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Breezy
April 3rd, 2005, 08:46 PM
Tiny Paws

Tiny paws reach toward the sky,

Grope the sunlight,

Hug the day,

Tiny paws strive for attention,

To feel the love

without apprenhension.


Tiny paws touch human flesh,

Ride on his shoulders,

And play with his hair,

Tiny paws finally feel content,

Heart filled with joy

to wherever they went.


Tiny paws dig into another one's flesh,

Blood between its fingers,

Dirt stuck in its nails,

Tiny paws turn into tiny claws,

so it could please its master,

So the human could applause.


Tiny paws defend its face,

A hard slap to the right

for its sullen defeat,

Tiny paws cover its eyes,

Afraid of its master,

Fearing its demise.


Tiny paws bury themselves in dirt,

Eyes cast toward the sky,

Blood caked in its fur,

Tiny paws finally fall limp,

Reeking of death,

No longer able to scrimp.


Tiny paws graze the clouds,

Peering down from Heaven,

Watching the world go round,

Tiny paws reach toward the earth,

Laughing in tainted joy,

Filled with such mirth.


Tiny paws slash through human flesh,

Seeking its revenge,

Heart filled with fire,

Tiny paws did not regret his screams,

Refused to his begging,

So it could fufill its dreams.


Tiny paws were satisfied,

Completing its duties,

Saving the others,

Tiny paws bid farewell,

And waved good-bye,

For the human went to hell.

Lily
April 5th, 2005, 02:08 PM
Wow...surprisingly dark, especially the last line. Lily loved the last line. >] I don't know exactly how it could be related to Pokemon (although it is), but it could have been fine for your original work. >.>;

Very...dark. Intriguing for a Breezeh-styled fic. =D!! (MAKE MORE <3<3<3) This was excellent!...a poem with a simple concept yet it turned out thought provoking, to me at least. One of the few Pokemon poems I actually enjoyed. Wow.

Keep this up. ;.;

Breezy
April 5th, 2005, 05:30 PM
Yeah, it could of been an original poem. But I really can't see many humans commanded animals to hurt another animal. X3

Actually, to be honest, those little paw things in your signature helped me with the idea of writing this hehe.

Thankies for the review Lileh! ^^

~Amethyst_Callista_Moon~
April 6th, 2005, 07:19 PM
This..is...amazing...

I remember viewing your fics on Serebii (Yes, I'm Aurora Wish). They were great. But I like the ones in PC much better!

Breezy
April 6th, 2005, 09:39 PM
I post the same stories at SPPf here too (except Walls that Talk, an lettter off compaint, HLBMA, and a few more chapters of WSBB there than here), so you prolly didn't see this fic since it got pushed down. ^^;

Too many stories there -.- lol.

I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thank you for reviewing Angel Vaporeon! ^^

Other Lip
April 7th, 2005, 11:13 AM
Yay Breezy!!!tehoneness!!! It is me Flaming Lip

Yeah I reviewed this on SPPF pages. You added a a new stanza! Why were we deprived of that on Serebii?

Anyways I will say again that this is pretty good but the last line of the first stanza still sounds a bit unnatrual but I can't think of a replacement.

Anyways it is nice to see some SPPFers here, I won't feel completly estranged...

Yeah I am very new...

Other Lip

Breezy
April 7th, 2005, 05:36 PM
I didn't add a new stanza. o0 Maybe I changed it when you didn't notice on SPPf.

Yeah, but not much rhymes with attention and that was the best I could think of. 'Course, I could always just think of a new word for attention, but meh, I'm lazy. =D

Thanks for reviewing Other Lip (why not Flaming Lip though lol?)