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MeLoVeGhOsTs
February 6th, 2005, 01:23 PM
What will come tomorrow?

What will come tomorrow?
What will come today?
Will it be joy or will it be sorrow?
Will it remain the same way?

What will come tomorrow? Mother doesn't know.

Do I have to cry?
Do I have to laugh?
Will I have to lie?
Or will I have to love?

What will come tomorrow? Father doesn't know.

Will I fear pain?
Will I fear death?
Will I break the chain?

What will come tomorrow?

Will it be rain?
Or will it be snow?

For you will never know...

Written here and now, probably full of spelling errors. It just felt I had to write a poem. Sry 'bout that.

Eliana
February 6th, 2005, 01:26 PM
I loved it!
It shows the uncertainty of human kind...we wish to know many things...when pain comes, when happiness comes, etc. And when we cant find out, we ask our elders..but yet they do not know either.
10/10! ^_^

Just one thing...
"Will it be rain?
Or will it be snow?"
I think it might sound even better if you take out the "or"

~Eli

KLS
February 6th, 2005, 01:26 PM
This isn't bad.
The only problem i had with this poem was that the questioning part became to repetitive.
Anyways, this was decent.

MeLoVeGhOsTs
February 6th, 2005, 02:10 PM
Oh thanks. Nice to see you loved my first work. :)

The repetive questioning part was actually ment to be that repetive. To make it very clear that the we all have millions of questions. But since I'm a n00bish poem writter I probably didn't really took time how to bring it out in public. My bad, thanks anyways ^_^

Eliana
February 6th, 2005, 02:13 PM
In my opinion, the repetitivness isnt bad at all ^_^
Questioning is meant to be repetitive...

MeLoVeGhOsTs
February 6th, 2005, 02:14 PM
That was my point, but I guess not everybody liked the part. Each to his own =)

Kelsey
February 6th, 2005, 04:54 PM
What will come tomorrow?
What will come today?
Will it be joy or will it be sorrow?
Will it remain the same way?

What will come tomorrow? Mother doesn't know.

Do I have to cry?
Do I have to laugh?
Will I have to lie?
Or will I have to love?

What will come tomorrow? Father doesn't know.

Will I fear pain?
Will I fear death?
Will I break the chain?

What will come tomorrow?

Will it be rain?
Or will it be snow?

For you will never know...

Written here and now, probably full of spelling errors. It just felt I had to write a poem. Sry 'bout that.

Actually there were no spelling errors. XD I am happy to see you've written a poem too, woot! X3

This poem signifies the unknown in a way. For you never know what will happen tomorrow until the day breaches its limits. You'll never know what's to come until it happens. Awsome job with the entire poem, I adored it. ^o^

~Kelsey

Dignity
February 6th, 2005, 05:40 PM
^__^ great job =D i like this... wow lotsa great new poets around!! ~origin

MeLoVeGhOsTs
February 7th, 2005, 12:49 AM
Well I'm not really new *coughcheckmyCLOSEDwelcometopiccough* (:p), but it seems like you guys liked my first work =D. Kewl! No spelling errors? Lol. XD

Well glad you liked it, I'll write some more later.

Bye,

MeLoVeGhOsTs
February 7th, 2005, 09:05 AM
Another Poem.

Another poem, I will make.
Another poem, reputation at stake.

What am I saying? Reputation?
Why am I staying? Transformation?

I have no reputation, no title, no pride.

Who will respect me?
Who will destroy me?
Do not ask, you will see.

It is only a poem, another poem...

Written by who?
Written for who?

Is it for me? Is it for you?

It does not matter. It is only another poem...

****************

Well there you have it. Another poem. Nothing special. It doesn't really fit. It are diffrent questions mixed up. No harmony what so ever. Just some louzy facts/questions written together. Enjoy.

*****************

Love

How does it feel?

Does it feel nice?
Does it feel cold?

No,
I feel sold.

That precious feeling.
It feels like I'm healing.

I cherish it so much.

It loves me on the inside,
But eats me on the outside.

Why does it happen?
Why is it there?

Love.

*******************

A love poem. 'Bout feeling, I know it sounds a bit stupid, but I don't care...I feel good by posting this. :)

Kyosuke
February 7th, 2005, 01:59 PM
Wow MeLoVeGhOsTs from GHPF? Here? XD I haven't been there for ages now...

Those poems are really something else ^^. "Another One" really speaks the truth when it comes to being noticed and the way people preceive you to be in this strange and unusual world that we live in.

After reading "Love", it really asks the question "What is it?" and why do you feel the way you do when it comsumes you.

Nicely done ^^.

KLS
February 7th, 2005, 04:59 PM
I enjoyed "love" alot, that poem seemed as if it reflected on personal experiences.

Dignity
February 7th, 2005, 07:00 PM
good job =3 i like em both... just a little more improvment, and you'll get there ^__^ ~origin

MeLoVeGhOsTs
February 8th, 2005, 01:00 AM
Oh, I edited love ^^:

Love

How does it feel?

Does it feel nice?
Does it feel cold?

No,
It feels like gold.

That precious feeling.
My heart, is what you are stealing.

Your love is what I desire.
Your smile is what I admire.

You love me on the inside,
But hate me on the outside.

Why does it happen?
Why is it there?

Love.

Wow MeLoVeGhOsTs from GHPF? Here? XD I haven't been there for ages now...

Yep the real deal =P Well it's kinda quiet down there, not to many members out there, but still 1337 =P. I crossed FrostFire in postcount yesterday, not that postcount matters, but it's about the most intresting thing that happened in 2 days XD.

