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Eliana
February 13th, 2005, 12:50 PM
Well, I figure I shouldnt be posting all the info in DCC XP.
This is indeed a real book I will attempt to publish. (Hopefully by age 17).
The idea needs more thought, but here is what I have so far:

Hikari

Hikari (Meaning Light) is the bearer of the Orb of Light/Gold, but she does not know this until around the 3rd book. She is 15 for most of the book. She can be extremely loyal, but she is extremely sensitive and when angered can cause disaster. She will most likely have a connection to some powers of wind, water, and light (this is yet to be decided). She is not connected with the feminine world, rather striving to be part of what the boys do. She dislikes being put down, and is a natural leader. She tends to have moments when she wants to disappear from the human world, and not communicate with anyone
Semi-tall, around 57/58, Skinny. She has brown eyes, with dirty blonde hair.



Kuro

Kuro (Means Darkness) is the bearer of the Orb of Darkness. He is aware of this. After Hikari accidentally causes a Firestorm in Lanya, they are separated. Kuro ends up in a city and murders a man who attempted to kill him. This man possessed the orb, but was evil. The orb then possessed Kuro. Kuro could not control it for quite some while, but learnt to cope with it. Kuro is the same age as Hikari. He has black spiky hair and green eyes. Hes very tall, above 6 ft. Kuro is totally out of tune from the world, but is still faithful and friendly to those he trusts. He may also be in touch with certain powers (e.g. Fire, Earth, Darkness) He can be considered a rebel and a loner, seeking a fate. He doesnt like fighting. If forced to fight, he is extremely powerful.

Takai

Takai (means Death) is the twin brother of Kuro, separated at birth. They look alike, except Takai has piercing blue eyes. He possesses the Orb of Death. He hates fighting and refuses to hurt anything living. This is because when any soul dies, it must pass through the Orb of Death, so he feels the pain they went through. This also made him very distant many times of his life, though he has some dry humor. Whether he has powers or not is unknown, because he does not use them. He lives in a castle of some sort and is a prince.


Akizeru

Akizeru (Means Fallen Angel) is the chosen holder of the Orb of Life. She use to be a leader amongst the angels, but was overcome by the power of the orb. She then used to the orb for her own purposes, and was banished from the angels. She still has powers, powers of life and evil mixed together. She has gray wings, with very long wavy black/brown hair, and cold gray/blue eyes. She bears the Sword of Tenra (The Divine Sword).

Sword of Tenra

The Sword of Tenra (The Divine Sword) is one of the most mysterious artifacts in existence of Daiwod. It is said to be an amplification device of the 4 main orbs (Light, Dark, Life, and Death). The swords true power and strength can only then be seen when all 4 are placed on it. In addition, if all 4 are on the sword, they can co-exist in full balance.

BASIC PLOT

Many years ago, 5 orbs were created
or so it was though. These orbs consisted of Fire, Water, Wind, Earth, and Rock. Rock was different from Earth- Earth was the controller of the forests. Rock was not what they expected it to besomething corrupted it, and it became 2 orbs- The orbs Darkness and Death. The Death Orb had a mind of its own, and it disappeared, possessing one it believed worthy. The Orb of Darkness did not do this. The creators of the Rock orb merely threw it down to earth. The creators then gave the 4 other orbs to more powerful beings.
There was one in the lead of them all- The Gold Orb. The Gold Orb sensed that 2 orbs of evil existed in the world. Therefore it split itself into two orbs- The Orb of Life, and the Orb of Light. The Orb of Life was given to Akizeru, and the Orb of Light disappeared
However, disaster would strike. In more recent times, a man of greed and lust found the rock orb, and became corrupted. Delusional, he then ran through the streets of cities like a madman. One day, he was killed by a boy, and the orb possessed the boy. That boy did not give in so easily to the Orb of Darkness
The balance of Light and Darkness is delicate. One day, the balance is disrupted completely due to a weakening in the Orb of Light, ruining the balance of power between Evil and good. The only way to restore balance is to find the 1 who possesses the Orb of Darkness and kill him, and make The orb of Light and the Orb of Darkness exist together.

I can use as much help as possible, so if you'd like to help, I'd appreciate it! ^____^

~Eli

Lizzie
February 13th, 2005, 01:49 PM
yay! eil! the last time you told me that story it was much shorter, i'm glad you added some stuff to it, like the sword and the angel and stuff, it sounds great, I think there needs to be more evil though, the more problems, the more interesting and longer the book gets, you should maybe have someone or something that wants to gain control of the orbs to maybe rule the world or something, I don't figure it out ^_^ anyway great job!

Eliana
February 13th, 2005, 02:51 PM
Well, thats not ALL the characters...I still have a ways to go ^___^ but thanks! (2/4 of the characters are bad so far XP)

Kelsey
February 14th, 2005, 05:57 PM
Well, I figure I shouldnt be posting all the info in DCC XP.
This is indeed a real book I will attempt to publish. (Hopefully by age 17).
The idea needs more thought, but here is what I have so far:

Hikari

Hikari (Meaning Light) is the bearer of the Orb of Light/Gold, but she does not know this until around the 3rd book. She is 15 for most of the book. She can be extremely loyal, but she is extremely sensitive and when angered can cause disaster. She will most likely have a connection to some powers of wind, water, and light (this is yet to be decided). She is not connected with the feminine world, rather striving to be part of what the boys do. She dislikes being put down, and is a natural leader. She tends to have moments when she wants to disappear from the human world, and not communicate with anyone
Semi-tall, around 57/58, Skinny. She has brown eyes, with dirty blonde hair.



