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lilbluecorsola
June 6th, 2005, 05:49 PM
I just wrote this right now because I felt like writing and I haven't been wanting to continue my One-Shot series for some time. I know it's bad, and I'd hoped it would be better, but meh.

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Tappity tap tap.



Tap tap tap.



Tap.

A pair of dark chocolate eyes paused and returned to the beginning of the first line, scanning the words intently in order to catch any mistakes her still unskilled fingers might have made. They too had halted their movement across the keyboard; eight fingertips delicately perched upon the home row, poised to resume flight should any corrections be necessary. That was what she checking for, for her first ever forum post must be perfect, she decided.

After some thought, the tiniest finger belonging to her right hand made a swift movement up and to the right slightly, applying some pressure to the large rectangular button it now hovered over. A few symbols on the luminous screen that stood opposite her half-lit face disappeared steadily from right to left, one after the other. Following that, the eight fingers elongated and bent themselves in rapid tempo and in the correct pattern to allow another set of symbols to take the vanished words place. It was a better one, she thought. Much better than the word she had just Deleted.

Pulling away slightly so as to examine the block of text she had typed up better, her eyes, shimmering in the half-light, performed one final check for any spelling errors they might spot. At last, assured that there were none, the girl gave a nod of approval. Satisfied with her work, she removed her right hand from the keyboard once again, and this time it moved quite a distance before coming to rest on a grey object nearby. It was situated upon a pitch black pad with some design underneath, and the thing itself sprouted a cord which attached itself somewhere in the back of a whirring piece of machinery that stood nearby. The object, called a Mouse, bulged to allow for the curvature of her hand, so that her palm settled comfortably on top, and let her pointer and middle finger rest on the two buttons that sat side by side near the top of the Mouse.

The girls arm pushed forward, and the Mouse slid across the mat with ease. As she did so, a small white arrow on the screen moved simultaneously, and she positioned it so that it hovered above a pixelated button marked Post.

Her rosy lips curled into a faint smile, and her pointer finger exerted a minor amount of strength in order to lower the left Mouse button, producing a satisfying clicking sound. At that same moment, the screen button gained a dashed border and appeared to imbed itself into the page. The screen flashed white for a second, and then the color soon returned. No longer was her message in a mere white box, it was on a colored background, and displayed for all to see.

The girl grinned in ecstasy, and, without bothering to wait and see the publics reaction, began at once to type up another reply to post within her own thread. New ideas were bursting into her mind with each passing second, and she refused to allow a single one escape. In her excitement, she failed to notice a small clickable item in the corner labeled Edit.

She breathed a sigh as her fingers performed the last necessary stroke. Not even proofreading this time, she went ahead and posted it, and waited with eager anticipation for the blank screen to clear. Her eyes lit up with joy upon seeing messages in between the first and her latest. Someone had replied!

With much enthusiasm, her eyes sped over the foreign lines, hungrily digesting every word. As she gradually began to fully comprehend their meaning though, her expression turned abruptly from delight to horror. Fearing there was some mistake, she scrolled upwards and read them once again, biting her lips in anxiety. The words were still the same, and their meaning was clear. Her thread was stupid. She was stupid, and nothing but.

Bewildered and distressed, the girl slumped back in her seat. Was it true? Did they really mean it? Was she nothing but a stupid little girl, as their words led her to believe?

Her eyes narrowed as the truth slowly dawned upon her. Yes, they had said that, but that didnt mean it was true. She sat up straight and stiff with a rigid, determined expression set on her face. Furiously she attacked the keys on her keyboard. Shed show them who were stupid!

She laughed at them, shot back insults, ridiculed them. She was determined to make them realize that they were in the wrong. But the degrading responses just kept flooding in, and at last, she realized with a horrible wrenching sensation, that she was all alone.

At this point, the tears were coming to her eyes. With one last desperate attempt to redeem herself after all the trouble shed caused, she appealed to the members amid sobs. She blamed her lack of knowledge on her newbie status, and implored that they forgive her for her disgraceful actions. Some ignored her, others jeered at her, and most left in the end, feeling satisfied that theyd done a good job keeping their lovely Forum SPAM-free. One seemingly kindly soul remained and acquitted her, but it was of little use. Feeling ashamed and upset, she tore her tearing eyes away from the screen, and reached for the buttons that would shut down her computer. The screen went black, and she stood up and purposefully walked away. She never returned to that Forum again.

