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[Technya]
February 8th, 2005, 11:24 AM
~*Death by Suicide*~

Waited long enough,
Soulless I sit here watching my blood run,
Tried as hard as I should,
Held out as long as I could,
But now Im done,

Only thing I feel is sickness,
Just wish you didnt have to see this,
All I ever heard was hold on,
Those words just sickened me more,
I know youll mourn,
But believe you me its not for the worst,

(Just hold on)
Its all I ever heard
(Youll make it through)
Im so sickened by those words
(Have faith)
How can I when all I see is blank?

I fall on my knees,
I beg this to be over soon,
Slow death is all I wished,
For hours I wished for death,
Now I wait for my last breath,

(Just hold on)
Its all I ever heard
(Youll make it through)
Im so sickened by those words
(Have faith)
How can I when all I see is blank?

How can I see when Ive gone blind?
Are all the doors locked?
Screaming in pain and agony I yell as I cry,
Save me from the void Ive fallen in!

I stare at the crimson ghost before me,
Guess I was never meant to be,
Looking at the sky high above,
I remember what it was like to feel love,
Now its an empty feeling with no meaning,
Save me from the void Ive fallen in!!

Away Ill be but never will I forget those that had a place in my heart,
Ill watch over you since I beg this fate never to fall upon you,
Forget this action of selfishness Ive done and remember who I was,
Dont know where Ill end or if Ill ever find rest,
There was no strength left in me,
But I hope a lesson for you this will be,
Save me from the void Ive fallen in!!

How can I see when Ive gone blind?
(Just hold on)
How can I see when Ive gone blind?
(Youll make it through)
How can I see when Ive gone blind?
(Have faith)
How can I see when Ive gone blind?
And all the doors are locked

~Song~

Dignity
February 8th, 2005, 02:04 PM
Well, your point here is clear. The poem is obviously about suicide. No spelling or grammar mistakes, which is good, and which Kelsey would be proud about.
All in all, I think it is good... But it makes me wonder, is it a song or a poem? In the title you only have "Songs and Poems", but you never specified what it was.... ^^;; Keep up the good job though! ~origin

Kyosuke
February 8th, 2005, 02:27 PM
I think Shadow of Ash plans to put both songs and poems into one thread, and that first post was meant to be a poem (correct me if I'm wrong ^^).

*claps hands in applause* That was a very deep poem, in terms of the topic of suicide and how one feels when they are attempting it, and words that are meant to be supportive mean absolulty nothing, because others don't exactly know how you feel.

I'm not really the one to talk about grammar and puncuation ^^', but after each stanza that you did, you added a comma insted of a period, and even capitalized the next stanza, maybe putting a period insted.

You're really good at writing poem from what I seen, and this time its no exception, great job ^^.

[Technya]
February 8th, 2005, 02:37 PM
Thanks guys. Well I fixed it up. This first one is a song but I'll id them from now on just to avoid confusion ^_^

[Technya]
February 10th, 2005, 03:45 PM
~*Spellbound*~

I cast the circle and wait for my guide,
Invoking the guardians,
I sit still as I watch the moon work the night sky
Letting the waning beauty cleanse every lie

Invoking thee mother of all, being of grace
Forsaking all harm from my race
Lead the way for I have gone astray
Watch my every step
Release me of this spell, which has me bound

Holy Lady bring me to your side
I seek your wisdom and peace of mind
Improve my windy element
Guide your faithful through the harsh winters
Cast harm from your true servants
I invoke thee Lady Isis

~Poem~
(This originaly is a spell but I changed some bits to act as a poem)

[Technya]
February 10th, 2005, 04:07 PM
~*Lost Hopes*~

Dont know what to do
Its something we all go through
There are few who can see this
I am one of them for I too have been victimized about it
Simple was our time and people
We used to admire the wonders given by the spirits

Now we barely remember life itself is a gift
Conflicts the people we depend on bring us
Those we think holy and wise are anything but
Before The One you preach but behind youre a leech
Those of us with the will look to the small traces of spirituality that are left
Only to have them turn around and have them laugh at our faces

