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FaerieEsqueThing
March 5th, 2005, 04:29 PM
Okay I promise this one has nothing to do with suicide...umm..yeah...

I've written another one, but for some reasons it would be inappropriate to post it here, the reasons being profanity, and censoring it would ruin it. PM me for a link to it.

Birds and Butterflies
Candy treetops and a lullaby
You can call my name
but nothing's the same

In the world of the black dove
I lay wrapped in imaginary love
Everything we never say
passes in a lifetime that is a day

Rapid chaos and entity
Sealed from the horror that is reality
In a place nobody else can see
I watch my perfect sky float over me

I lie inside in my mind forever
With just me and my thoughts together
In a field of orange flowers
I lay by myself for hours

In my false sky, I search for my dreams
But all I find are broken screams
the imaginary wind whips my hair
so I walk along with out a care

Do not try to rouse my sleeping soul
It's lost in a world where eveything is cold
I'm the souless queen of a city, where nothing is sure
the goddess of Imaginary World

the Nation where your sanity hangs by a thread
a sacred land where you dare not tread
Where roses are blue and violets are red
Where all is understood, yet nothing is said

In my refuge, I have not a fear
I sleep in peace, I shed not a tear
I seldom wonder what's on the other side
Alive out of love that is made from spite

Kyosuke
March 5th, 2005, 05:19 PM
I loved it ^^, it really tells what its likes on the true outside world and what seems to be all fine, isn't in the least and how we all have our own world that we live in thats diffrent then anything else, great job.

Anacortes
March 5th, 2005, 09:39 PM
It's so long! I like long poems, and please write some more. That one can be easily related to..^^

Jeremy
March 5th, 2005, 09:49 PM
I like it, sweetie. ^^; Yeah, we all do have our own worlds to shut us out from cruel reality.

Lily
March 5th, 2005, 10:35 PM
Very good. It somewhat reminds me of the lyrics of 'Imaginary' by Evanescence.

It might just be me- or I had troubles following the regular rhythm...either way, nice job on the vivid emotions. ^_^

Khaos Angel
March 6th, 2005, 12:48 AM
o.o Wow. That's a really good one. I like how it rhymes the whole time because that helps it flow rather nicely. Very well done. ^_^

FaerieEsqueThing
March 6th, 2005, 09:27 AM
Thank you all for your kind words.

Team Magma Girl
March 6th, 2005, 09:29 AM
I like it as well.....Great job!!!!! **jumps up and down**

Kelsey
March 6th, 2005, 11:25 AM
This poem is really neat. ^________^ It's kind of like an alternate universe, in some parts of it. =3 It shows what can go on in people's minds; not only ones who may be insane or suicudal. I often dream of an alternate universe where anything is possible. A place where I can just escape the ruins of this world we live in and go out on my own adventure. ^____^

~Kelsey