The next few days she spent in denial. She mentioned carelessly to her brother how she had enraged all the members of the first Forum she had been to, with her very first post, but made no comment other than that. And yet, the pain she had felt that night still stung for a long time to come, and those words she remembered echoed within her mind for many nights after that, as she lay in bed, trying desperately to fall asleep despite.

Even a thing she had once loved no longer brought joy to her life. No, now that she had made a fool of herself because of it, she could no longer bear to even glimpse the Pok幦on television show. If she happened to switch to that particular channel while it was airing, she couldnt even bring herself to remain there for one minute. She would immediately change to some other station, for just seeing the characters that she had incorporated in her foolish theory reminded her of the agony that it had earned her. This went on for days, weeks, and even months. And every night, the same contemptuous statements returned to haunt her mind, whilst she huddled miserably beneath her sheets, staring blankly up at the ceiling, and silently wishing death upon all those that had scorned her.

Though as they say, Time heals everything.

Half a year had passed, and she barely remembered the hurtful events that had occurred not all too long ago. Indeed, she had even registered to another Forum, a different one this time. One by the name of Serebii.net. And here she was again, merrily typing up her first thread for posting. Things were a little different this time, however. Shed spent nearly a month merely watching and observing the way the board and its members functioned, preparing herself and her work for the day when she too would join their fun. Now that day had come.

With nervous glances, her pair of deep chocolate eyes scanned the text once more. It seemed all right. Whether it really was or wasnt, though, was up to her readers.

Shakily, her hand reached for the mouse, and moved her cursor so that it hovered over the button inscribed Submit New Thread. There was a click, both buttons sank, and the screen turned blank. A moment later, the page returned as a thread viewable by all. This time, instead of pure text, some small, blocky images were scattered throughout, artwork she had created for the viewing pleasure of her audience. Supposedly she would received some nice compliments as well, but since the last time, shed learned not to get her hopes too high up.

She backed up a few pages, and waited impatiently for what seemed a sufficient amount of time. Both with dread and eager anticipation, she hit the Refresh button, and waited

There. Beside the thread entitled My First Sprites(Most of them anyway), there was a Post Count, and the number had upped from 0 to 1.

Almost disbelieving at first, she hastily returned to the page that showcased her art and scrolled down to the bottom of the page. Yes, it was there, plain as day. A reply! Carefully, cautiously, she scanned the lines posted in response to her own, and her lips cracked into a wide beam as she did so. They liked it! They really liked her sprites! The ones shed worked on for a month!

Too overjoyed to react for a while, lilbluecorsola reclined in her chair and savored the words for another minute or so. So, this was what acceptance felt like.

It felt good.

At last, remembering that she should be polite and thank her critic, she moved her cursor over to the button marked Post Reply, and, still smiling, began typing up a reply.

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Yes, this is a true story. Yes, I hope this will be able to open some eyes to what a N00b experiences, despite its horridness. Yes, I know I was much too sensitive for letting such paltry remarks get to me. No, I don't want to hear your views on whether it's right to flame N00bs. Got it? Good.

Natsuki
June 6th, 2005, 06:31 PM
Wow, this was an absolutely wonderful story lilbluecorsola! ^____^I have to say, I adored every second of it. :33 Your descriptions were fantastic and just the whole idea of the story was stupendous. ^__^

I really loved the part where the young girl decided to join another forum and got really good replies to her thread rather than the scornful and degrading ones as she had recieved before. ^^

Awesome job lilbluecorsola, this story was both original, fun, as well as letting loose a valuable lesson of which I hope other readers will be able to comprehend. ^____^

~Kelsey

pirategirl92
June 6th, 2005, 06:31 PM
I like it! It's awesome! And such a wonderful idea!

Lily
June 7th, 2005, 12:43 PM
A bit thought provoking and sad.

Nevertheless, a great, original accomplishment. Good job. ^^

Miyu-chan
June 7th, 2005, 01:34 PM
Such a wonderful story, loved your first sentence. =) The plot was superb, as well as making it into a happy ending.