You see a lost lamb, a lost soul
And you mock at our pain
Not knowing it could trigger our end
You worship perfection and superficial tactics
You never bother to look inside and see the pain
Hiding in the dark our hate builds at the world dominated by prejudice

Fanatics only look to convert failing to understand we no longer find interest in their hypocrisies
Leaders seeking to conquer and have the last word in a fight
Never realizing how their game of conquest steals our light
Its a world gone mad
No longer with the pureness it once had
What shall we do?
Sit there and wait it out
Or take a stand and reclaim our fate

~Poem~

angel
February 18th, 2005, 06:03 AM
Your good.
Your song scared and made me started crying because i remebered someone that did that.

[Technya]
February 25th, 2005, 06:38 AM
Thanks Angel ^_^

Bloody Dream

Come nights shadow
A different world comes together
She hurries home for the ghosts shall come to claim her
She cries at the lights setting
For she knows what most are forgetting
Behind a good rest and peaceful slumber
Few of them like her suffer
A world of nightmares dancing in the air
Creatures haunting every corner
All her cries cannot satisfy their malice
Not even a spell or a silver chalice
A world so twisted not even angels comfort
Theyre gonna get you. Is all they offer
Pray as she might
Shell never free herself of this spite
A black cats wicked curse
She knows its all hers
She can cry if she wants all theyll do is taunt
Her dreams are of blood and gore
While she runs from it out the door
I take it and make it mine

angel
February 25th, 2005, 06:41 AM
But it still scared me. :\

[Technya]
February 25th, 2005, 06:43 AM
LOL How'd it scare so much? :\

angel
February 25th, 2005, 06:50 AM
*Shrugs*I don't knew i just did.

MegaDitto
February 25th, 2005, 06:53 AM
But it still scared me. :\
Uh yeah that's the theme of the Poems and Songs.I liked Blood Stream the most.

<[HaZaRdOuS_EnIgMa]>
February 27th, 2005, 04:07 PM
hey ^ ^ i liked them all, but i liked spellbound especially good job ^ ^

Kelsey
February 27th, 2005, 06:40 PM
Awwwwwwwwwwws, all of your poems are so thoughtful and so very maeningful, Shadow. <3<3 I've read all the ones you've created so far and I have to say, every last one of them is magnificant. ^^

You use real-life topics such as death and suicide and place them into your own words, giving off a sensible and meaningful vibe. ^__^

There weren't any spelling errors or anything like that, so great work on all of them. Now, this is really what I like to see in a poet. Someone who's willing to go the distance and really let their voice be heard. ^^ Awsome job Shadow. ;D

~Kelsey

[Technya]
March 9th, 2005, 08:13 AM
Thanks you guys ^_^ nice to know you enjoyed them.

~*Left Side of Faith*~

Why does it seem that everywhere I go nothing feels right?
Where is that smile that once shun on my face?
Where did all the faith I had run off to?
Why do they look at me as if I was part Lucifers clan?

Moments of happiness seem to shorten with each day
I havent managed to make sanity stay
Long do I wait for this pain to end
Its most likely that it shall never be more than a dream


~*Salvation or ****ation?*~

Cast from your side or so they say
Heresy is all they see
Burning all who refuse their leads

The slaughter of thousands for their teachings was said to have ended
Never have they actually managed to really mend
New generations suffer not greatly as our past did

But from old wounds blood can still fall
You say you are compassionate and understanding
Yet you refuse to let us dwell in your same dominion

You preach of greatness and of wonders
As do we for we are all connected to the same wonders
To you we seem like ungodly creatures when in truth we have our own inspiration

Is what you preach and teach salvation?
Or are you simply searching for revenge for all the pain you were once put through in obligation?
Whatever your intentions may be keep in mind we are suffering what you once suffered

[Technya]
March 9th, 2005, 08:41 AM
~*Goddess of the Shadows*~

Sphere of blue
Of simplicity and good
Protect your bearer
From hurt and Terror

Enchant the night
And give me might
Beauty of the shadows
Never turns her back no matter how shallow

Her light gives to thee
Everything you need
Consolation from stress
This she too can express