

Here ish some crappy junk I showed Yami ages ago. XD

Shut your eyes and inside yourself search deeper
The mountains in your life are so much steeper
Will you ever climb them? Looks like youre sinking
Lately the pain hurts so much, youve been thinking


One endless struggle to survive
How will you ever stay alive?
You want to end it all, end it all
Youre metaphorically short when you used to rise tall


All your agony will just crash down on you
You wanna hit pause for awhile, stop time too
Wanna procrastinate the ache, with it you dont want to deal
When you wake up itll hit you hard and all will become real


On an eternal race, the pain stalks you, you it will catch
Looks like youre gonna have to give in, youve met your match
What is the point of going on for ages fighting in vain
When eventually youll be defeated by unbearable pain?


It all comes on top of you, you just dont have the strength
Shut your eyes, when you hit the dead end after times terrible length
You wont ever surmount it, life is just too hard
You weep because the world broke your heart into shards


Suicide is the only way out of this deep dark pit
If motivation to live is a fire then yours is unlit
Lying here covered in blood with a knife at your neck
Tears in your eyes you are now just an empty wreck

Miyu-chan
February 7th, 2005, 08:42 PM
I love how you rhymed this poem, and it gives me the feeling of you comforting a friend to live on, not fall into the depths of depression.

I <3ed the second poem too~ =D It shows what'll happen if you fall into depression, or make one mistake, etc.

Demonic Angel
February 8th, 2005, 02:57 AM
For the zillionth time, that is not a crappy poem, and therefore you aren't a crappy poet either. XD
That poem has a lot of depth and meaning, and it was beautifully rhymed. ^^
I hope you keep writing poetry, Kylie-chan~ ^^

Jolty-kun
February 8th, 2005, 03:01 AM
Woa! 0.0;, wow kylie.. your poetry.. ichs amazing, seriously, the way you rhymed it, i love em both ^^;

Eliana
February 9th, 2005, 02:40 PM
.....o.o;; that was DEEP Kylie....
I take it you were depressesed? that is the most amazing thing...its straight from the heart...and I'm not laughing Kylie...you used a lot of "big" (XD) words, and they were powerfuly too....

Still not laughin,
~Eli

Kylie-chan
February 12th, 2005, 09:17 PM
They say nothing can go wrong, nothing good comes to an end
But all they do is play an endless game of pretend
I hate their illusion and I want to tear it away
I want them to see nothing is okay

My truth is all it takes to shatter their dreams
Behind naivety nothing is as it seems...
They thought everything would be alright
No it isn't and it won't be I'm frightened tonight

I wept and I screamed but only in vain
Would they ever understand this crazy pain?
Nobody listened when I said I wished I was dead
Nobody cared when I took a knife to myself and bled

There is no compassion in the world anymore
They say they love but what for?
And I wanted to make them feel the hurt; theyre on the happy side of humanity
They will never understand what it means when depression drives you to insanity


More stuff. XD ^^;

Demonic Angel
February 12th, 2005, 09:31 PM
Ish, that was so sad... ._.;
But the way you wrote it was beautiful to say the least. The flow is great, as is the rhyming.
Great job! ^^

Dark Light Angel
February 12th, 2005, 10:28 PM
*stares at the poems* I can't really express how great those poems are in my mind but I can at least try. Kylie, it is very very possibly that those are the saddest, most beautiful, and greatest poems I have ever read. I love them very very much. I can't believe you called those crappy because they are far from it. Each and everyone holds the same beauty yet somehow they each retain something different in their beauty.

Carlito-san
February 13th, 2005, 06:06 PM
Those poems were so beautiful.They were very deep.=*(

Anacortes
February 14th, 2005, 07:50 AM
It's some good poems I'll never be able to write..
Oh well..I wish you could post some more..

Kylie-chan
February 24th, 2005, 09:46 PM
o_o Just... it's crap... well I'm writing some, I'm experiencing writers' block though, evil ><

Eliana
February 25th, 2005, 05:04 AM
>.<' God darnit Kylie...
http://www.pokecommunity.com/showthread.php?t=27164 Do you see that Kylie? that is MY thread. It is the LARGEST poetry thread here. I wish I could write as good as you, because you're one of the best poets I have ever known...you express yourself with such great detail, and that's something I will NEVER do.

~Eli

P.S WRITE MORE!!! *turns writers block into circle* Writing Circle not writers block!!!! XD And you WRITE in writers circle XD!!!

Kylie-chan
March 2nd, 2005, 06:45 PM
*laughs scornfully at her own poetry*

Its okay for them to say to be just like their ideal
But you cant aspire to be theirs in a world thats real
And if you start getting your hopes and standards too high
Start putting all your belief into a little lie
When the mask is pulled away and you fall down low
The higher you were, the more itll hurt and the lower youll go
And some things are just impossible no matter how hard you try
Whats the point of wasting effort in perfection til you die?
Cause youre even better knowing when to stop, its maturity
Better than turning determination into desperation into insecurity
And the more you listen to them the more youll feel worse
Perhaps a huge conscience combined with perfectionism is a curse
Perfectionism isnt like high standards no not at all
Sometimes you just cant climb that too-high wall
And their ideal is uncertainty inside, because theyll never practice what they preach
Hypocrites trying to change us all to a point of perfection you just cant reach
Maybe they should change themselves first and prove that you can be completely right
Or otherwise youre just battling for an impossible goal in an impossible fight

Dark Light Angel
March 2nd, 2005, 07:58 PM
o.o Wow. I love that Kylie. It's deep, it's beautiful, it's friggin true.

Kylie-chan
March 7th, 2005, 12:49 AM
Here's some more crappy stuff. But I just had to write it. I wrote it about a song. x.x

When I drowned in depression I clung onto you
In your sweet voice I found solace and comfort too
And when I was sinking on you I relied
And that day I nearly committed suicide
I held on in shadows to your light
I knew youd guide me to what was right
You were inhuman, unable for me to hold
For I can only listen to your lyrics unfold
Just listening to you softly in the far away distance
I close my eyes and dissolve into a dreamlike trance
I couldnt run and I couldnt hide
All I would have done is died
You swallowed all the tears I cried
My innermost emotion in you I can confide
My only friend in a world of bitter tears
My only comfort for facing another thousand icy years
And the thought of struggling another second is wearing
Especially when nobody listens and nobodys caring
But I think that with your help I can cope
But I think that with your help theres hope
Melody, melody, tonight Ill finally close my eyes and fall asleep
Yet you will dry my eyes and sustain me as I weep