The description was wonderful, I could feel the protagonist's feelings with every word. Great job, and original as well. n__n

lilbluecorsola
June 7th, 2005, 03:23 PM
Wow, this was an absolutely wonderful story lilbluecorsola! ^____^I have to say, I adored every second of it. :33 Your descriptions were fantastic and just the whole idea of the story was stupendous. ^__^

I really loved the part where the young girl decided to join another forum and got really good replies to her thread rather than the scornful and degrading ones as she had recieved before. ^^

Awesome job lilbluecorsola, this story was both original, fun, as well as letting loose a valuable lesson of which I hope other readers will be able to comprehend. ^____^

~Kelsey

You thought the descriptions were good? XP I didn't. Gosh, I'm rusty after not writing for so long... >.>

Yep, it's fortunate it turned out to be a happy ending after all. =) I don't know where I'd be right now if I hadn't (re)discovered Forums and the (friendly) members who belong to them.

Fun? o.O; I don't know about that, but thanks for all the other compliments! =D *Supa Lolly for your excellent review*

I like it! It's awesome! And such a wonderful idea!

Thanks loff! (^.^) *Lolly*

A bit thought provoking and sad.

Nevertheless, a great, original accomplishment. Good job. ^^

XD That was the point.

Thanks Lili. =) *Lolly*

Such a wonderful story, loved your first sentence. =) The plot was superb, as well as making it into a happy ending.

The description was wonderful, I could feel the protagonist's feelings with every word. Great job, and original as well. n__n

Thanks, I love it too. <3 (XD)

And why shouldn't it be a happy ending? (^.^) This whole story was the exact truth. (Though I might have forgotten/exaggerated some things. I prefer not to dwell on painful memories, even though I know I shouldn't just run away from them.)

Thanks for all your comments. =D *Supa Lolly*

Dark Mage
June 7th, 2005, 05:12 PM
It was weally beautiful... really. Although I spent 4 months looking at n00bs get flamed, but meh.

lilbluecorsola
June 7th, 2005, 05:28 PM
It was weally beautiful... really. Although I spent 4 months looking at n00bs get flamed, but meh.

Heh, that's why I wrote this. XP Do you know better now? Do you? Huh? Huh?! 8D

*cough* Thanks for the reply. (^.^) *Lolly*

BeAuTiFuL mAy
July 7th, 2005, 01:23 PM
It was just... wow. It shows the pain the person felt and the emotions rushing when she posted. Good job! :classic:

Allstories
July 7th, 2005, 05:54 PM
A bit overly-descriptive at times, even given the circumstances, but a clever idea. Nice job.

Cherrim
July 7th, 2005, 06:26 PM
Wow... just wow. o_o It brought me back to my earlier days and the hot embarassment that followed when I made a mistake in posting. ^^;; The story was also quite thought-provoking... I'm glad to have read it, because I think now that I've become so accustomed to forums, I forget what it's like to be a "newbie" and to not have years of experience with message boards.

Anyway, that aside, it was very well written. I love your ability to describe things. ^_^; Stories like this never cease to amaze me quite simply because I just don't have the talent for it. You've got a great sense for words. :) Nice job!

*backs slowly out of the writing forum... as it kind of intimidates her* XD;

Charizard_Fire_God
July 8th, 2005, 05:19 AM
Tch. Nice work as always lilblue. ^_^
Ya manage ta capture an' portray emotions with such ease... ^_^

Usohachii_Pot
July 9th, 2005, 11:35 AM
Oh god...now I actually feel sorry for n00-I mean, newbs....

And why can't people just fricking leave us alone? We didn't mock them.
*pants*

Sorry about that, I take my Pokemon very seriously....

Melody
July 9th, 2005, 12:35 PM
Wonderful!, it perfectly captures the state one is in when he/she is a noob.
it reminds me of my early noob days...

lilbluecorsola
July 10th, 2005, 06:23 PM
It was just... wow. It shows the pain the person felt and the emotions rushing when she posted. Good job! :classic:

Hee, thanks for the comments. =)

*Lolly*

A bit overly-descriptive at times, even given the circumstances, but a clever idea. Nice job.

