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April 27th, 2005, 8:27 PM
Bloody Handprints

The human side to "Tiny Paws", the poem. I recommend you read that before this. I don't think it's very good. =/ It flows pretty good though lol. The creature in "Tiny Paws" is a Pichu I suppose since everyone seems to see a Pichu when they read it. =3 I did too to be honest.


As I sit on the floor

and look towards the night,

Searching for answers,

If things are alright.

The doors groans on hinges

and then you come in,

A smile of calmness

but pain held within.

Your eyes filled with wonder,

Your cheeks a pale white,

What horrible thing have you done


Your fingers are dirty,

Hands splashed with dark red,

I stare at you, puzzled,

And then I said,

"What have you done?

What sin did you do?

What terrible thing

did your Pokmon go through?"

You only laugh weakly

and point towards the sky,

Your face is now blurry,

As I stare you in the eye.

Tears cloud my vision,

You deviously smile,

For what you have done

was maliciously vile.

A bloody daggers drops

and collides with the floor,

And I knew that your Pichu

wasn't here any more.

You print bloody handprints

all over the place,

And a symbol of victory

crosses your face.

I remain apathetic,

For evil has won,

Where is God now?

For justice hasn't been done.

But the heavens are roaring,

A set of paws have come down,

You scream in surprise,

And you fall to the ground.

Your breath becomes shallow,

You then become weak,

You waste your last breath

as you let out a shriek.

I questioned this moment,

And I look towards the night,

The stars wink back,

The moon ever so bright.

I wondered what happened,

What caused you to die?

You were abusive to your creatures,

Isn't that why?

What happened to Pichu,

And where did you go?

I wiped at the tears

filled with such sadness and woe.

Nature has answered,

For the wind did tell,

Pichu went to heaven . . .

And you went to hell.

'Course we gotta end it the same way. ^_^ Comments or criticism will be greatly appreciated! Pretty bad huh? Tiny Paws was so much deeper. ><

LaTeR dAyZ!

April 27th, 2005, 9:06 PM
Need I repeat what I said on SPPF?

O_O *chucks a boulder at breezeh* ;_;

Still...in a way, this was better than Tiny Paws. More in depth and grasps you further, (AND YOU CLARIFIED THE POKEMON that got killed! Hooray~) It was touching..sad...bloody..poor Pichu. I can't write a good review now, but the poetry itself was very gripping.

..Poor Pichu. *chucks another boulder and flees again*

April 27th, 2005, 9:13 PM
It's good. I like the voice, it's like a small child trying to voice its feelings and asking why. Poor Pichu... *throws a rock at Lily*

April 28th, 2005, 3:04 PM
*gets hit by boulder* x_X

I told you, it was a typo of pickels Lileh, I swear. ^^; *plans killing of lilies next* Nah, j/k. >>; Lol.

Thanks for the reviews LIleh and JA!

April 28th, 2005, 11:10 PM
Here, I'll help you! *starts killing lilies* Oh, you said it was just a joke? *stares at all the dead flowers strewn limply on the ground*

Hiroshi Sotomura
April 28th, 2005, 11:54 PM
This was really deep, and got me pretty involved (and scared). The poor Pichu.

April 29th, 2005, 12:55 PM
Really? It was a typo of Pickles?


But that's one of my hamster names.

...You mean you killed a hamster?


JEDI is mean. ;>

April 29th, 2005, 2:46 PM
Pickels? No, that's a typo of pigeons you silly Lileh. ^^; My pigeons eat... LILIES!!! >=D J/k.

Thanks for the review Satoshi-kun btw. ^_^

April 30th, 2005, 5:12 AM
*glares @ Lily* My name's not JEDI! >_> XD

Lilyyyyyyyyyyyy, I thought of a name for our story............. "To Kill Lilies and Pichus".... j/k, I did think of one though XD