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~Black Moonlight~
June 13th, 2005, 06:59 PM
K I'm sorry for making another poem thread but my other has not been posted in in so long I can't even find it, so here's my new one, I'm gonna be posting my writing and poems here so just to tell ya.

my first one on this thread is a poem I thought up about 1 or 2 years ago, and just now found it again:

whats inside is what counts

Ya Gotta find your inner strength,
if ya can't then just give your life away.
You gotta rely on yourself no one else,
ya gotta learn how to live with yourself,
it's what's on the inside that counts.
Your gonna lead a life with doubts,
but you've gotta deal with that too.
Cuzz in the end all you've got is you.
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oh and I know the words aren't well perfect like: Ya, cuzz, ect. and it's supposed to be like that, so post your thoughts on it.

Caroline
June 14th, 2005, 02:07 AM
For some reason it reminds me of Hilary Duff's song, Inner Strength. I don't know why.... but it reminds me of it. =)

Good job though.

~Black Moonlight~
June 14th, 2005, 05:02 AM
lol thanks for the complement, do you have any advice cuzz I'm open to it.

~Black Moonlight~
June 14th, 2005, 03:53 PM
K I'm sorry for the double post peoples, but I made a new poem and I didn't think anyone would see the new post here if I edited it, so here it is:

Confusion

I'm falling apart,
not knowing,
wether to stay or go.
Leaving here,
Is so hard,
This life is worth living in,
not able to win,
not able to lose,
nothing is right,
everything is wrong,
I'm not sure who to be,
Or who to become,
But I know this,
I'm always me...

EDIT:
k I have another aswell.

You Remind Me Of A Time

You remind me of a time, when things were bright.
The time when I was young, and had a lot to live for.
You showed me the meaning of love.
And I looked at you twice.

Now those are distant memories, their meaning absurd.
Nothing brings that sense back to me, what is there to live for?
You showed me the meaning of trust.
And I took it for granted.

You left me for nothing, and took everything from me.
I can't understand why, what did I do?
You showed me the meaning of true happiness.
Yet I never took notice....

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k post your thoughts.

Caroline
June 14th, 2005, 11:16 PM
You continue to make excellent poems, Black Moonlight.
Confusion was my favourite out of the two, and I must say you are able to really show what you are trying to say in the poems that you write.

I don't really have any advice to give you since you do such a brilliant job already! =)

Keep up with the great work.

~Black Moonlight~
June 19th, 2005, 06:27 PM
Thanks I will, oh and I don't really have a poem at the moment but when I think of one I'll post it k? once again thanks for the complements!! ^^