^^; Yeah, I put way too much description in this one. I completed this after a long period of not writing, so I think I was trying to prove to myself that I could still describe. XD

Thanks for reviewing. *Lolly*

Wow... just wow. o_o It brought me back to my earlier days and the hot embarassment that followed when I made a mistake in posting. ^^;; The story was also quite thought-provoking... I'm glad to have read it, because I think now that I've become so accustomed to forums, I forget what it's like to be a "newbie" and to not have years of experience with message boards.

Anyway, that aside, it was very well written. I love your ability to describe things. ^_^; Stories like this never cease to amaze me quite simply because I just don't have the talent for it. You've got a great sense for words. :) Nice job!

*backs slowly out of the writing forum... as it kind of intimidates her* XD;

Wow, really? 8D I didn't think it was that good, but... Thanks a lot! XD *Supa Lolly*

Tch. Nice work as always lilblue. ^_^
Ya manage ta capture an' portray emotions with such ease... ^_^

Heh, thanks. =) I like to think emotions are my strong point. *Lolly*

Oh god...now I actually feel sorry for n00-I mean, newbs....

And why can't people just fricking leave us alone? We didn't mock them.
*pants*

Sorry about that, I take my Pokemon very seriously....

Tch. >.> I don't mind the term, 'N00bs'. It's just how people treat them that bugs me.

And I'm not exactly sure what you're getting at... Meh.

Wonderful!, it perfectly captures the state one is in when he/she is a noob.
it reminds me of my early noob days...

^^; Well, it was actually a little exaggerated, but yeah...

Thanks for commenting. *Lolly*

Usohachii_Pot
July 11th, 2005, 10:42 AM
Don't mind me, this is the longest psychotic break I've ever been on.

Chase Leader
July 15th, 2005, 09:39 PM
Let me tell you one thing, every writer critiques his/her own work way to harshly even if its great, you may have been rusty but it was pretty good.

A teacher once told me, you will never have a final draft in your history of writing because there is something that can always be improved...saying this your work was great even if it was "too descriptive" or whatever it was fantastic for just making it up on the spot.

SBaby
July 16th, 2005, 10:45 AM
This should go to every single forum you visit. It's a definite eye-opener.

lilbluecorsola
July 16th, 2005, 01:40 PM
Let me tell you one thing, every writer critiques his/her own work way to harshly even if its great, you may have been rusty but it was pretty good.

A teacher once told me, you will never have a final draft in your history of writing because there is something that can always be improved...saying this your work was great even if it was "too descriptive" or whatever it was fantastic for just making it up on the spot.

XP I know, I know. My brother always says that when I start hitting my head with my sketchbook. *sigh*

Thank you for your encouragement though. =) I haven't been in a particularly good mood lately, which is partly because I feel I can't produce anything worthwhile anymore, so this cheered me up some.

*Supa Lolly*

This should go to every single forum you visit. It's a definite eye-opener.

It is on every forum I visit. =O

*Lolly*

Kylie-chan
July 17th, 2005, 01:32 AM
I like that. I think it describes exactly what a n00b feels. It's alright for us to go "lyk u sux0rz" but it really is offending. =/ Public awareness pwnz. Although one thing that annoyed me was the clich chocolate eyes. ^^; *hypocrite* And the fact you used it twice.
RayquazaX, that's sheer SPAM and I reported it as such.

lilbluecorsola
July 17th, 2005, 09:58 AM
Bravo!!!!!!!!!!Bravo Cla'p Claps *Are those Claps?* YAY YAH PART-AY!

Um, thanks... =/ But could you say why you liked it so much?

I like that. I think it describes exactly what a n00b feels. It's alright for us to go "lyk u sux0rz" but it really is offending. =/ Public awareness pwnz. Although one thing that annoyed me was the clich chocolate eyes. ^^; *hypocrite* And the fact you used it twice.
RayquazaX, that's sheer SPAM and I reported it as such.

That's a clich? o.O; I never knew that. Darn, now I'll have to think of something else to say. I always used the term 'dark chocolate eyes' for myself because they really don't look like brown unless you look at them very closely. From afar they look like black, but I don't want to give the impression that they're completely black...

Blah, enough rambling. I'll think of something. =) Thanks for letting me know! *Supa Lolly*