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Yetsu
May 9th, 2005, 01:37 PM
Title: Dedication

Author: Chibi/Yetsu

In the chapel of my baptism
Beside the alter where we pray
The audience watches us exchange our vows
Of love, priviledge, and eternity
I give you half of my soul, devote to you my life
And in sickness and in health
In poverty and in wealth
Until death do us part
I offer to you my heart

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No, I am not married, nor in love. XD

Kyosuke
May 9th, 2005, 02:49 PM
Those wedding vows are pretty good ^^, I like the words that you used, and the way you portrayed that two people are in a church, about to get married.

I enjoyed it ^^'.

Miyu-chan
May 9th, 2005, 02:53 PM
That's such a sweet poem! =3 Short but sweet notheless. n__n

Great job. =3 It's so sweet~ <3

Midori Chi
May 9th, 2005, 03:29 PM
I like it! It's very sweet! Miyu's right though...it's a little short...Out of 5, I give you...a.. 3 too! ^_^

Yetsu
May 9th, 2005, 03:58 PM
Wait, what's wrong with it being short?

MewMagicianChi
May 10th, 2005, 09:26 AM
Doesen't matter if its short or long, I loved it! I give it a 5/5! :D

Yetsu
May 18th, 2005, 09:45 AM
Heh heh... Huzzah...! XD Dun forget to check out my other works!

Natsuki
May 18th, 2005, 05:59 PM
Awwwwws, that's really cute! ^o^ I have to say though...I hate going to weddings. XD It's not the fact that people are joining together in everlasting love - I adore that part. XD They're just boring as hell. x_X;;

But your poem was very nice! Good job Yetsu. ^.~

~Kelsey

Yetsu
May 28th, 2005, 09:07 AM
Thanks so much, Typhlozion. I replied to that comment you sent to my other poem, as well. The one in "Sober"? If you wanna check it out.