Kuro

Kuro (Means Darkness) is the bearer of the Orb of Darkness. He is aware of this. After Hikari accidentally causes a Firestorm in Lanya, they are separated. Kuro ends up in a city and murders a man who attempted to kill him. This man possessed the orb, but was evil. The orb then possessed Kuro. Kuro could not control it for quite some while, but learnt(learned) to cope with it. Kuro is the same age as Hikari. He has black spiky hair and green eyes. Hes very tall, above 6 ft. Kuro is totally out of tune from the world, but is still faithful and friendly to those he trusts. He may also be in touch with certain powers (e.g. Fire, Earth, Darkness) He can be considered a rebel and a loner, seeking a fate. He doesnt like fighting. If forced to fight, he is extremely powerful.

Takai

Takai (means Death) is the twin brother of Kuro, separated at birth. They look alike, except Takai has piercing blue eyes. He possesses the Orb of Death. He hates fighting and refuses to hurt anything living. This is because when any soul dies, it must pass through the Orb of Death, so he feels the pain they went through. This also made him very distant many times of his life, though he has some dry humor. Whether he has powers or not is unknown, because he does not use them. He lives in a castle of some sort and is a prince.


Akizeru

Akizeru (Means Fallen Angel) is the chosen holder of the Orb of Life. She use to be a leader amongst the angels, but was overcome by the power of the orb. She then used to the orb for her own purposes, and was banished from the angels. She still has powers, powers of life and evil mixed together. She has gray wings, with very long wavy black/brown hair, and cold gray/blue eyes. She bears the Sword of Tenra (The Divine Sword).

Sword of Tenra

The Sword of Tenra (The Divine Sword) is one of the most mysterious artifacts in existence of Daiwod. It is said to be an amplification device of the 4 main orbs (Light, Dark, Life, and Death). The swords true power and strength can only then be seen when all 4 are placed on it. In addition, if all 4 are on the sword, they can co-exist in full balance.

BASIC PLOT

Many years ago, 5 orbs were created
or so it was though(thought). These orbs consisted of Fire, Water, Wind, Earth, and Rock. Rock was different from Earth- Earth was the controller of the forests. Rock was not what they expected it to besomething corrupted it, and it became 2 orbs- The orbs Darkness and Death. The Death Orb had a mind of its own, and it disappeared, possessing one it believed worthy. The Orb of Darkness did not do this. The creators of the Rock orb merely threw it down to earth. The creators then gave the 4 other orbs to more powerful beings.
There was one in the lead of them all- The Gold Orb. The Gold Orb sensed that 2 orbs of evil existed in the world. Therefore it split itself into two orbs- The Orb of Life, and the Orb of Light. The Orb of Life was given to Akizeru, and the Orb of Light disappeared
However, disaster would strike. In more recent times, a man of greed and lust found the rock orb, and became corrupted. Delusional, he then ran through the streets of cities like a madman. One day, he was killed by a boy, and the orb possessed the boy. That boy did not give in so easily to the Orb of Darkness
The balance of Light and Darkness is delicate. One day, the balance is disrupted completely due to a weakening in the Orb of Light, ruining the balance of power between Evil and good. The only way to restore balance is to find the 1 who possesses the Orb of Darkness and kill him, and make The orb of Light and the Orb of Darkness exist together.

I can use as much help as possible, so if you'd like to help, I'd appreciate it! ^____^

~Eli

OMGoodness, Eli! ^o^ It's sooooooooooo nice to see that you're posting a fanfic. ^_______________^

Well, first, a few problems. I love your layout of your prologue, and how you addressed the main characters to us, that was quite ingenuis. ^^

But, in some areas, you wrote out numers as their numerical form (ex: two = 2). In fanfictions, you must always write out any number that's ten or lower. Otherwise, feel free to type out the number any way you wish. ^o^

Also, there were a couple spelling errors which I corrected above. ^^ All you did was misspell 'learned' and 'thought' .^^

Well, the plot is wonderful so far. ^^ I adore fictional stories, so I am sure to enjoy this one. ^____________^ My favorite character so far is Takai. ^^ I just love the thought of his Death Orb, and how when people perish, their souls travel through the orb. ^o^ It sounds like a neat effect. ^.~

Awsome job so far Eli, I can't wait for the first chapter! =3

~Kelsey

Psychotic_Demon
February 17th, 2005, 03:16 PM
Looks awesome Eli! ^-~ I hope you do well. I noticed a few spelling mistakes, but other than that, its great.

Eliana
February 17th, 2005, 03:18 PM
Well, its not really the prologue, and I have so much to do...I'll try and update, thanks ^___^

~Eli

Vaporeon
February 19th, 2005, 02:09 PM
Well, whatever it is, it sure gives us a great idea of the plot. XD The descriptions are wonderful and you gave each character a neat personality too. *glomps* Keep up the great work Eli! I can't wait for Chapter One! <3<3

~Kelsey

O
February 28th, 2005, 02:17 AM
Sound good. But One Correction, Kuro means Black. If you're finding Darkness, it would be Yami. Only thing that's a bit icky is the title. Elemental is an over used word. :p