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Davey-kun
June 7th, 2005, 12:28 PM
This is just a short one, hope u liek, comment and enjoy.

Admit it

I find it so ****,
that i cant admit,
about the way that i feel,
when im with you, i just kneel,
bow down to your majesty,
and say that im just glad to see,
you in all of your beauty,
you say that im such a cutey,
but inside im so bitter,
im like a dropped peice of litter,
like i have knowhere to go,
i just go with the flo.

<<-_Lord-Krishna_->>
June 7th, 2005, 12:35 PM
Its good I think you should make it rhyme just a bit more ^^

Davey-kun
June 7th, 2005, 12:36 PM
Ryme more?!?!?!!? wota u meana? every two lines ryme,

<<-_Lord-Krishna_->>
June 7th, 2005, 12:42 PM
I guess but thats just me

gHoSt_lUgIa
June 17th, 2005, 08:56 AM
davey chan it was good for real...but you dont have to follow a constant rhyme patter ( example: AbAb ) you can always switch it up like this

You cheated on me / when i believed you would be my only / the one speakin boldly / now you act like you dont wanna even hold me / and since i started takin up for my emotions you actin as if you dont even know me / you fooled me you tricked me / i remember how you used to be, sh1t you done pulled a 360 / so rest a deep six feet / with his touch / his love / i dont give a phuck / yeah i got over im not cryn / but when you see i done faded away dont come to me cryn, not this time/

i went a lil out of hand but see what i mean you dont nesserclly have to follow a specific pattern is what i think DZ is tryn to say....... but anyways it dont matter to me i believe if you can make it rhyme and get ya feelins out then you a artist any ways peace

maddy1
June 26th, 2005, 02:18 AM
ok ok howz this


look at ma body all batterd and bruised but I dont think that really mattters to you you should just look down at your shoes they dont even belong to you every once ina while people have to choose will it be me or you who knows?