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Yami_Zidane
April 18th, 2005, 12:10 PM
Hey this is my first Fan Fiction so be nice!

A Bond Is Made (Prologue)

It was a scorching day in the region of Johto, all over the place there was people and pokemon alike playing in the warmth. Just outside the city of Goldenrod a young boy called Zidane Ketai was happily playing with his friends near a pokemon daycare center.
Zidane was quite small for his age, he had short spiky hair, dark crimson eyes that glistened when the sun struck them, he was also skinny and wore a navy sleeveless shirt and a pair of cream looking shorts. Zidane and his friends were standing at the fence of the day care center looking at the pokemon relaxing in the sun, a Gyarados suddenly shot out of the water drenching the gazing children and forcing them backwards. They decided to walk along the route and look for some wild pokemon and dry off at the same time.
They came across a group of Oddish who were jumping around in the grass, Zidane said to his friends "aren't pokemon cool!" they all nodded in agreement. They all crouched down and tried to befriend the group of small plant like pokemon, just then a group of Team Rocket were walking past, they saw the small children and decided it would be 'fun' to send there pokemon to attack them. Zidane and Co were all holding an Oddish each and were having fun comparing them, after a while the Oddish seemed to be scared and struggled free from the children's grasp and ran off into a large group of trees, puzzled the kids turned around and saw three Raticates and three large men with menacing eyes staring in there direction.
The Trainer in the middle shouted an order at the pokemon "go Raticates Hyper Fang",
"RUN NOW!" Zidane shouted to his friends, and without hesitating they ran back up the road they came down but the Raticates were in pursuit of them. They ran as quick as they could taking all the shortcuts they knew to try and loose the pokemon chasing them, the group came close to the Pokemon daycare center Zidane turned his head to check how far away the pursuing rat like creatures were, as they were closing in Zidane tripped over a large tree root and landed face first on the hard dusty ground, lifting his head he saw that his friends were no where in sight...he was on his own. The Rockets and their Raticates caught up and saw the hurt child on the floor, smirking they orders another attack on the downed boy "Raticate Tackle attack" running up towards the boy it lowered its head and smashed into his body, the force of the attack sent Zidane into a nearby tree, he screamed in pain and coughed a little blood up, the cold and heartless rockets ordered for another attack. Zidane covered his face with his arms, he expected another harsh blow to his body, but it never came...slowly he lowered his arms and saw a Houndour in front of him 'it must have came from the day care center' he thought to himself, the small black dog stood in front of the now injured boy and fought off the Raticates attacks, the attacks kept coming damaging houndour but the stubborn pokemon did not give up, it let out a deafening roar and the opposing pokemon fled in fear, it then charged into trainers sending them backwards as if telling them to leave. Outraged by being attacked on of the Rockets delivered a swift kick to the pokemon and sent it skidding across the jagged ground, the cowardly rockets then fled the scene.
The injured pokemon came to a halt in front of Zidane, battered and bloody from the battle before started whimpering at Zidane's feet. Slowly he picked up the small pokemon trying not to cause it further injury "thank you" he whispered. He ran as quick as he could to the Pokemon center in Goldenrod City and burst through the doors "Nurse Joy this Houndour is badly hurt" Zidane said breathlessly
"oh dear, what happened?" Nurse Joy replied
"some members of team rocket attacked me and this houndour came out the day care center to protect me, please you've got to help him" Zidane said tearfully
"i'll do me best" Joy said with her usual smile on her face
As she disappeared into the back of the Pokemon Center Zidane sat down on one of the many seats and began to absorb his surroundings, he could see some trainers talking on the video phones, others were eating with there Pokemon, he looked along the walls that were full of posters but one in particular grabbed his attention. It was a brightly coloured poster advertising the Hoenn League 'one day i'll be entering the Hoenn League and i'll win' he said to himself, he looked up at the shining lights and drifted off to sleep.
The next morning Nurse Joy woke him up with news about Houndour "im afraid i don't know if he's going to pull through" she said in a quiet voice "would it be alright if i spent the day with him?" Zidane questioned
"of course it would" Joy replied and she lead him into the back of the Pokemon Center. On a single bed Houndour was covered in bandages and a blanket was placed over him. Zidane was shocked at the condition of the pokemon, he sat beside Houndour and began to pet him. Hour after hour he didn't move from the ill pokemons side, he began talking "you cannot die i wont allow it, if you didn't rescue me then i mite not even be here now" tears begin to fill up his eyes "when you get better i can take you back to the day care center and you can see your trainer again" he said quietly "and we could play together and be good friends" a single tear fell onto Houndour, his eyes opened and he gave out a small bark. Zidane looked at Houndour with amazement "Nurse Joy, Nurse Joy he's awake!" he shouted, a surprised nurse Joy scurried over to the bed and took a look at houndour and said "he seems to be getting better!" with a broad smile on her face.
Two days later Zidane left his house and ran to the Pokemon Center, when he got there nurse Joy just said "go on through" knowing that he wanted to see houndour, she followed him through and said "hes well enough to leave now"
"Really?" he asked, she nodded and smiled "well lets take you home Houndour" Zidane said picking up and petting houndour. They left Goldenrod and walked town the dusty path that lead to the day care center, he knocked on the door and an old withered man emerged "can i help you" he asked
"erm, this houndor helped me out, but he was injured so i took him to the pokemon center till he was better and i thought i should return him to you" Zidane replied
"ah we were wondering where this one got too, we thought he ran away...this one was abandoned when he was a pup, his trainer left him on the doorstep so we took him in" the old man said. "Say i have an idea, since he seems to be really attached to you so why don't you keep him?" the old man said with a smile
"really?" Zidane said excitedly
"sure, i'll go fetch his pokeball" the old man disappeared into the house
"did you hear that Houndour? your going to be staying with me!" Zidane exclaimed, the small black dog gave out a small bark and closed his eyes. The old man came out with a red and white ball in his hand "here it is, now take good care of him" he said handing the pokeball to Zidane "don't worry i will!".....