Oh well glad you liked my poems, why don't you join the DPS?

Btw: Do mind that I have only been learning english for 2 years, so know you know where the spelling errors come from XD.

I enjoyed "love" alot, that poem seemed as if it reflected on personal experiences.

The edited version clariffies this even more...

MeLoVeGhOsTs
February 8th, 2005, 03:16 AM
A haiku by MeLoVeGhOsTs,

The stream of water,
rushing down the waterfall.
To resolve in unity.

MeLoVeGhOsTs
February 8th, 2005, 10:16 AM
Before I post: This will get annoying, so could a mod place all my poems in 1 topic? Thankies ^_^

Cinquains:

My Guitar

Guitar
long, expensive
buying, playing, dying
Will it work? It is hopeless.
Scrap

Kyosuke
February 8th, 2005, 01:04 PM
Its impressive that you you just started learning English, and can type so well... I dind't even notice XD.

Don't worry about minor spelling mistakes though, its the quality of the work that matters the most ^^. Not that you shouldn't worry at all about it, but its something very minor that comes next to quality.

MeLoVeGhOsTs
February 8th, 2005, 02:10 PM
Oh thankies, I'll do that. ^^.

Dignity
February 8th, 2005, 02:10 PM
Well, here is something the poetry section of PC doesn't see often: a cinquain! So congrats on your originality! ^_^

Again, no spelling or grammar mistakes, so that's something good to see.

Also, you do not want to place extra work on the mods, so do it yourself. Delete all of your old poem threads, and make an anthology, and then post all of your poems in there. ^_^ If you post poems quite often, it is better to make a collection, so it doesn't get annoying, or so your poems arent scattered all over the place. XD;; But keep up the good work! ~origin

Edit: I did not see this before, but I have realized you have double posted. Please do not do that again, it is breaking the rules. Thanks.

Kyosuke
February 8th, 2005, 02:17 PM
No its ok xXxLaYdee0rIgInxXx ^^, if its poetry or fan-fiction its ok to double post as long as its a post related to that, and not a comment.

You really seem to know your poetry MLG, and followed the rules really well. I really enjoyed reading the haiku poem, its relaxing ^^.

Also, I just merged all of your threads MeLoVeGhOsTs into one.

Dignity
February 8th, 2005, 02:20 PM
Oops, sorry about that Lance. ^^;; My mistake. I will try better next time.

Also, Lance is right. Reading the haiku is relaxing, I don't see to many of those either! ^__^ A quite original poet, if i may say so myself! ~origin xD

MeLoVeGhOsTs
February 9th, 2005, 01:25 AM
I didn't double post, that were 2 diffrent topics that Liquid Thunder formed in 1 topic, making it seem like I double posted. Sorry 'bout that ^^"

Yeah I liked the cinquian thingy ^^. Haiku's pwn. I'll hope to do a Tanka one day. :)

w000t, I'm original XD.

Its impressive that you you just started learning English

Oh well, 2 years isn't really starting eh =P

and can type so well

*cough* XD.

A quite original poet

Thankies ^_^

Oh well, if you're intresting in some more of my writing, read my fan fic ;)

I'll post some more poems later. God, I'm in a writing mood this week. Must have been the holidays =P

MeLoVeGhOsTs
February 11th, 2005, 02:32 AM
Sorry do double post, but if I edited nobody would see my new poem ^_^

Here it is. Well it's something...special.

Suicide

I'm sitting here. Watching, staring.
Waiting for the time, that he will come.
Waiting, ready to die.

I'm tired of waiting. When will he come?
How much longer, must I bare the pain?
The pain of ignorance.

I'm tired of waiting. When will he cme?
How much longer, must I feel alone?
The feeling of pain, the feeling of destruction.

I'm tired of waiting. He will never come.
I must go to him.
I must be free, free of all pain.

I will go. Go to him.
With only a minor movement,
The pain will go away

Suicide. It is only another step.
A step towards total freedom, the freedom of us all.

MeLoVeGhOsTs
February 12th, 2005, 02:30 PM
A new poem. If anybody still cares.

One night

One night,
That night.
It was everything I ever dreamed about.

One night,
That night.
You were all mine.

One night,
That night,
It was just the two of us.

One night,
That night.
The world stopped before our eyes.

One night,
That night.
Time froze, just for us.

One night,
That night,
Is over, but not forgotten.

One night,
That night...

MeLoVeGhOsTs
February 17th, 2005, 10:33 AM
Another one coming up.


That girl

There she was,
smiling all nice.
Sitting besides me,
on the morning bus.

She moves elegantly.
As I watch her lips so carefully,
Still smiling so gently.

She had those populair friends.
As they yelled at me,
I watched full of suspense.
Waiting until she reacts.

The bell rang and she left.
She left me there so lonely,
so broken, so suprised.

The little part of hope,
was washed away,
like a chalk drawning on a rainy day.

That girl, so smooth she was.
That girl, so beautifull she was.

That girl, so inaccessible she was...

MeLoVeGhOsTs
March 5th, 2005, 03:40 AM
She 'n Me.

She was so close, yet I didn't open my mouth.
She was so sweet, yet I didn't look south.
The south, the place, were she belonged.
She did look, but I was afraid.
Afraid of loosing that good moment.
That moment of feelings.

I watched a movie and felt confident,
enough to finaly say a word.
A gentle hello was all I desired.
But then, just then, you were tired.

Why does the real world struck so much harder then a movie?
Why don't you want to talk to me?