::5 Years Later::

Zidane now 15 years of age has moved to Hoenn with his trusted friend Houndour they are ready to take the Hoenn League Challenge "so this is Hoenn, well our 1st stop is Littleroot Town lets go Houndour!".....

well thats it so far what do you think? if i get a good responce i'll start on Chapter 1

SilverBlaze09
April 18th, 2005, 02:54 PM
Err, not only do I have no idea what the story is(which is a good thing, I suppose), but it felt rushed, and your grammar and spelling could use some work. I advise finding a proofreader, if you don't want to do it yourself. *shrugs* For one thing, you need to capitalize the first letter in every sentence. SB

Arcanine Fan 101
April 23rd, 2005, 11:06 AM
i liked it a lot

Yami_Zidane
April 24th, 2005, 11:52 AM
ok heres the first chapter Read & Review please!!!
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Chapter 1 - Out First Battle!

'Todays the day we finally get to start training' a young trainer thought to himself, he had longish but messy brown hair, dark crimson eyes, he wore a blood red t-shirt and black trousers that were held in place by a belt and a single arm guard that was black but had a grey tint to it his name was Zidane

"Im leaving now mom" Zidane said as he was turning the door handle
"look after yourself honey and don't do anything rash!" his mother replied with a worried smile on her face, as the door was opened the sun shone through almost blinding the teen he took a step outside and detached the single pokeball from his belt he pressed a small button in the middle and the ball expanded "come on out Houndour!" Zidane thrusted the red and white ball into the air, it opened and a white light came out and formed the shape of a small dog, "well our first stop is Littleroot Town lets go Houndour!" the small pokemon barked and nodded in agreement.

They set out down a small dusty path, a small gust of wind forced some leaves upwards only to fall again as if they were dancing on the breeze. The pokemon were out in force, there was a group of Wurmple and Weedle in a bunch of trees, a flock of Tailow were flying over head, a Zigzagoon and Rattata were playfully fighting in the grass as pack of Poochyena ran past chasing a small Pidgey. As they continued down the path Zidane herd commands being issued, "sounds like a battle you want to go watch Houndour?" he asked his pokemon
"dour hound" it replied while nodding. So they ran down a small hill where there was two trainers shouting orders at there pokemon, one had a Treecko and the other had a Mudkip.

Zidane and Houndour sat at the foot of the hill and watched the battle unfold "Treecko use razor leaf" a small boy exclaimed
"Tree.....cko?" the small green pokemon said as he turned to his trainer looking confused
"Mudkip use bubblebeam!" the other trainer ordered
"Mudkip mud!" the small water pokemon said while shaking its head
'they must be rookies' Zidane thought to himself, they both then pulled out a small red device and opened it
"ah ha got it Treecko use Pound!" the trainer said looking pleased with himself, the Treecko then jumped into the air and spun its tail "Tree...cko!" shouted the pokemon as its tail struck the mudkip, it skidded across the ground
"Mudkip are you alright?" he questioned his pokemon, it nodded "ok use tackle!" the Mudkip ran at its opponent and lowered its head and collided with it. "Treeeecko" the pokemon whaled as it was forced backwards
"Treecko finish it with another pound attack!" the trainer ordered, the small green grass pokemon gave a quick shake of its head and went in for another attack, jumping in the air and swinging its body around the tail smashed the Mudkip in the face. As it flew through the air its trainer held up its pokeball "mudkip return" a red beam shot out and pulled the pokemon inside "you did good Mudkip" the trainer said
"woohoo we did it Treecko, we won!" the small boy said while jumping with excitment but his Treecko stopped celebrating and turned to the young trainer sitting with his Houndour.

Once the young boy realized that his pokemon was staring in a different direction he also turned and saw Zidane, realizing that he was being stared at Zidane rose to his feet 'i better break the silence' Zidane thought to himself "erm that was a great battle kid" he said while putting on a fake smile.
"hey why were you watching us?" the young trainer questioned
"erm...i was....just...bored...hehe" he replied while raising his arm and scratching his head
"well if your that bored how about a battle?" the trainer asked
"are you sure, you just finished a battle your pokemon could get exausted?" he replied
"were sure aren't we Treecko?" he said turning to his partner, it nodded and jumped forward
"ok then Houndour you're up, dont let me down boy" he said looking slightly worried. 'This is going to be our first trainer battle, this mite be tough " alright" said the other boy taking a seat on the ground " i love watching other battles!".....